How to practice modifying sick sentences

Modifying ill sentences is the need to improve students' expressive ability, and it is also a common question type in Chinese examination papers. However, in the actual teaching, it is found that many students have not mastered the essentials of modifying sick sentences, and they can't find the reasons for them and can't start.

How to exercise the ability to modify sick sentences?

First, knowledge reserve.

1. Classify and explain the causes of sick sentences, so that students can form an overall impression.

Common types of ill sentences:

(1) The word order is reversed; (2) Inconsistency;

(3) Incomplete ingredients; (4) the reference is unknown;

5] Punctuation error; [6] Misuse of related words;

A repetition; Improper collocation;

Levies classification is wrong; ⑽ Not in line with the facts.

Eight problems that should be paid attention to in "diagnosing" ill sentences;

(1) Pay attention to the collocation of related words.

(2) Pay attention to the sentences containing words such as "prohibition" and "prevention".

(3) Pay attention when there are multiple negative words in the sentence.

(4) Pay attention to prepositions in sentences.

5] Pay attention to the collocation and word order of coordinate phrases.

Pay attention to the sentences about the increase or decrease of quantity.

(7) Pay attention to the collocation of sentences with words such as "can" and "whether".

Pay attention to the emotional color of words in sentences.

2. Matters needing attention in modifying sick sentences:

(1) Don't add other contents and words besides the original sentence at will;

(2) An ill sentence often has only one ill-chosen language;

(3) The fewer changes to ill sentences, the better.

3. Understand the three requirements for modifying ill sentences to avoid unnecessary loss of points when doing the questions.

(1) Write the corrected sentence on the horizontal line. This requirement is relatively rare now.

(2) Modify the original sentence. Modifiers must be used correctly.

(3) Description method. Explain how to modify this sentence in one sentence.

Second, special exercises

(1) class hours: one class hour is required;

⑵ Preparation: Collect enough sick sentences, print them into small pieces of paper (one sick sentence on each piece of paper) and hold them in the hands of the teacher;

⑶ Number drawing: The four students in the picture draw a sick sentence from the teacher's hand, stand in front of the blackboard in turn, accurately copy the sick sentence to the blackboard, and correct it as required. (For the method of drawing numbers, see the article Introduction to Drawing Number Inspection Method. )

⑷ Evaluation: Rank the four students according to the correct degree, and praise, criticize or add points respectively.

Appendix 1: Collection of Ill Sentences in Jin

Now that you are here, I should go, too.

In order to prevent the epidemic from rebounding, the city leaders asked all units to further strengthen management and formulate strict preventive measures.

With the development of science today, no one will deny that the earth does not revolve around the sun.

Through the careful treatment of the doctor, she recovered quickly.

We should solve and discover the problems in our study in time.

◇ The economic loss caused by this fire, according to the conservative estimation of the relevant departments, has a direct loss of at least 30 million yuan.

Our Chinese textbooks are almost the thinnest in the world, which is several times less than similar textbooks in several major countries.

Whether Internet cafes can be cured is one of the conditions to ensure the healthy growth of teenagers.

The school warmly praised Liu Ming's courageous behavior.

His earnest and hard-working learning spirit is worth learning from each of our classmates.

The key to doing a good job in disaster relief depends on whether the style of cadres is in-depth.

According to the survey, the number of young smokers under the age of 8 in a community 120 was as high as120 the year before last. After extensive publicity and education, it has dropped to 60 this year, just doubling.

The students watched and listened to the brave hero's report with reverence.

From the above obvious facts, what they did is beyond reproach.

◇ Netizens generally believe that the strategic significance of aircraft carriers is not unusual for China.

How to prevent American troops in Iraq from being attacked by car bombs is a headache for the US government.

Both cadres and the masses must abide by the socialist legal system.

Whether the content is correct or not is an important criterion to measure a work.

This speech contest exposed many quick-thinking students.

Whether there is a concept of "agriculture-oriented" is the key to solve the problem of "agriculture, countryside and farmers".

The National Development and Reform Commission recently issued a notice to substantially reduce the maximum retail price of 24 commonly used drugs, with an average price reduction of 30% and a price reduction of about 3.5 billion yuan.

All kinds of newly discovered epidemics enable us to correct and understand our bad hygiene habits.

Thanks to the help of teachers and classmates, he opened his mind and mastered the method of solving problems, and his grades improved significantly.

Of course, the spirit of Lei Feng should be endowed with new connotations, but who can deny that there is no need to learn from Lei Feng now?

We should obey the traffic rules to avoid accidents.

Only by attending classes well and finishing your homework well can your academic performance be greatly improved.

Imagination is not necessary for the poet's creation, nor for the reader's appreciation.

This journal will turn a new page, continue to improve the editorial quality of manuscripts, and aspire to climb to a high-level and high-level literary publication.

The quality of the machine is an important condition to ensure safe production.

Due to the influence of SARS, the number of tourists visiting our city this year has more than doubled compared with the same period last year.

Only by persistent smelting and arduous mining can we get dazzling gold beads.

Under the rude interference of the conductor, Edison's desire to do experiments while selling newspapers on the train was dashed.

Today, the concept that science and technology are the primary productive forces is deeply rooted in people's hearts. Who can not believe that high technology will not bring good news to mankind?

Students should not make up their compositions.

With this compass, you won't get lost no matter when the clouds are overcast and the sun can't be seen in the morning and evening.

At this meeting, it is stipulated that each speaker's speech time should not exceed 30 minutes at most.

Xiao Ming always quibbles when he makes mistakes. Whatever you say about him, he will give you a lot of answers.

Whether we can fundamentally change the concept of education is an important guarantee for us to comprehensively promote the process of quality education.

After technical innovation, the cost of material factory doubled, while the output value increased by 10%.

◇ The old educated youth saw the feelings and states he had experienced in this book.

When I heard this story, it reminded me of many past events.

Shouldn't those who ignore traffic rules be blamed?

In order to prevent similar vicious accidents from happening again, we must strengthen management and take strict preventive measures.

No matter the climatic and geographical conditions were extremely unfavorable, the climbers still overcame many difficulties and succeeded in reaching the top.

Even if there is a downturn in study and setbacks in life, you must not be depressed.

Our army saw through the enemy's brilliant plan, arrived at Luding Bridge ahead of time and wiped them out on the other side of the river.

Xiao Wang is full of confidence in whether he can learn computer well.

In the past 200 years, about one third of the forests on the earth have been cut down and destroyed.

◇ Students have made clear their learning attitude and purpose.

After three years of study in junior high school, I have mastered a lot of knowledge and learned a lot about being a man.

We have to admit that the sun does not rise and set in the west.

Some parents don't realize that this is a disease, but stop their children from surfing the internet in a simple and rude way.

◇ "Control yourself" is not only the embodiment of a good mental outlook, but also the requirement of daily behavior norms.

Do psychic powers exist? Is truth or lies behind supernatural phenomena? Science can only make us give a negative answer.

The sponsors who invited the national flag, military flag and regional flag to visit space were two young people who grew up under the five-star red flag. ...

Whether water resources can be well protected is a major event related to the sustainable development of mankind.

During the period of ◇ 10, the number of books published each year more than doubled, while the total print run remained basically unchanged, indicating that the average number of books more than doubled.

After the party, her beautiful dancing and beautiful singing still reverberated in my ears.

There is a table filled with flowers every half mile or so by the roadside, and bees are flying butterflies among the flowers. It's really beautiful.

No one can deny that the economic development in recent years is not the result of reform and opening up.

◇ Three bogeys for sleep: one bogey is not angry before going to bed, the other bogey is not full before going to bed, and the third bogey is not affected by the wind.

In the process of building the Three Gorges Dam, no matter what kind of difficulties the workers encounter, they can overcome difficulties and forge ahead bravely.

Shaoxing yellow rice wine is the largest yellow rice wine production base in China.

Beijing will strive to improve the ecological environment and ensure the requirements of the "Green Olympics" for Beijing's environmental quality.

At this meeting, it is stipulated that each speaker's speech time should not exceed 30 minutes at most.

By reading famous books, I understand a lot about being a man and the true meaning of life.

The main target audience of the standard Chinese dictionary is a set of Chinese learning materials for children of foreign students in China and Chinese lovers in English-speaking countries.

The key to Henan's economic take-off lies in whether there is a good investment environment.

◇ BOCOG held a press conference a few days ago, announcing that the first collection of Olympic songs will be held on April 15 this year.

◇ Netizens generally believe that the strategic significance of aircraft carriers is not unusual for China.

Qi Hong, who came back from injury soon, began to score in the first game of the Top Ten, and then it was too late.

Who can deny that protecting our living environment is not protecting ourselves?

Even if there is a downturn in study and setbacks in life, you must not be depressed.

Do psychic powers exist? Is truth or lies behind supernatural phenomena? Science can only make us give a negative answer.

Starting from Kong Yiji's miserable life poisoned by feudal education, this paper strongly criticized the evil of feudal imperial examination system.

After listening to Song's introduction, I really appreciate it from the bottom of my heart.

◇ Some inflammations can be cured by western medicine, and so can Chinese medicine. Traditional Chinese medicine can not only compete with general antibiotics, but also have fewer side effects and lower cost.

◇ Very white wall, dazzling eyes.

Being good at adjusting our emotions will make us go into battle lightly and study happily.

Language fluency is an important criterion to measure the quality of a composition.

As soon as I entered the venue, I saw many colorful flags and a cheerful song.

At present, people's concept of environmental protection is relatively weak, which really needs to be improved.

Many people who have made achievements in scientific research have achieved success through hard work under very difficult objective conditions.

Thanks to everyone's efforts, we have completed the production of class web pages.

After joining the WTO, it is not excluded that those enterprises that cannot meet the needs of the international market will be eliminated.

Although some people criticize the film Hero in content, it cannot be said that it is not shocking in momentum and color.

Broadband network can not only browse information, send and receive emails, but also provide intelligent and personalized online video-on-demand and distance education.

In the publishing process, there are many successful attempts and breakthroughs in publishing innovation.

If we middle school students lack innovative spirit, we can't adapt to the requirements of the economic era.

◇ Experts remind: Take protective measures when watching the solar eclipse, and don't look directly with your eyes to avoid burning your eyes.

People are deeply infected by the old man's clear thinking and optimistic mood.

At that time, the fog all over the sky covered everything, and there was no news from the telephone poles in the distance.

There is a table filled with flowers every half mile or so by the roadside, and bees are flying butterflies among the flowers. It's really beautiful.

Choosing the most reliable and suitable materials often plays an important role in the success or failure of an article.

The professionalism embodied in scientists such as Deng Jiaxian and Yuan Longping is not only something that every scientific and technological worker should learn, but also worth learning from.

The school launched the climax of the competition to create a campus literary society.

Shaoxing yellow rice wine is the largest yellow rice wine production base in China.

A large number of facts tell us that the disasters caused by terrorists have no national boundaries.

After fierce competition, Shanghai won the right to host the 20 10 World Expo.

Recently, two newly discovered lost articles of Lu Xun were published in newspapers and periodicals, 1929 and 1934 respectively.

The fundamental purpose of developing productive forces in socialist countries is to improve people's living standards.

Today's youth have the responsibility to build China into a modern socialist power in this century.

Appendix II: Eight Points for Attention in Modifying Ill Sentences

Discrimination of language barriers is one of the necessary questions for senior high school entrance examinations in various places. How to distinguish and analyze language diseases is introduced in teaching books, and many teachers have summarized many methods, such as language sense reading, combing branches and leaves, sentence analogy and so on. However, these methods are troublesome and difficult to operate. Over the years, the author has found some familiar "faces", and after careful study, they have the same characteristics. Now it is summarized as eight points for attention. Here, I will introduce you with examples. If you master the rules, you can quickly and effectively identify and treat bad words, and get twice the result with half the effort.

1. Pay attention to the collocation of related words.

In sick sentences involving complex sentences, we should pay attention to their related words, consider whether the related words are properly collocated, whether the related words are misplaced, and whether the word order is reasonable. There are two kinds of related words in compound sentences: single use and paired use. If you use related words that must be used in pairs in a sentence, you should pay attention to whether they are properly matched and whether there is arrogance. If it is a compound sentence with progressive relationship, we should pay attention to whether the word order of the two clauses is reasonable and see if there are any improper words.

Example 1: Imagination is not necessary for the poet's creation, but also for the reader's appreciation.

Exodus 2: All cadres and the masses, without exception, must abide by the socialist legal system. (92 college entrance examination questions)

Analysis: Example 1 is a compound sentence with progressive relationship. If "not only but also" is used, and "not" is collocated with "but", the example will be wrong.

Example 2 "No matter" is an unconditional related word, followed by a phrase that cannot be used side by side, and can only be a selective phrase. In the example, "and" should be "or".

Ability improvement:

1. Only by listening to lectures and finishing homework well can the academic performance be greatly improved.

Now that you are here, I should go.

With this kind of compass, you won't get lost no matter when the clouds are overcast and the sun can't be seen in the morning and evening.

No matter how unfavorable the climate and geographical conditions were, the climbers still overcame many difficulties and succeeded in reaching the top.

5. "Control yourself" is not only the embodiment of good mental outlook, but also the requirement of daily behavior norms.

6. In the process of building the Three Gorges Dam, no matter what kind of difficulties the workers encounter, they can overcome difficulties and forge ahead bravely.

2. Pay attention to the sentences with the words "prohibition" and "prevention".

Some words, such as "prohibition", "prevention", "taboo" and "avoidance", have the meaning of "trying to stop". Proposers often add negative words, which leads to the opposite meaning of sentences and forms language barriers. When doing a problem, we should first examine the meaning of the problem, find out whether the original intention is to promote or prevent it, and then determine whether the negative words will stay or not.

In order to prevent the SARS epidemic from rebounding, the city leaders asked all units to further strengthen management and formulate strict preventive measures. (Senior High School Entrance Examination in Haidian District, Beijing in 2003)

Analysis: The original meaning of the example is "to stop the rebound of SARS". If negative words are added, "stop" and "no longer" will form a double negative, indicating affirmation, which is just the opposite of the original intention and becomes a speech barrier. "No" should be removed.

Ability improvement:

1. Three bogeys for sleeping: First, don't get angry before going to bed, second, don't eat enough before going to bed, and third, don't lie in the wind. (94 college entrance examination questions)

Some parents don't realize that this is a disease, but stop their children from surfing the internet in a simple and rude way.

In order to prevent similar vicious accidents from happening again, we must strengthen management and take strict preventive measures.

When writing a composition, students should not make things up. (2006 Guangdong Zhanjiang senior high school entrance examination questions)

We should obey the traffic rules to avoid accidents.

How to prevent American troops in Iraq from being attacked by car bombs is a headache for the US government.

Pay attention when there are multiple negative words in a sentence.

Proposers also like to confuse candidates with multiple negative words, so they should have a clear understanding of rhetorical questions: affirmative rhetorical questions mean negative meanings, and negative rhetorical questions mean positive meanings; If it is a double negative, it means yes. When there are many negative words, we might as well find out how many there are first, and then use the concept of "negative is positive" in mathematics to understand. If we find redundant negative words, we can determine that there are language barriers and delete redundant negative words.

With the development of science today, no one will deny that the earth does not revolve around the sun.

Analysis: "No one will deny …" Double negation expresses positive meaning, followed by negative word "not …", and finally expresses negative meaning. (Triple negation is negation. ) The word "no" should be removed.

Ability improvement:

1. Of course, the spirit of Lei Feng should be endowed with new connotations, but who can deny that there is no need to learn from Lei Feng now?

2. With the concept that science and technology are the primary productive forces deeply rooted in people's hearts today, who can not believe that high technology will not bring good news to mankind?

Shouldn't those who ignore traffic rules be blamed?

We have to admit that the sun does not rise and set in the west.

No one can deny that the economic development in recent years is not the result of reform and opening up.

4. Pay attention to prepositions in sentences.

In the use of prepositions, language barriers are easy to appear. This kind of sentence often consists of two parts, one is the adverbial of prepositional phrase, and the other is the normal sentence backbone. Proposers often set traps here and add prepositions to both parts, which makes the subject of the sentence hidden and causes language diseases with incomplete components. When reviewing, you will often find that you can delete both prepositions. At this time, you should pay attention to reading sentences, especially sentences with context, accurately grasp the real subject of sentences, and then delete redundant prepositions.

Example: Through three years' study in junior high school, I have mastered a lot of knowledge and learned a lot about being a man. (Examination questions in Zhanjiang, Guangdong Province in 2004)

Analysis: The prepositions "through ..." and "make ..." and the following phrases form an object-object phrase, which makes the original subject become an adverbial and the whole sentence has no subject. One of the prepositions should be removed.

Ability improvement:

1. When I heard this story, it reminded me of many past events.

Through the careful treatment of the doctor, she recovered quickly.

Under the rude interference of the conductor, Edison's desire to do experiments while selling newspapers on the train was dashed.

With the help of teachers and classmates, he opened his mind and mastered the method of solving problems, and his grades improved obviously.

From the above obvious facts, what they did is beyond reproach.

5. Pay attention to the collocation and word order of coordinate phrases.

This kind of sentences often have coordinate phrases as predicate or object, and the proposer often sets inappropriate collocation or word order. When verb coordinate phrases are used as predicates, we should pay attention to whether the word order is logical; In addition, pay attention to whether it can be matched with the head word before or after.

Example 1: We should solve and discover the problems in learning in time. (2004 Changsha senior high school entrance examination questions)

Example 2: The students watched and listened to the brave hero's report with reverence.

Analysis: It is illogical to "solve" and then "find" in the sentence 1, which belongs to improper word order. It should be changed to "find and solve in time".

In the coordinate phrase "look and listen", "listen" can be collocated with "report", but "look" and "listen" can't be collocated, and the sentence is improperly collocated.

Ability improvement:

1. Let's correct all kinds of newly discovered epidemics and know our bad hygiene habits.

2. Only by persisting in long-term smelting and hard mining can we get a dazzling golden bead.

3. The old educated youth saw the feelings and states he had experienced in this book.

The students have made clear their learning attitude and purpose.

After the party, her beautiful dancing and singing still reverberated in my ears.

6. Pay attention to the sentences about the increase or decrease of quantity.

Numerals can be divided into exact numbers and divisors, so we should master the rules of their use: you can't add words such as "least", "most", "highest", "exceeding" and "lowest" before divisors; When using words such as "reduce", "reduce" and "shrink", you can't use multiples, otherwise there will be contradictions. If we master these laws at ordinary times, we can avoid the trap of proposer. In addition, we should pay attention to repetitive language diseases.

During the period of 1: 10, the number of books published each year more than doubled, while the total print run remained basically unchanged, indicating that the average number of books more than doubled.

In the past 200 years, about one third of the forests on the earth have been cut down and destroyed.

Analysis: Example 1 When using words such as "decrease", "decrease" and "decrease", you can't use multiples, but use fractions or percentages instead.

Example 2 "about" and "about" both indicate uncertainty, and they are repeated, so one of them should be deleted.

Ability improvement:

1. After the technical innovation, the cost of the material factory doubled, while the output value increased by 10%. (2005 Shandong Heze senior high school entrance examination questions)

The economic losses caused by the fire, according to conservative estimates of relevant departments, directly lost at least 30 million yuan.

Our Chinese textbooks are almost the thinnest in the world, which is several times less than similar textbooks in several major countries.

Due to the influence of SARS, the number of tourists in our city has more than doubled this year compared with the same period last year.

5. The National Development and Reform Commission recently issued a notice to significantly reduce the maximum retail price of 24 commonly used drugs, with an average price reduction of 30% and a price reduction of about 3.5 billion yuan.

6. According to the survey, there were as many as 120 teenagers under the age of 8 in a community the year before last. After extensive publicity and education, it has dropped to 60 this year, just doubling.

Pay attention to the collocation of sentences with words such as "can" and "whether".

Be careful if there are words such as "whether", "whether", "good or bad" and "whether" in the sentence. This sentence may be guilty of improper collocation. Because these words put forward two situations, indicating double mention, most of them should be followed from two aspects, so as to match. However, proposers often set up language barriers here, some of which are followed by words such as "can" and "can't" indicating single commitment, and some are followed by words indicating double commitment, which leads to inconsistent logical errors.

Example 1: Whether the content is correct or not is an important criterion to measure a work.

Exodus 2: Doing a good job in production and disaster relief depends on whether the style of cadres is in-depth.

Analysis: For example 1, the word "whether the content is correct" in front of it means double mentioning, but the corresponding word behind it is single undertaking, which is inconsistent and leads to language confusion. You can add "advantages and disadvantages" after "works" and delete "one".

Example 2 "well done" is a single mention, "in-depth" is a double mention, which is inconsistent. "Well done" should be preceded by "can".

Ability improvement:

1. Whether the "stubborn disease" of Internet cafes can be cured is one of the conditions to ensure the healthy growth of teenagers. (2004 Changsha senior high school entrance examination questions)

2. Whether there is the concept of "agriculture-oriented" is the key to solve the problems of agriculture, countryside and farmers. (2005 Foshan Curriculum Reform Area Middle School Examination)

3. The quality of the machine is an important condition to ensure safe production.

4. Whether we can fundamentally change the concept of education is an important guarantee for us to comprehensively promote the process of quality education.

Xiao Wang is full of confidence in whether he can learn computer well.

6. Whether water resources can be well protected is a major event related to the sustainable development of mankind.

Pay attention to the emotional color of words in sentences.

Some sentences do not have the above pathological features, and there is no wrong language in grammar. At this time, we should pay attention to the emotional color of idioms or words in sentences, and whether the positive and negative meanings of this sentence match the emotional color of the words used.

: Exodus His earnest and diligent study spirit is worth learning from each of our classmates.

Analysis: "effective" means "not learning well", which is derogatory. It's not appropriate to use it here. It should be changed to "learning".

Ability improvement:

1. The school warmly praised Liu Ming's courageous behavior.

This speech contest exposed many quick-thinking students.

3. This journal will turn a new page, continue to improve the editing quality of manuscripts, and aspire to climb to a high-level and high-level literary publication.

Xiao Ming always quibbles when he makes mistakes. Whatever you say about him, he will give you a lot of answers.

Our army saw through the enemy's clever plan, arrived at Luding Bridge ahead of time and wiped them out on the other side of the river.

6. The sponsors who invited the national flag, military flag and regional flag to visit space were two young people who grew up under the five-star red flag. ...

These methods are simple, rapid and effective. Of course, not all language diseases can be distinguished by these methods, and the problem-solving methods should be flexibly used according to the specific situation when doing the problem.

Answer the case:

I. 1。 Replace "ability" with "ability"; 2. Replace "should" with "should"; 3. Replace "and" with "or";

4. Replace "regardless" with "despite"; 5 should be "not only the requirement of daily behavior norms, but also the embodiment of good mental outlook"; 6. Change "can" to "can".

Ii. 1. Delete three "not allowed"; 2.3.5. Delete No.4.. Delete "Don't" 7. Delete "free"

Three. Delete the word "no" in 1, which are "no", "no", "no" and "no" respectively.

4. 1.2.3. If there is no context, you can delete "yes" or the preposition before it.

4. Delete "manufacturing only" and 5. Delete "from".

V. 1。 "Correcting and understanding" should be "understanding and correcting"; 2. It should be "hard mining and persistent smelting", 3. Delete "feeling harmonious"; 4. Delete "attitude and"; 5. Delete "graceful dancing".

VI. 1. Replace "double" with "half" or "50%"; 2. Delete "at least" or "above";

3. Replace "several times" with "several times"; 4. Replace "more than once" with "more than 50%"

5. Delete "about" or "about"; 6. Change "once" to one-half "or 50%".

VII. 1. Delete "No"; 2. Replace "yes" with "yes, can it be solved";

3. Delete "good or bad"; 4. Replace "we solved it" with "can we solve it";

5. Replace "may" with "may"; 6. Delete "No".

1. Replace "behavior" with "behavior"; 2. Change "exposure" into "emergence";

3. "Turn over a new leaf" is changed to "adjust the layout"; 4. Replace "draw inferences from others" with "deny in every way"

5. Change "clever calculation" into "intrigue"; 6. Replace "initiator" with "initiator".