Exquisite Bamboo Rhyme Poetry Society ‖ Long River of Sunset ‖ Fighting Poems and Commenting on Words 19

Let's sing a few poems, and wait for the long river to appreciate the beauty of bamboo grove poets. ...

Spring ink pictures send qingping music.

On the misty stream, some Ying Ge songs.

The red flowers in the delicate calyx are in full bloom Swallows and butterflies dance in pairs.

The clever woman in the field bent down and looked at the old man (Li Zhao).

Who is unscrupulous? Riding a cow and kissing a young crop.

First of all, this tone is quite successful! A song "Qingping Music" is unfamiliar with thousands of scenes and customs.

Second, the lower finch is obviously better than the upper finch. The sketch of "peasant woman, Tian Weng and shepherd boy" is very vivid. "Riding a cow and kissing a young crop" is well-intentioned! Especially the reward tail.

Third, the shortcomings:

1, "A few Ying Ge sang." Swallows and butterflies dance in pairs. The choice of scene language is a bit repetitive! Logically, there are plants "tender calyx safflower", animals "swallow butterflies", water "smoke flow", mountains? You can change "singing in several places" into a sentence related to mountains.

2. "An old man/Li Zhao." Difficult and obscure. I guess it's to make up a "sports" rhyme! "Li Zhao" is a fabricated word, but I have only heard of "Zhao Lian". ...

? @ Sunset River Thank you for your elegant comments on my book Qingpingle. Thank you very much, I have benefited a lot! "Li Zhao" may be a bit obscure, but I'm from Sanshui, Foshan, and I said this to Zhao Yong. Brother, try a better word. Thank you for your advice!

The young mermaid looked at the moon.

It is said that there is a chill on the high moon.

Looking for a jade rabbit with ChanJuan, I only feel the soft (wind) pulse blowing my eyebrows.

Wandering on the windowsill of Wan Li, there is no trace of the past.

The memory of yesterday's autumn has long gone with the wind, and only the clouds are still in the sky.

1, two "none" and two "winds". There are too many words in a poem, which can be completely avoided!

2, the overall structure is chaotic, and the idea is messy!

The first movie barely got by.

The second movie "Gengsou/Jade Rabbit with Chan Juan"? What do you mean by "more search"? What do you want to express in Jade Rabbit and Chanjuan? You are looking at the moon, not landing on it! Fantasy and Chanjuan go to find a "Jade Rabbit". Ridiculous! I also want to find Chang 'e to know about Bajie's recent situation ... This film is obscure in intention and seems to be a waste of sentences!

The third movie "Roaming through the Wan Li Window" is astronomy! Who will translate for me? ...

The fourth film "Memories of Yesterday Autumn Gone with the Wind" and the last film "Past without Trace" are of great significance! ! ! "Only Tuan Luan is still in the sky."

"Tuanluan" refers to the full moon. This sentence and the first sentence are very heavy! ! !

3, brothers are so "beautiful jade" to be treasured! I use it to type poetry, and I beat the old man's poetry to a pulp. ...

Ruan Langgui read Travel Notes of the Old Disabled.

In the late Qing Dynasty, corrupt officials were rampant and people's livelihood was difficult.

Dr. Lang sent a compass, but he missed the boat.

How many things, how many sources, seeking truth is more true.

The more dangerous the evil wind is, the more frosty it is, and the partial deficiency can make up for the disability.

1, the main rhythm of standard Ruan Langgui rhymes with the "flat tone" of standard sentences. There is not a word, "the bureau is unable to make up for the disability." Out of the law!

2, "How many things, how many sources" two or three sentences like "Partridge Sky" in general, must be antithetical! !

3. Many poetry lovers don't know the metrical requirements of tunes before filling in the lyrics, but only know how to make sentences according to the lyrics! So you can fill in beautiful words? Metrology is a big mistake, and its significance is not appreciated. ...

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In the lonely smoke, between mountains and rivers.

There are new geese in the sky and old plums on the other side.

Went to the sun, covered in jade, came back, and his temples fell.

Ten years of empty dreams, afraid to go near the countryside.

1, two "empty" words, when avoiding!

2. The head and chin are connected with the scene, and homesickness is revealed in the scene. Very rewarding! Especially Zhuan Xu's "Old Meiyan", borrowed the meaning of predecessors, but it is very vivid ... Thirty years later, I still remember the old Meiyan.

3. "Go to Japan to make jade, and return to the time."

"Fu" refers to the hairpin, and the second refers to a woman who has just grown up. "Jade" means beauty and immortality!

Tang Yangheng's Poems of Wandering Immortals includes: "The jade head is the purple emperor, and Jin Yuanyang is full of crimson skirts."

Tang Ma Dai's poem "Send the King of Xiangyang" says: "Wan, Chu."

Compared with going to Japan and returning to Japan, the necklace has the feeling of "leaving home young", which is a highlight of this law!

4. The last couplet quoted a famous sentence from Tang Song Wenzhi's Crossing the Han River: "Now, I dare not ask a question when I come near my village and meet people.".

Gan Chun

Swallows build new houses before flying into the hall, and the east wind blows willows outside the sill.

A ray of sunshine added warmth, and several dead trees sprouted again.

How beautiful the spring scenery on earth is, who sighs the sunset glow?

Because there is an eternal poetic heart, it can bloom for thousands of years.

1, the first couplet "flying swallows and slanting willows", Wing Chun's work is the most conventional idea! However, no one is interested in enjoying the works that start with this!

2. The couplets are "warm and cute".

3. "How beautiful is the spring scenery on earth? Who sighs plum blossoms for the sunset glow? "

The sentence is "invalid" and the sentence is "unlucky"! There is no antithesis at the neckline, it's just a rhyme.

4, the feelings of the tail couplet are still somewhat new! But the grammar is too rough.

I have a piano.

I have a piano, and I have been attacked by wind and frost for half my life.

Poor Mei Fang's audition, thank you.

Soak in clear water and slowly reach the distant cen.

Stay in the mountains to avoid guests, and your dreams will sink into the depths.

1 After "A Pot of Wine", "A XX" has appeared in an endless stream on the Internet recently! Countless idle and bored people enjoy playing word games. In fact, no one will be interested in enjoying such plagiarized works. ...

Farmer's question: I have a pig!

Official question: I have a backer!

Businessman's question: I have a knife!

I have a bong!

2, the above "five laws" are formulated, purely a game! I don't comment. Brothers want to read and listen to bosom friend. The old man is all thumbs and won't talk nonsense; Born tone-deaf, I don't understand "high mountains and flowing water" ...

Seven Laws: "Talking about War Poetry"

Smoke and waves are full of sediment, and turbid Mo Chi is good and good.

It is hard to be rational and persistent if you don't obey Kun and endanger the country.

Rich and thin, only recognize poetry and not recognize people.

Bamboo is quiet and beautiful, and dreams are laughing.

1, "The sea is misty, and Mo Chi is good and good." The first couplet is true! As long as you don't lie down and do the "Chinese dream", your eyes can see and hear everywhere ...

Although the couplet is stiff, it follows the first couplet closely and has a clear meaning. ...

3, brother, this necklace is "heartless"! Sentences have nothing to do with dialogue. The poem of fighting in the bamboo forest has nothing to do with "rich color"!

4, the tail couplet is obscure, but thank you for your support of "Beautiful Bamboo Rhyme"!

Appreciating poetry in leisure time, many poets' works have a feeling of deja vu. After a moment's meditation, it turns out that many famous books are cut and pieced together. At first glance, the rhetoric is gorgeous and the rules are ancient! Appreciate it carefully, the content is empty, the meaning context is broken and the structure is loose. Beginners often start with imitation. If they do not gradually get rid of the shackles of their predecessors, constantly polish and innovate, and form their own style, it will be difficult for them to go further in the sea of poetry and mountains. ...

Just like many people who call themselves "poetry critics" today, they rarely have their own unique theories and opinions. But he is keen to take a passage from the poems of Yan Canglang, Wang Shizhen, Yuan Mei, Shen Yiqian and Weng Fanggang and copy it from the west. However, he has his own name and spreads it everywhere! I don't know much about it myself, and beginners are even more confused when they read it devoutly. Such propaganda is actually a kind of "false way" to mislead people's children. ...

Good evening, sunset and teachers! Thank you very much for your enthusiasm and encouragement. I am very touched ... thanks to the bamboo forest for bringing us together, and even more thanks to the bamboo forest for providing this pure land of poetry. In particular, Changhe led so many respectable and amiable editorial boards and made selfless contributions to everyone without any regrets. Without your efforts, 100 has published more than 100 micro-journals. It can be said that on the WeChat public platform, our bamboo forest is telling the truth. Before that, I also wrote insincere rhetoric! After attending the criticism of Zhu Lin's history, Changhe criticized my ending in front of Huang Songting. I was shocked! Straight to the heart! I really understand what poetry is. What is a poet's conscience? Whether a poem is written well or not, the first thing is conception! Don't speak against your conscience! As for the level of poetry, in fact, I know my level best in my heart: one thing is the same as @ Su Yue Liu Tianjun. In the third year, I went through a lot of hardships in the vast world and hardly read any books ... Although I am a teacher, I am a foreign language teacher, and I am really a layman in poetry ... I just started learning poetry from my father on 20 10, but who would have thought that my father left at the beginning of 20 13? Who can give me some advice ... thanks to all the mentors and friends of Sina (in fact, there are several in the bamboo forest now). In my most difficult time, everyone supported me and helped me out of the haze! Here, I am deeply grateful to you and hope that you will continue to guide me.

2022.05.07 Butterfly Dance Production