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How to write the wind

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How to write the wind

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Last time in the "How to Write" training camp, we learned how to write about rain, so it's time to write about the wind this time. Because of "stormy weather", haha. Compared with rain, wind is invisible and intangible, and it seems more difficult to write vividly and distinctively. But there are traces of intangible things. Next, let the wind that comes and goes "appear"-

wind

○ Chen Wenjun ("Innovative Composition Network" screen name: Guoguo Baby)

I like the wind.

The wind is sometimes mild, sometimes strong and sometimes erratic.

The spring wind, like a good-natured little girl, gently brushed your face, as if giving you a gentle touch. Spring breeze makes you feel very comfortable. It seems to be a magical power, which makes you intoxicated in the breath of spring and unwilling to wake up for a long time.

The summer wind is like a passionate big brother. You can't stand it any longer, and it has been showing "enthusiasm" to you, so you have to stay in the air-conditioned room all day. Its "enthusiasm" is really huge, and it will last for several months before it slowly fades. Alas, I am really "unhappy"!

Autumn wind, like an understanding big sister ⑥, brings cool and bumper harvest information, and also sends the leaves that have worked hard for a year back to the embrace of Mother Earth ⑥.

The winter wind is like a strict grandfather. It always blows your tender face red and keeps drilling into your neck, making your trip very difficult. I think it must be trying to tell us that there are many difficult tests in life, and we must learn to overcome them bravely.

The wind is with us all the year round. I like the wind, whether it is gentle, warm, considerate or severe. ...

Hangzhou City, Zhejiang Province

① Summarize the characteristics of wind and point out that wind is changeable.

② Describe the four seasons in detail. Spring breeze is characterized by "good temper" and personification is very vivid.

③ Two examples of "gentle touch" and "magical power" are cited to explain the concept of "good temper" very concretely.

④ Xia Feng's characteristics: "enthusiasm".

⑤ Continue to use personification to fully demonstrate Xia Feng's enthusiasm through "vigorous", "great energy" and "slowly fading".

⑥ Characteristics of autumn wind: "understanding".

⑦ "understanding" is manifested in bringing coolness to people and sending fallen leaves home.

The characteristic of winter wind is "fierce".

Going out in the biting cold wind in winter is really a test. Anyone who has tasted this flavor will definitely agree that the winter wind is "powerful".

Attending the end of the topic, and briefly summarize the four paragraphs in the article.

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It is very difficult to describe intangible things; Therefore, students who have just started to learn to write style should not be too anxious. When they see a great writer's writing style for a long time, don't blame yourself for not seeing or writing anything. You should know that the improvement of observation ability comes step by step. At first, as long as we can grasp the big features, other details can be discovered slowly with the accumulation of writing knowledge.

Writing a style based on the four seasons is old-fashioned, but it is actually a good start. The wind will show different states under different weather conditions, and the difference will be more obvious if it is divided by such a big time clue as the four seasons. Students who have just learned to write about the wind can take a relatively simple observation "task" from the big picture, such as seeing the characteristics of the winds in the four seasons. The author of this paper undoubtedly grasped these characteristics of wind: mild spring breeze, blazing Xia Feng, cool autumn wind and cold winter wind; But she didn't stop there. Instead, it uses anthropomorphic techniques to replace the common warm, hot, cool and cold writing with good temper, enthusiasm, understanding and severity. The anthropomorphic technique not only shows the four characteristics of the wind more vividly, but also makes the wind, a way of airflow, "live" at once. In addition, she also observed some details, such as the spring breeze is always intoxicating, Xia Feng forced people into air-conditioned rooms, and the winter breeze turned people's faces red, which made the characteristics of the wind more specific. Although the full text is slightly brief, it is still a masterpiece for beginners.

Today's wind

○ Zhu (Creative Writing Network: Zhu)

Today's wind is really strong, and the treetops and wires that have been blowing all night roared past. My nose is exposed outside the quilt, and it is sour with cold. I have no choice but to tuck my head into the quilt.

Get up in the morning and look out the window. The branches are shivering in the cold wind. The leaves that were swaying in the branches yesterday are all huddled in the corner today, losing their prestige.

Walking on the way to school, pedestrians are wrapped like zongzi. People walking against the wind pedal their bicycles desperately and bend into an arch. The streets are cleaner than ever, and the garbage is blown into the corner by the wind. Inadvertently, the bicycle on the sidewalk fell down with the help of the wind.

In the morning exercise, the students also wrapped themselves up as if poking stakes in the playground. The wind blew crazily, mixed with thick yellow sand, and the world suddenly turned yellow. It seems that we met Huang Fengguai in The Journey to the West, and we are about to take off. Ringing the bell is like a straw. The students rushed back to the classroom with unprecedented speed and enthusiasm.

The feeling of coming home from school is completely opposite to that of going to school-it's a pleasant trip home. Just getting on the bus, the foot hasn't touched the pedal, and the strong wind pushes the car and people forward together. Listening to the wind whistling in the ear and feeling the lightning speed, that feeling is one word: cool!

Go back to a warm home and look at yourself in the mirror: your hair is messy like a chicken nest, your nose and ears are red with cold, and your fingers are like carrots.

I heard that there was a snowstorm in Yantai and Weihai a few days ago, but we just had a strong wind here. Alas, this nasty wind might as well turn into snow, so let's have a snowball fight.

Sixth grade affiliated to Linyi Normal University, Shandong Province

Instructor: Chen Juan

① Observation time limit: today.

② Point out the characteristics of "today's wind": great. The following description should focus on "windy".

③ Observe in chronological order. The first time: get up in the morning; Observation position: look out of the window from home; Observe the details: the tree has fallen leaves.

4 the second time: at school; Observation location: on the way to school; Observe the details: the clothes of pedestrians, the posture of pedaling bicycles, the garbage on the street, and the bicycles parked on the street.

⑤ The third time: when doing exercises between classes; Observation location: on the playground; Observe the details: students' clothes, yellow sand and students' reaction when the bell rings.

⑥ The fourth time: after school; Observation location: on the way to school; Observe the details: the feeling after the headwind turns into the tailwind.

⑦ The fifth time: after returning to China; Observation position: in front of the mirror at home; Observe the details: my hair, nose, ears and fingers.

The feeling at the end fully shows the child's psychology, which is really interesting.

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After the observation ability is improved, you can "upgrade" from extensive writing to in-depth description. There must be many windy days all year round, and there are always a few windy days that will leave a deep impression on you, such as Xia Feng mentioned in the first example, which forced people into air-conditioned rooms and dared not show up, or the winter wind froze people like "kittens". The little author of this article chose gale. Since it is a strong wind, the focus is on the word "big". The wind is strong, which means the wind is strong. How to show the power of the wind? Of course, it starts with those who are "suppressed" by the wind. People: wrapped like zongzi, bent like a bow when riding a bicycle, their noses and ears were red with cold, and they rushed indoors; Things: bare branches, garbage blown to the corner, bicycles blown down ... people, trees, garbage and bicycles are all "victims" of strong winds. As long as we find these "victims" and describe their "victims", readers will naturally feel the power of the wind.

It should be noted that if too many observation points are selected, narrative confusion will inevitably occur. The little author of this article is very clever. Taking time as a clue, through the changes of different time and place, combined with the data observed by herself, she not only has a clear idea, but also writes the comparison of different time and place (downwind and headwind after school), which increases the interest of the article.

Typhoon khanun is coming.

○ Qu Ye Zou Shanwang, etc

Qu Jingyi: September 1 1 is really an unforgettable disaster day. A few years ago today, the terrorist attacks plunged the American people into grief. On this day this year, Typhoon Kanu also made us nervous.

Zhou Mulan: This afternoon, the TV station broadcast the news of Typhoon Kanu. Please take preventive measures. The breeze that lasted for a long time gradually increased the wind, causing waves on the river and light rain.

Xu Ye: There is a big dark cloud hovering in the sky. It's getting dark. I saw sand and stones flying on the ground and garbage bags flying in the air, like a flock of birds scrambling to take shelter from the wind. The sunflowers in front of my house are also shaking violently with the wind. I hurried to tie the rope, but the wind waited for no one. When I was about to tie the second plant, the wind had made me unstable. I hurried to the house and suddenly felt as if something was passing under my feet. When I saw it, it turned out to be my kitten, and it was also rushing to escape!

Zou Shan: My dog Lulu also runs around and barks. The neighbor's cock croaked and kept flapping its wings. Everyone is very manic.

Qu Jingyi: At about two o'clock in the morning, the strong wind woke me from my sleep. In the dim light, I saw the bean-sized raindrops beating on the window glass. The wind roared and the door creaked.

Xu Ye: I looked out of the window and saw the rapids spewing out from the outlet pipe crossing downstairs. The bamboo forest in front swayed violently in the wind and rain, as if to break to the ground. Those washbasins and trash cans placed outside the door kept rolling on the ground, making a "bang" sound. I can't sleep anymore. Even lying down will be awakened by the amazing momentum of the typhoon.

Zou Shan: Suddenly, a bright flash of lightning pierced the night sky, and a thunderbolt resounded through the sky. It seems that the Dragon King received instructions from the Jade Emperor, tore open the canopy, poured the water of Tianhe into the world, and it rained cats and dogs. I opened the door and looked at it, but I was blinded by the strong wind and my whole body was creepy, so I had to close the door quickly.

Wang: The downpour is accompanied by strong wind and lightning, just like a fierce and hungry tiger trying to swallow the whole flock.

Zhou Mulan: After waiting for a long time, I finally understand. The wind has quieted down a lot and the rain has stopped. Has typhoon khanun left? Attending?

W: There is chaos outside the door. This road is full of rubbish. Many branches of those tall pine trees by the river have been scraped off, and some of them are still dangling from the trees. What a pity {1 1}!

Xu Ye: Almost all the sunflowers in my family have been uprooted by the strong wind. Every household in the village is also busy cleaning up the mess left by Kanu {12}.

Qu Jingyi: The sun shines all over the earth, and people who have been scared all night feel very warm {13}!

Class 5, Guangrong Primary School, Xichang Town, Hai 'an County, Jiangsu Province (1)

Instructor: Mei Xiaohong

(1) Through this contrast, it creates an atmosphere for the "terror" of "Kanu" to be described below.

(2) Don't write about typhoons directly, but write about the tension before the arrival of typhoons, and continue to pave the way for the following. Typhoon change 1: the wind began to increase and it began to rain lightly.

③ Always write the "overall impact" of the typhoon first. The second change of typhoon: the sky is dark, flying sand and stones.

(4) Then write about the specific situation around you. Observe the details: Sunflowers shake violently, and kittens "run for their lives"

Frightened animals reflect their own uneasiness. Observe the details: the dog is running around and the cock is flapping its wings.

⑥ Typhoon change 3: The wind roared and the rain increased; The first expression of "fear": being awakened; Observe the details: wind, rain, the sound of the door.

7. Performance 2 of "fear": I can't sleep anymore; Observe the details: rainwater at the outlet, bamboo forest, overturned container.

(8) Typhoon change 4: lightning and thunder, heavy rain; The third expression of "fear": creepy; Observe the details: lightning, thunder, rainstorm, strong wind.

Pet-name ruby an image metaphor can make the finishing point.

Attending typhoon change 5: the wind is getting weaker and the rain stops.

{1 1} Write down the scene after the typhoon in detail, and observe the details: pine trees along the path and by the river.

{12} The supplementary description of sunflower takes care of the previous article.

{13} After the previous "storm baptism", the sunshine at the end made readers breathe a sigh of relief.

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The form of this composition is quite special-collective composition. The advantage of collective composition is that it can make the observation more complete and the details more abundant. Limited by angle, way of thinking and ability, what one observes is limited after all. If you can discuss with your good friends before writing your composition, like these little authors, you may find some wonderful things you missed.

Typhoon can be said to be the most special and terrible member of the wind family. There are not many opportunities for us to encounter typhoons in our life. Therefore, although the typhoon is a disaster, it is also writing a topic that must not be let go. In this paper, the changing process of typhoon from weak to strong and then from strong to weak is written in chronological order. They set a psychological tone from the beginning: fear, so when describing typhoons, they did not simply write about the wind, but combined with their own feelings to further strengthen this feeling through the raging wind, such as animals "running for their lives" and being blown "creepy" by the wind. In addition, the close combination of vision and hearing is also a major feature of this paper. Imagine, if you turn off the sound while watching a horror movie, will the movie still be so horrible? Dazzling lightning, pouring rain, branches swaying with the wind, coupled with the whistling wind, the squeaking of doors, the knocking of washbasins and garbage cans, are they very similar to the end of the world in science fiction movies?

Of course, like writing rain, students who have reached a certain "skill" can also try to write the wind from a fantasy perspective.

Forgive my incompetence, but this is all I can find. I am deeply sorry here!