20 15 Guangdong adult college entrance examination perfect composition

20 15 Guangdong college entrance examination perfect score composition

To perceive nature in different ways, nature seems to be "near" and "far".

Requirements: ① Choose your own point of view, determine your own intention, and draw up your own title, regardless of style. (2) Don't leave the scope of the content and meaning of the material. ③ No less than 800 words. (4) No interplanting or plagiarism.

[Abstract] Comments: The author advocates taking the "benefits" of the two, and feeling the nature in combination with the distance. Combine far and near, feel nature, watch spring clouds, and measure rain and snow, but it is limited to your eyesight; Through TV, we can know the global weather, but we are not interested in watching clouds. Looking at the vegetation in the forest, you may not be able to name the flowers and birds; With a click of the mouse, you can tell the genus of living things, but you lose the fragrance of flowers and fruits and the smell of the jungle. Nature seems very close, but it seems too far. Why not combine the benefits of distance and distance to perceive nature? Today, with the development of science and technology, people can know the world and feel the nature through extremely convenient information technology, which is of course good, but it lacks the personal feeling of flowing water. In ancient times, people only communicated with nature and could not fully understand and know nature. Both have their own advantages and disadvantages, so let's combine their advantages to make the natural perception incisively and vividly. Looking back on ancient times, Du Fu can appreciate the spirit of "reaching the peak, the other mountains all appear dwarfs under the sky.". ; Li Bai can feel the danger of "so high that the yellow crane can't pass, and the poor monkey only has claws to use"; Su Shi admired the Yangtze River for "mourning my life for a while and admiring its infinity", and had a leisurely walk in the rain "Don't listen to the leaves beating in the Woods, why not sing and walk slowly". The ancients had extremely rich experiences and feelings about nature. After all, they are with heaven and earth and walk with the sun and the moon. However, they lack a deep understanding of nature and cannot grasp the nature of heaven and earth, the origin of the world and the tree class, so they cannot use the laws of nature to benefit mankind and transform nature. Compared with the ancients, we have an advantage We can use a complete information system to get all the information of nature, grasp the essence and laws of nature, personally understand nature and feel the charm of nature in combination with distance. Looking at modern times, many people are only satisfied with "digital nature" and lack the feeling of "being there" in nature. Can "Baidu Online Zoo" reflect the momentum of the eagle and the wolf howling? Can a painting show the beauty of flowers and trees? What's more, can those straightforward words describe the momentum of the Yangtze River? Mount Everest soars into the sky? Modern people may say a lot about nature, but when asked about the smell of plants and flowers and birds, they are speechless. Then, let's put down the mobile phone, leave the computer and go into nature, experience the comfort of "egrets flying in the quiet swamp and mango birds singing in the trees in midsummer", and feel the indifference of "I will walk until the water stops me, and then sit and watch the rising clouds" ... Naturally, it is close to us and far away, but we can use the existing methods and means to narrow the distance with nature. When people create science and technology, they can use it to understand and transform nature, but don't forget the original way and the most primitive experience. Only by combining the two can we truly perceive nature and enjoy its beauty. Comments: This is an argumentative essay. According to the contents of the examination materials, the author thinks that direct experience of nature and indirect experience of nature by using modern science and technology have their own advantages and disadvantages. The former is "close" to nature, but lacks a deep understanding of nature. The latter is "far away" from nature, and does not feel "immersive", but can understand the laws of nature. Therefore, the author advocates taking the "long" of the two and feeling nature in combination with distance. Around this point of view, this paper compares the way people feel nature with the ancients under the background of modern science and technology, and lists the poems of ancient poets such as Du Fu, Li Bai and Su Shi to show that the ancients had richer experience and understanding of nature.

Junior high school Liang Hai composition daquan

Xiao Sheng got full marks for the senior high school entrance examination and zero for the college entrance examination.

Accept, closer to nature, but can't grasp the laws and essence of nature; Nowadays, people know the advantages and disadvantages of nature by means of science and technology, which is contrary to that of the ancients. Therefore, people today should learn from the strengths of the ancients to make up for their shortcomings and feel nature in an all-round way. The idea of the article is consistent with the content of the material, with clear central views and clear ideas. However, when the article demonstrates its own argument, it is too absolute to equate the two ways of feeling nature between the ancients and the present, and completely deny the ancients' understanding of natural laws. Some sentences in the article are not properly chosen. (Comment:) [Abstract] Comment: Despite its flaws, this article is still an excellent examination room. Perception of nature requires reading the mysterious and beautiful tropical jungle, but only looking up can see the indifference and desolation of the steel forest; I yearn for the endless blue ocean on TV, but I have never felt the coolness of the sea breeze. Have you ever felt so close, but never so far away? Mobile phone, TV and mouse make us closer to nature, but we can't draw a natural picture from the frozen screen after all. The ancients said: Read thousands of books and take Wan Li Road. However, people only saw the first half of the sentence, but regarded the second half as nothing. Indeed, the innovation of various shooting tools has enabled the general public to perceive the beauty of nature from the screen. However, people don't know that what you get on paper is superficial after all, and it takes practice to perceive nature! If Su Shi didn't visit the majestic Red Cliff in person, how could he have the feeling that "the water of one river never returns, and the waves wash away the romantic figures of the ages"? If Li Bai had not visited Lushan Mountain in person, how could he have written such a timeless quatrain as "Doubt is that the Milky Way has set for nine days"? If it weren't for Chairman Mao's personal visit to nature, how could he express his lofty ambition of "pointing out the mountains, inspiring words and fouling Wan Huhou"? It can be seen that it is not enough to really understand and perceive nature only from movies, movies and words. Only by visiting nature in person can we find the true meaning of nature between long grass and withered leaves. However, as Hegel said: Being is reasonable. The existence of TV and mobile phones also has its positive significance. Through weather forecast, people can avoid natural disasters; Through movies and TV programs, people can also listen to the songs of birds and see flowers. But in my opinion, these ways of perceiving nature are not advocating the harmonious coexistence between man and nature, but reflect the ambition of human beings to control and even rule nature. People disturb the normal ecological order in order to photograph wild animals; For the benefit of mankind, people predict and even fantasize about changing the weather, which really reflects the rapid progress of human science and technology, but it also violates the principle of respecting and respecting nature since ancient times. When nature is put into a "box", its "body" is close to us, but its "heart" is farther away from us. At present, people's need to "see" nature has been met by science and technology, but our expectation of perceiving nature cannot be met by science and technology. Then, why not take "Wan Li Road" as our new criterion to experience the wonder of Huangshan Mountain, the greatness of Mount Tai, the strength of the Yangtze River and the vastness of the sea? If you want to perceive nature, you have to walk on your own. This article is a relatively standard argumentative essay. From the perspective of directly perceiving nature, the author flexibly uses propositional materials at the beginning, and puts forward the viewpoint of "being aware of nature should do" in comparison, which is accurate in examination and clear in conception and easy to be accepted by the general public. Then, the hypothesis is reversed, and examples such as Su Shi, Li Bai and Chairman Mao are cited by using parallelism rhetoric. The arguments are relatively substantial and more powerful. Then it is pointed out that it is not enough to perceive nature only through "movies and words". "Only by visiting nature in person can we discover the true meaning of nature", and the attribution analysis is reasonable. What is more valuable is that while dialectically affirming the "positive" of "TV and mobile phone" in perceiving nature, the article tries to explore the significance of perceiving nature, reveal the delusion of "controlling the ambition of nature" of human beings, and the consequences that lead to the "heart of nature" getting farther and farther away from us, criticize the current disadvantages and make people think. In addition, the title and viewpoint of this article are all ancient poems, concise and gentle, with slight changes. The topic is "sentiment", which is closely related to the propositional materials; The argument uses "awareness", which has some philosophical implications and is quite ingenious. At the end, "To perceive nature, we must walk on our own", calling for kindness and asking for a good talk. Although there are some improper words and typos in the writing, and three historical materials are also suspected of improper arrangement, the defects have not been concealed, and this article is still an excellent emergency chapter in the examination room. (Comment: Chinese)

[Abstract] Comments: The article shows that candidates have a certain ideological depth in grasping the problem. Bochum knows the way of science and feels the beauty of nature. There is an old saying: "Don't do anything at sunrise, but travel thousands of miles at sunset." This is the experience of observing the sky accumulated from generation to generation, but it is a kind of enjoyment and fun to watch the clouds rolling and infer the weather changes from the dusk. Turn on the TV, and the weather forecast all over the world comes into view. The two ways of perceiving nature are different, but nothing more than observing the weather, and all roads lead to the same goal. There is naturally no need to distinguish between "near" and "far". For nature, people should use scientific inventions and experiences to know and understand the macro level, and at the same time carefully experience and feel the micro-natural beauty around them with delicate hearts, so as to achieve the realm of "knowing the way of science and feeling the beauty of nature slightly" and realize the ultimate "harmony" among people, science and nature. Science and nature have never been separated From the invention and application of various water conservancy tools in ancient times to the development of today's developed weather monitoring and forecasting system, the improvement of human productivity and scientific progress have always been complementary. Man is very small to nature, and he has no ability to explore all the mysteries of nature one by one, so nature seems to be far away from man. And scientific application is a powerful tool to solve people's better understanding of natural needs at the macro level. Through TV, people can get weather information and geographical information "without leaving home", which increases their understanding of nature and makes up for the limitations of people's own ability and vision. At the same time, scientific knowledge is also of great benefit to the formation of scientific ideas. Darwin once said that his interest in nature originated from the scientific works of predecessors, and scientific theories, such as biological species, all played a great role in the formation of his rigorous scientific thinking. It can be seen that using science to perceive nature is not only convenient and comprehensive, but also conducive to cultivating natural science thinking, which is a good way to "look up at the universe". And "overlooking the prosperity of the class" can realize the harmonious unity between man and nature. Life is born in nature and belongs to nature. The Chinese character "sex" consists of a person and a lifetime, which shows that the truth of human nature is inseparable from the nature of ecology. There was a philosophy of "life" in ancient China, which was the tireless pursuit of ancient philosophers. Meng Haoran and Wang Wei were fascinated by the natural landscape, felt the changes of the sky and clouds, and watched the beauty of the clouds flowing in the water, creating beautiful sentences handed down from generation to generation, such as "an empty mountain stands in late autumn after rain", which reflected the integration of man and nature. Human life is integrated into the natural ecology, sharing the same breath and common destiny. Therefore, only by paying more attention to the microscopic plants, flowers and trees around us can we integrate into nature and "feel the beauty of nature". China's important Confucian thought of "harmony" requires all parties to achieve unity and coordination. At present, people can neither give up the traditional way of feeling nature nor resist the trend of scientific and technological development. Therefore, it is necessary to realize the harmonious unity of man, science and nature. Just like the popular star-gazing activity now, people who observe distant planets with high-tech telescopes also feel the cool breeze blowing in the mountains at night, cicadas singing in bursts, "believing in coke"! Broaden the road of science and feel the beauty of nature. People are close to and integrated with nature, and can understand nature from a higher perspective. The mind has a "tiger" who looks at nature macroscopically, and it can also sniff out the "roses" around it microscopically. Comments: Based on the materials, the article puts forward that modern human beings should perceive nature in two ways: scientific cognition and personal experience, which have dialectical thinking and thus have a high intention. The article adopts the general-sub-general way to organize the whole article, which is clear and reasonable. In the limited space, the article uses the knowledge of nature, literature, culture and other disciplines, and the content is substantial. In terms of expression, the article quoted famous proverbs and classical poems, which effectively enhanced the expression effect of this article. This article shows that candidates have a certain ideological depth, a wide range of knowledge and good writing ability. Of course, the article also has some shortcomings, such as inaccurate words in some places; Grasping cultural knowledge is also specious. But for a high school student's exam composition, you shouldn't be demanding. (Comment: Zhiyang) [Abstract] Comment: The article is rigorous and argumentative, but the prose is interesting. Open your arms and embrace nature.

"A scholar doesn't go out and knows what's going on in the world." In modern society, people can know the weather tomorrow by turning on the TV. You can see the list of biological species with a click of the mouse. But my friend, can you put down your mobile phone for a while, open your arms and embrace nature? "Everyone is not an island." John downey wrote in Meditation. Humans evolved from apes, living by nature and living by nature. It can be said that we are children raised by nature and exquisite works of art of nature. Since the industrial revolution, science and technology have built a wall between human beings and nature. Man and nature seem to be "far away", but in fact they are only one step away. The ancients began to embrace nature very early and set an example for modern people. Wang Wei's leisure of "I will go to the water to stop my path, and then sit and watch Yun Qi" is amazing; Perilla's "misty rain life" is admirable. Even in modern times, there are thousands of "donkey friends" in Qian Qian who are practicing and feeling the great rivers and mountains of the motherland; Haruki Murakami draws inspiration from nature through long-distance running day after day. Put on running shoes, you don't have to worry too much, you can run to embrace nature; Wear headphones, you don't have to care about worldly disputes, you are the god in your own world. As long as we have a heart close to nature, it is really not difficult for us to embrace nature with open arms. Embrace nature, you can gain a peace and feel a happiness. Look at the sky and clouds, measure the rain and snow, and don't care about the insurmountable eyesight, because where the eyesight is, there is the most beautiful place. Climbing high and looking far, what you see is the lofty sentiments all over the mountains, which is a kind of "small luck". How can this little certain happiness be felt by sitting at home alone? There is a poem in Gu Cheng: "The grass is seeding/the wind is shaking the grass/we stand quietly/don't talk/it's beautiful." In fact, we embrace nature. Why do we need to know the names of flowers and birds? Isn't it beautiful to listen to the birds singing softly and smell the flowers quietly? The grass grows and the warbler flies, and the clouds roll and the clouds are comfortable. Nature has its own beauty. Branches and leaves wither and the seasons change, and nature has its own growth law. As long as there are eyes that find beauty, what is not beautiful in life? When is nature not beautiful? It is true that nature is beautiful, but we should also cherish it and never let the beauty within our reach become unattainable. Chai Jing's Under the Dome aroused people's awareness of environmental protection. Last year's "APEC Blue" also showed us the government's determination to govern the environment. I believe that what we embrace must be pure nature. "Harmony between Heaven and Man" has always been advocated by Confucianism. Friend, please turn off the TV for the time being and slow down the mouse. Open your arms and embrace nature. Comments: This is an argumentative essay. The argument of this argumentative paper is "open your arms and embrace nature". "Embrace with open arms" is the way to perceive nature; "Embracing with open arms" also reflects the ardent yearning for nature-embracing nature with open arms is naturally not far away. The core word of the composition materials of the provincial college entrance examination is "perception of nature". This paper expounds closely on "understanding nature" and writes out the way and effect of "understanding nature". The content of the article accords with the meaning of the question. This article is well written. After the first paragraph of the article quotes materials to put forward arguments, readers will naturally ask: Why do modern people "embrace nature with open arms"? The second and third paragraphs answer in turn: human beings are natural children; The ancients set an example for us. Then, the fourth paragraph reads: "Only by embracing nature can we get a peace and feel a happiness." "Harvest a feeling of tranquility and feel a feeling of happiness" is not only the purpose of perceiving nature, but also its effect. The fifth paragraph discusses the benefits of perceiving nature from the perspective of the effect of perceiving nature-pleasing to the eye and comfortable. Next, the sixth paragraph puts forward that although nature is beautiful, we should cherish and cherish it. Only in this way can we embrace the pure nature. The article finally responds to the beginning, and suddenly sublimates: with open arms and embracing nature, we can reach the realm of "harmony between man and nature" mentioned by Confucianism. What is more worth talking about is language. This is an argumentative essay, but it is very interesting in prose. The article is mainly composed of prose sentences with a large number of parallel sentences in the middle, which is fluent, concise and elegant. Parallel sentences abound, such as "turn on the TV and you will know the weather tomorrow;" With a click of the mouse, you can see a list of biological species, such as "born according to nature", such as "listening to the gentle songs of birds and the fragrance of flowers", and even the title "Embrace nature with open arms" is a compound sentence. There are so many parallel essays, which may be influenced by the composition materials-the first two paragraphs of the materials are parallel essays-deliberately imitated, but I prefer to believe that this is a reflection of the author's reading tendency and writing ability-if the author doesn't like reading and writing parallel essays, it is difficult to write so many parallel essays in such a short time in the examination room. Parallelism can be narrative, lyrical and argumentative. The author's title is On the Qin Dynasty.

"Primitive destruction" is the standard? The inheritance of traditional culture depends on such candidates. There are many quotations in this 900-word article, starting with the quotation and starting with the quotation in the last paragraph. There are as many as eight quotations. The source of these quotations covers ancient and modern China and foreign countries, and we cannot but admire them. As candidates, everyone is accumulating materials, and everyone hopes to add color to the article by quoting in writing. However, how many people can use it like this and use it properly? A composition in the examination room contains many alliterations and many quotations. What is talent? This is talent. Of course, the article also has some shortcomings. For example, the quotation of related poems in Gu Cheng's Snow in front of the Door is not accurate enough, but compared with those remarkable places, these shortcomings need not be mentioned more. Finally, I want to say that not many people can write so neatly. (Comment: Industry Source) [Abstract] Comment: Narrative prose, the material selection and conception are in line with the meaning of the topic, and the center is prominent. Walking into Beijing Xiangshan is a small natural circle. Autumn is so beautiful, like a sea of fire. Approaching it is like approaching nature. Walking on the forest path of Xiangshan, standing on the fallen leaves creaked, the breeze blew, and pieces of green, yellow and red leaves scattered lightly, spreading in people's sense of smell with natural fresh taste. Xiangshan's land is so soft. Stepping on it is like stepping on a sponge. From time to time, I get a little water, so that my shoes smell of earth. Fallen leaves spread on the ground, forming a path full of fire. As soon as autumn is over, they become nutrients and spring mud, making the trees in Xiangshan more lush and the scenery here more beautiful. There are birds singing in the lush trees, and the euphemistic songs are like the sounds of nature. Let us fantasize about the appearance of these birds. They must be lovely! When an unknown bird fluttered into the air from the branch and flew to the horizon with its own hope, it also let me know the magic of nature. That bird brought me closer to the nature of Xiangshan. The beauty of Xiangshan in autumn lies in the trees here, with yellow in red and green in green. The roots spread vertically underground, highlighting its age and vicissitudes. I can't name most of the trees here, but why should I know their names? We are here to be close to nature, not to distinguish it. Nature is so beautiful, why not experience it more? Do you think this fiery red leaf will remind you that "frost leaves are redder than February flowers"? Will the beautiful scenery here make you "stop in the maple forest and sit late"? Naturally, why are you so beautiful? Let me stand in Xiangshan and stop for you! The weather is not as good as expected, the sky is windy, the leaves rustle and the scattered leaves are high. The rain, without warning, fell underground, and the fragrance of flowers and fruits in Xiangshan and the smell of jungle suddenly merged into the sound of rain. It seems that people can get closer to nature in the rain and feel its love. When you walked halfway up the mountain with my umbrella and looked down at the Woods below, the rain blurred them, but it brought them a beautiful symphony and painted them a beautiful oil painting. This kind of beautiful scenery can't be experienced on TV and computer because there are natural smells and sounds here. The rain is getting smaller and smaller, and the air is still filled with the breath of nature. It's a pity that time gives me too little time to appreciate nature. I stepped on the land mixed with leaves and rain in a hurry and followed the tour group with the natural taste here. The fragrance of nature remains in my heart, and only when I am there can I really get close to nature. Comments: "Xiangshan is so beautiful, I want to see it." This composition is a narrative, the materials and ideas are in line with the meaning of the topic, and the center is prominent. The expression of the article meets the stylistic requirements and the language is literary. According to the meaning of the question, the author closely follows the materials, such as the second, third and fourth paragraphs of the composition, and vividly describes the red leaves, birds and trees in Xiangshan. In the fifth natural paragraph of the composition, the autumn rain in Xiangshan was written in detail, and the breath of Xiangshan jungle was also written. The outstanding performance of the center is that this article uses vision, hearing, smell, touch and mind to perceive the small ecological map of Xiangshan from beginning to end. This article is rich in words and emotions, and its narrative prose features prominently. Poems such as "Frost leaves are red in February flowers" and "Stop and sit in the maple forest late"