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I hope you are satisfied with O(∩_∩)O A's fresh summer. In the summer afternoon of a candidate in Dezhou, Shandong Province, cicadas were singing like weaving, and I was at home alone to tidy up my desk. A photo suddenly fell from an old book, and I bent down to pick it up ... tears penetrated into my eyes again, blurring my vision. Hey, I don't know how you are now. In the photo, your smile is still bright, as warm as the winter sunshine. The sea breeze blows your hair, and it seems that it still exudes a faint fragrance. You are warm, lively and free in the sun. Remember what you said when you left: "I really want to leave the most beautiful side to my best friend." When I said, "The happiest time in the world is when I get along with my friends!" "Then, you sobbed. I was puzzled and puzzled. That day, I was still waiting for you to go to school at the intersection. Every minute, I feel that I have been waiting for spring, summer, autumn and winter, and you have been there. I have tasted the long and loneliness of your company for the first time. After that, your life is monotonous and your journey is lonely. I don't know how many times I have been to Sanqiu, but I received your letter. In your letter, you said, "please forgive me for leaving without saying goodbye, but I just don't want to see the sad scene of parting ... by the way, I sent a photo I took at the seaside, and I think this photo can help me bring you a refreshing summer." "I cried this time, and I regretted it. I should be able to detect your abnormal behavior. Grandma said that she grew up streaking together, just like twin sisters. Now, time and space have opened the distance between them. Where are you now? Do you still remember that small forest in our hometown? It was a paradise for childhood, a place to have fun. Quietly tell you: now that the small trees are getting bigger and bigger, there are more birds coming to stay, and countless birds show melodious voices in the morning. I still remember catching monkeys in a forest at dusk and sunset. I wonder if the arrival scared the birds. Those birds have fun on purpose. Sometimes they doze off, sometimes they disperse in a hubbub, flying over the forest, screaming and flying tirelessly, refusing to have a moment's peace. Remember that gurgling river? In the river, touching fish and shrimp together left you and me with many naughty laughter and cheerful songs. I can't forget that summer afternoon, when we dug mussels by the river, we dug too much. Finally, you wrapped a big bag in your coat. When you came home with the joy of being covered in mud, you got the "reward" from your mother ... You are still smiling and refreshed in the photo. Gently put away the photos and put them back in the book. I dried my tears, looked out of the window and said to myself: I only hope that you will have a good life in the distance, and it is refreshing to have your photos with you every summer! Full score decryption: 1. The story is beautiful and the feelings are true. There are stories about photos, but the author chose the story of innocence in childhood, and then painted it with affectionate brushstrokes, which made it feel different when reading. Childhood scenes are indelible memories. In the summer afternoon, the author picked up not only a photo, but also a beautiful past. 2. Full of life interest. It is also a narrative, but the author's pen is colorful, the things he writes are vivid and realistic, and the stories he tells are full of life feelings. With colorful words, the author shows a childlike past: the impression left by the Woods, birds and naughty friends who catch monkeys, touch fish and shrimp and dig mussels at dusk. Clear words and pure friendship! (Recommended comment/Chai Fei) In the summer afternoon of a candidate in Dezhou, Shandong Province, in the summer when the wind blows, cicadas are singing like a weave, and I am alone at home to sort out my desk. A photo suddenly fell from an old book and I bent down to pick it up. This commemorative photo of my military training when I entered junior high school suddenly opened the floodgate of memory, just like going back to the past. Yes, the photos record the wonderful moments of junior high school life! You see, these more than 60 "recruits an egg shaped thing" wearing ill-fitting camouflage uniforms have bright smiles on their tanned faces and are surrounded by full of green. They are gentle but do not lose their instructor demeanor. In the military training class, the students were quite excited and nervous, and everyone stood in the designated position waiting for the arrival of the instructor. The soldiers in my impression are all handsome and cool. Who doesn't want the instructor to be a handsome boy? But God played a joke on me. The man who ran out from the instructor group was short and square-faced, but his military uniform was unambiguous and neat. He ran to the front: stand at attention, turn around, salute, and then loudly say: "Hello, classmates, I will be your instructor in the future. "After greeting the instructor, I couldn't help but whisper to myself: My God, you made a big joke and ruined the instructor's glorious image in the eyes of these boys and girls. However, the new instructor is kind-hearted, and his overall impression is passable. I don't know which genius said: mules and horses can still have feelings for a long time, let alone people. Military training makes strangers no longer strangers. Everyone likes to be around the instructor during the break and listen to his stories in the military camp. More interestingly, you can also trick the tutor into singing. The instructor seems to have come prepared, and he can succeed every time, and he hears his sonorous military songs. However, you must not think that the instructor is a "philanthropist". Many times, he is more like a "devil" with a heart of stone. In his words, rest is rest. Everyone should keep an eye on it during training, sweat more at ordinary times and bleed less in wartime. Hum, it seems that you love to doze off during training, as if you are going to the battlefield after training. Why is this? He is demanding of every movement, almost harsh, and a little unreasonable. The voice I am most afraid of hearing is his "team spread out, two meters before and after, push-ups!" " "Everyone knows the password-this is the end of irregular action. However, after every push-up, the movements can be performed miraculously. No wonder the United States Military Academy at West Point opened a "devil training camp"! It was a hot summer at that time, but after the training, everyone could always find happiness in the small shade in the corner of the playground and unite as a whole through mutual understanding. A cool breeze blew through that unforgettable summer, mixed with endless joy. Hehe, I don't know what the Taoist priest looks like. Let's look for two rabbit ears in the photo-I compared them ... It's summer when it's windy, so I can dig out my good memories, blow the wind and bask in the sun ... Full score: 1. These materials are unconventional. The military training photos selected by the author tell the story of "recruits an egg shaped thing" in "devil training camp". For children who have just entered junior high school, this experience is eternal. The instructor's unattractive appearance and hard heart left a good impression on the children, but the instructor's loud military songs gave the children a different memory. When candidates choose more materials about family, friendship and classmates, the author of this paper chooses bits and pieces of military training life, which gives the marking teacher a refreshing feeling. 2. Clever use of the method of wanting to rise first. In this paper, the method of first wanting to rise and then wanting to suppress is adopted. At first, the dissatisfaction with the instructor's appearance is in sharp contrast with the later intimacy, which makes the characters full of personality. (Recommended/Chai Fei) Moment Eternity In the summer afternoon of a candidate in Dezhou, Shandong Province, cicadas were singing like a weave, and I was casually sorting out my desk at home. A photo suddenly fell from an old book and I bent down to pick it up. The sunshine outside the window shines on the photo, which is warm. Above the photo, the words "Class 06 ×× Teacher-student photo" are impressively marked. These 50 smiling faces all exude sunshine-like warmth, and the most brilliant smile is you who have been unsmiling for three years-dear Teacher Li. In front of my eyes, I unconsciously saw some fragments of junior high school three years ... I remember when I first entered school, I learned from my brother and sister that you were a famous "head teacher" and a "witch" with a straight face all day. The students in other classes were very sympathetic and comforted, saying, Brother, be careful in the future. Let's endure it for three years. How can I see a rainbow without experiencing wind and rain? Alas, the feeling at that time was that I was unlucky and met the head teacher. Sure enough, our prediction came true. In class, your expression is always serious, you never laugh, and your tone of voice is blunt. Commonly used words are:,, immediately and so on. Even in the self-study class, you never give a break and stare. I've done it behind my back many times. Will you laugh after all? I once imagined in my mind what you would look like when you smiled. It was not until the eve of the senior high school entrance examination that my impression of you changed. You keep telling me this and that, you are worried about the weather, your diet, and you may accidentally forget something ... At this time, you are much thinner and older than three years ago, and your black hair is quietly mixed with silver. At this moment, I really realized that under your cold and serious expression, there is a caring heart that has been shining like sunshine for three years and growing healthily. I vaguely remember that day in graduation photo, it had just rained, and it was cloudy and windy. I was very excited at that time. As we all know, after taking photos of graduation photo, the class that has been together for three years will soon disintegrate, and the students who have been together for three years will also go their separate ways for the next stop in their lives. The most surprising thing is that you smiled at Zhang, and you smiled more brightly than anyone else. This is a long-awaited smile. At that moment, the photographer left eternal beauty. Now, it's still summer, I left the original group, but my homesickness has never diminished. Three years have passed gently from my mind, but the warmest and most touching moment will always stay in my heart and be treasured forever. These 50 smiling faces will bloom forever! Full score decryption: 1. Clever use of contrast techniques. The greatest feature of this masterpiece is the typical selection of materials. The author selects several typical fragments of three years' life in junior high school. At first, I was biased against teacher Li, the head teacher. She is a unsmiling "witch", but later I really felt her meticulous care beyond strictness and wanted to promote it first. Starting with ordinary materials, the article expresses an extraordinary theme-demanding teachers as strictly as mothers! After reading this article, I was moved by the little author's love and respect for the teacher. The author skillfully compares the wrong orientation of the class teacher Li for three years with the teacher's silent concern for everyone after three years, and clearly understands the theme of the article. 2. Language humor. The language of this article is vivid and flexible, full of life breath, which is quite different from the language style of the candidates. It is a farewell to the marking teacher.