Application of modifying sick sentences

1, changed to: The main consumers of Emei Mountain mineral water are compatriots from Hong Kong, Macao and Taiwan and foreigners who come to visit. 2. It is revised as follows: The factory received the notice of "holding the training for the chief of quality inspection department (room)" and sent Comrade Zhang to attend the training before March 15. 3. It is changed to: After the implementation of the relevant documents of the Central Committee, the phenomenon of slack discipline has been obviously changed. 4. Change it to: organizational behavior, which is strange to our young secretarial workers. 5. Change it to: 1999, make-up exam for the whole school 1530, 655 in 2000, and the number of make-up exams in 2000 decreased by 875 compared with 1999. 6. At the symposium, you talked about the experience of scientific management, and I talked about the steps of deepening reform, which inspired and educated us deeply. 7. Change to: The salary of foreign experts should generally be higher than the salary during the probation period. 8. It is changed to: By the end of the year, all the tasks set by a factory for the superior have been completed. 9 is revised as: The leaders have carefully studied this issue and put forward their opinions. 1' s composition is incomplete: for example, "I have done a lot of good things for my class." It is not clear who has done many good deeds.

Improper use of words: for example, "he is calm and arbitrary." "Arbitrary" is a derogatory term and should be changed to "decisive".

(3) Improper collocation of words: For example, "At the party, we heard sweet songs and beautiful dances." "Hearing" and "beautiful dance" obviously can't be matched, but should be changed to "At the party, we heard sweet songs and saw beautiful dances."

The word order is reversed: for example, "China people are very interested in me." The positions of "Chinese" and "I" are reversed and should be changed to "I am very interested in Chinese."

5. Inconsistency: For example, "I think he must be mistaken about this question." The first half of the sentence is not sure enough, and the second half is sure that he is wrong, so there is a contradiction. What happened? People don't understand. It can be changed to "I guess he made a mistake in this question" or "I conclude that he made a mistake in this question."

[6] Repetition: For example, "He rushed into the classroom and happily announced the good news of going for a spring outing tomorrow." Both "excited" and "cheerful" in the sentence indicate that he is very happy, so one of them can be deleted.

(7) unreasonable unreasonable: for example, "The rice is ripe, the fields are green, and there is a bumper harvest scene." Rice is golden when it is ripe, but this sentence describes it as green and unreasonable.

(8) The concept is unclear: for example, "The Great Wall of Wan Li, the Palace Museum and the Nanjing Yangtze River Bridge are historical sites that Chinese and foreign tourists yearn for." The "Nanjing Yangtze River Bridge" here is not a "monument", and the concept of ownership is unclear. It should be changed to "The Great Wall of Wan Li and the Palace Museum are historical sites that Chinese and foreign tourists yearn for."

(9) unclear quotation: For example, "Huang Hong and Zhao Yan went to Dengxianlou Mountain together, but she climbed faster than her, and she climbed to the top of Xianlou first." There are two "she" in the sentence, which is Huang Hong's fast climber and which is Zhao Yan's fast climber? The reference is unknown. It should be changed to "... she climbed faster than Yan Hui, and she climbed to the top of Xianlou first ... Huang Hong climbed faster than her, and Huang Hong climbed to the top of Xianlou first."

(10) Misuse of related words, such as "Huangshan Mountain is not only a place with beautiful scenery, but I really want to see it." This sentence does not constitute a progressive relationship, but a causal relationship. Therefore, we should change the related words "not only ... but ..." to "because ..."; Another example is "Only by studying hard can you get good grades." In the sentence "only ..."