How to write after finishing the fourth grade?

How to write the review for Band 4 as follows:

It was very hot that morning, about 36℃! The clouds were evaporating, the leaves were burning and the roads were boiling, but these didn't affect our enthusiasm for visiting at all, so we went out in the hot summer.

When we entered the gate of "Shanghai World Expo" sweating profusely, a cool breeze blew. In the bustling air-conditioned hall, I walked into the first door and saw the model boat inside.

The bow of this ship has a pointed and long beacon; There is a sail on the boat; There is a cockpit under the sail; The cockpit has a rudder; In the middle and back of the ship, there is a dark brown hard iron anchor; There is a bright red flag at the stern, fluttering in the wind. When I entered the second door, I saw many unique things on the ancient ship.

For example: twelve-horn bronze wooden rudder, rust red iron anchor ... maybe some of them are imported? A short hour passed quickly, and when I visited the whole Expo, I fully realized it.

The feedback is as follows:

After watching a movie, a series or visiting an exhibition, you write an article about your specific feelings and enlightenment. The so-called feeling can be the truth or subtle thoughts learned from the work, the thinking and association inspired by the content in the work, and the determination and ideal inspired by watching.

The feeling of feedback is introduced as follows:

Many students began to write their own reflections, and often wrote the contents of "opinions" very long. They always like to introduce the story from beginning to end, for fear that readers don't know its content, but there are few words to express their feelings. For example, a classmate wrote a review of the story of the only child, and he told the story from beginning to end.

The format of the feedback is as follows:

From vision to feeling, this opening part is like an eye-catching slogan or introduction. First of all, make it clear what movies you saw and how you felt. Generally speaking, this part requires conciseness and cut to the chase. Don't beat around the bush, sell secrets or hide things, but speak your feelings in a positive tone.