Composition: Taking "Getting out of my own little world" as the topic (800 words)

When you are living in the world, you need to pay attention to yourself, but it must not be just "self", because everyone cannot be an independent individual. People can live and grow better only if they step out of the narrow world of "self", fully pay attention to others, pay attention to society, pay attention to nature, and create a healthy and harmonious living environment. Please write an article of about 600 words on the topic of "Getting out of your own little world". Full score essay 1: God's Beloved - New Biography of Dong Shi I, Dong Shi, will go down in history with an ugly name. But for thousands of years, I have been very depressed and unhappy! In other words, ever since that day, I imitated the beautiful girl next door, Xi Shi, frowning, holding her heart up, and looking sick, and was ridiculed by people at that time. They even created an idiom "Tong Shi imitates the frown" and gave it to me, and I couldn't leave. Husband, I shed tears all day long. (However, even though I didn’t want tea or food, I didn’t lose weight.) I don’t understand that when Xi Shi is so sick, I feel pity for the stinky men and show great compassion and heroic feelings as a man. As for me, I just studied and imitated it a little bit, but why did it cause so much dissatisfaction and ridicule? I know, because I had an ugly face and was extremely depressed! I can't help but blame my parents for their carelessness and God for his injustice. God must have been distracted when he created me, otherwise why would my facial features be so rough and misaligned! I must settle accounts with God! Strong thoughts occupied my heart, and I decided to seek judgment from God at all costs and regain everything I had lost! After waiting for thousands of years, I finally flew into space on the "Shenzhou 10" manned spacecraft and flew to God's "Palace of Peace". God’s home is not so beautiful as to be described in words! Although I was jealous and envious, I had no intention of lingering and went straight to the "Hall of Paradise". Hey, who is that old man sitting in the garden with his eyes closed and meditating? , is God! So, I straightened my clothes, walked forward, coughed, and said, "God, you are so leisurely! Why don't you go to the people to experience the suffering? I, Dong Shi, grew up like this because of your negligence. You have to make the decision for me when I have suffered so much from people's eyes and ridicules." As I said this, I couldn't help but feel sad, and my clothes were wet with tears. God opened his eyes, looked at me with a smile, and listened to me. After I finished my accusation, he slowly said: "My poor child, you have been living in the eyes of everyone for so many years. You have lost yourself and at the same time weaved a cage of self-restraint. , you have never discovered your own advantages and shining points from yourself!" Then God slowly said: "Everything in the world has its own value. You see, in this garden, the grass is not as beautiful as the flowers. But if there is no grass, the beauty of flowers will not be highlighted. As for you, don't imitate others, don't envy others, quickly get out of this small world of yours, find your strengths and advantages, help others, and serve the world, you will reap the rewards. Get the love and respect that people deserve!" After saying that, God waved his sleeves and closed his eyes again to rest. After listening to God’s words, I froze there... After returning from God, I reflected on myself and examined myself. I have a strong body and plenty of strength, so after finishing my work in the fields, I can also help my neighbor Grandma Li’s family; I have a graceful singing voice, and when I sing, I not only enjoy myself, but also give back to the spirit of labor. People enjoyed it with joy, ah, I also walked on the stage of the Avenue of Stars; I have bright eyes, the embroidered flowers I made can attract butterflies to fly, and I was shortlisted for the international award... Haha, I laughed. Chang Kai, I stepped out of my own little world and was interviewed by various media. I am no longer synonymous with ugliness, I am the embodiment of personality and the representative of women in the new era. On this day, I received a greeting card from heaven: "You are my darling - Angel Dong Shi, congratulations to you!" Famous teacher comments: After reading this excellent work in the examination room, people can't help laughing, but also have to close the book and think deeply. , worth savoring. This composition adopts a new story-writing method to express the topic. It must be said that it is a bold innovation of the young author, and it is successful. The article uses the well-known story of "Dong Shi imitating Xian" as an entry point to weave Dong Shi's distress and anger due to his ugly appearance, so that he wanted to question God. Later, he was enlightened and inspired by God to reflect on himself and get out of the small world of self-restraint. The story of realizing the value of life vividly illustrates the connotation of the topic. The young author travels through time and space, has a unique imagination, and uses stories without falling into the trap (the image of God is not sacred but very humane); the young author is good at laying out, trying his best to exaggerate Dong Shi's distress and injustice, and prepares for the changes in the plot below. potential. The language of the article, such as "original", "cutie" and "Shenzhou No. 10", is humorous and vivid, and is full of the characteristics of the times. 2009 Shandong Linyi High School Entrance Examination Full Score Essay Title: "Out of My Little World" is the topic of the full score essay 2: Highlights: True Confession to Grow Up Courageously, Mom, I’m Leaving - Confession of a Seed, Dear Mom, I’m leaving, I want to get out of my own little world. , to see such a big world. Mother.

Don't blame Uncle Feng for taking me away. I left, chose my own path, and wandered around. People say, "When parents are here, we don't have to travel far." But I left your warm embrace and no longer loved you! Mom, under your nurturing, I have grown up; my flying wings are gradually getting stronger, and my wandering thoughts occupy my entire heart. Mom, I want to realize it! In spring, in your warm heart, I have the desire to visit the outside world. So, in the call of the spring breeze, in the baptism of the spring rain, in the caress of the spring sun, I stuck my head out on your branch. ah! Green grass, fragrant flowers, thawing lake water, flying butterflies, singing birds...all of this is so beautiful and vibrant! Seeing these scenes, I felt more energetic, so I stretched my waist to make myself grow bigger, and even bloomed small but beautiful flowers to add a bit of color to the spring. In the hot summer, the sun has lost the charm and gentleness of spring, and is like a vicious witch, roasting us vigorously. I become listless, shrugging my shoulders and drooping my ears, and feel frightened. In order to withstand the power of the sun and the attacks of violent storms, I had to keep absorbing nutrients and water from you, trying to make myself stronger. Finally, I shook off the scattered petals, and the remaining calyx was full. The nectar of life, I turned into a small fruit standing on the branch! Autumn is a season of farewell. Uncle Feng has brought wonderful things from afar. My heart has become restless. Mom, I want to get out of this small world under your protection and wander far away. In that distant place, I will settle down and no longer wander. Mom, please don’t be sad! In the spring of next year, maybe I will take root and sprout in the desolate desert and build another home, where there will be infinite vitality because of my arrival; maybe I will take root and sprout on the steep cliff and build another home where there will be Because of my arrival, infinite scenery will be added; maybe I will take root beside the busy road and build another home, where there will be less dust due to my arrival; maybe... Mom, please don't miss me, please don't worry about me. , under your upbringing, I have become strong enough, I can adapt to harsh environments, I can resist wind, frost, rain and snow. I believe that when I step out of my own small world, I will be able to create a new world. Mom, I'm leaving, leaving with love and hope to realize my dream. Dear mother, when the first ray of sunshine in the morning shines on the sky and earth again, please don't get up early to kiss your child, he has gone , you will never find him again! Maybe he will appear in the poet's hymn, maybe he will appear in the photographer's work, maybe he will appear in people's words - then, please be proud of him! Comments from famous teachers: This is an excellent examination piece with a unique style, which is eye-catching and touching. 1. The method of expressing one's ambitions by supporting things. The article uses a seed to symbolize teenagers, and uses the growth of a seed to vividly express the growth process of teenagers, expressing the ideal of teenagers to bravely step out of their own small world, enter a new world, and create a new life. Be original and outperform others. 2. Use the first person, true confession method, and express your heart directly. The article is touching with emotion. It contains not only the reluctance and remembrance of leaving my mother, but also the strong desire to see the outside world, dedicate oneself and create a new life. There are repeated calls to mothers in the article. The love between children is strong, but they are also high-spirited. People can't help but sigh, "A ruthless person may not be a true hero"! 3. The theme is profound and the intention is lofty. The article not only shows the bravery and determination of young friends, but also praises the spirit of selfless dedication. The concluding paragraph is actually a visual tribute to this dedication, deepens the theme, and adds brightness to the article. 4. The language is beautiful, fluent, sincere and touching. The article uses metaphors, personification, and especially a large number of parallel sentences, which makes the article lively and elegant. 2009 Shandong Linyi High School Entrance Examination Full Score Essay Topic: "Get Out of My Little World" Full Score Essay 3: Highlights: Create situations, break through constraints, and let dreams fly. Light shines on the mirror, and the mirror gathers and refracts it on me. I shuttled back and forth in this small world made of light beams, weaving uncertain youthful dreams. ——Inscription On a dark moonless night, I was walking under the shadow of a lamp when I suddenly smelled a strange and sad atmosphere. Depression ensues. I really want to grow up and go through this boring and boring cardamom years. I used the window as a mirror, and an ordinary figure appeared in front of me. His face was covered with acne and his figure was out of shape. Hey, he looked like an ugly duckling! Suddenly I seemed to hear a voice calling from a distant place, and I hurriedly looked back. I was stunned by the beautiful sight in front of me, shooting stars, ah, shooting stars! I wanted to make a beautiful wish, but the time to make the wish passed quietly in surprise. The shooting stars cut through the boundless night sky and disappeared at the end of the sky.

I shed tears unconsciously, fearing that this fragile and self-pitying heart would be broken into these falling tears. I regret this evanescent and short-lived beauty. Should my life be so bright again? Have I ever experienced such brilliance? I was imprisoned in a cage of low self-esteem and couldn't find a way out. My heart aches to the point of numbness, confusion, and pain that makes me feel overwhelmed. I just sat in front of the window for a long, long time... I don't know how long it took, but the dawn opened my sleepy eyes. I took a deep breath of the fresh air outside the window, walked to the mirror, stretched my arms, and took a long stretch. I, who was still extremely ordinary, suddenly showed a strange smile, and the image of me in the mirror suddenly seemed to brighten up, like a butterfly fluttering its wings, full of passion and vitality for growth. The moment when the meteors illuminated the night sky suddenly appeared in front of my eyes... Without saying anything, I opened my palms and carefully held the golden sunshine. I bent my hands into a heart shape and looked at the mirror. , to myself! Let dreams fly. I live in my own little world. Sadness and inferiority are my clothes. One day, the dawn shines on me, shattering my sadness. So I spread my wings, rush out of my cell and let the silk Silk sunshine weaves new dreams, I spread my wings and fly, and walk with my dreams! ——Postscript Comments from famous teachers: The young author of this excellent examination work is good at creating situations and describing them in detail. 1. We can think of the article as two pictures frozen in a movie lens. One picture has a dark tone and a dull atmosphere, showing a depressed, hesitant, and inferior "self"; the other picture has a bright tone and passionate emotions, showing A "self" full of energy and passion, reborn, with sharp contrast, vividly expresses the topic of "getting out of your own little world". 2. We can regard young authors as masters of "stream of consciousness" writing. The article uses delicate brushstrokes to describe every move of "I", and also describes my own psychological activities in large sections. The description object is single, but the writing method is flexible and there is no sense of repetition. 3. We admire the ingenuity of the young author's conception. The title and postscript of the article echo each other, making the article seamless. The feelings in the inscription appear to be lonely and depressed, while the poem in the postscript summarizes the full text, adds the finishing touch, and expresses the positive spirit of realizing the value of life.