Modification of sick sentences

0 1, no matter how hot the weather is, everyone still keeps exercising.

02. The task given to me by the company commander has been successfully completed.

After education, the victims of "FxG" have polished their eyes and raised their awareness.

Students must obey the traffic rules to prevent accidents.

05. In class, Xiaohua keeps her eyes fixed on the teacher.

I bought a pen, a ruler, an eraser and some stationery, and then hurried home.

No matter how good you study, there is no reason to be proud.

Martha is wearing a blue trench coat and a yellow hat.

09. Tonight, the sky is like a mirror and there are many stars. What a beautiful night scene!

10, the square was crowded with countless people.

After treatment, Xiaoming's illness has recovered.

Great changes have taken place in China since the reform and opening up.

13, after listening to the teacher, I was very educated.

I visited most of the scenic spots in the Summer Palace.

15. In the deep mountains in the northeast, earth coal mines are scattered everywhere.

He sat there listening to the teacher with rapt attention.

17. After writing a composition, you should learn to correct incorrect typos.

18, in the course of working, our hands stained the soil.

19, I whispered when I heard the news.

Only about seventy-two people attended the meeting this time.

2 1, his hands are almost completely frozen.

Many trees are planted in the campus, such as Chinese rose, begonia, phoenix tree, pine and cypress.

There are many toys in the children's shop, such as building blocks, dolls, electric trains and football.

On Sunday, the students took bread, eggs, apples, bananas, cookers and food to have a picnic.

She is wearing a bright red scarf and a white shirt.

I read books all day this morning.

27. It is shameful that this kind of food is not cherished and wasted at will.

28. The quantity of commodities on the market has greatly increased.

The students all said that yesterday's activity was a pleasant day.

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Answer: 1. Replace "regardless" with "despite". 2. Replace "implementation" with "completion". 4. Prevent the conflict between "don't" and "don't" and remove one.

"Don't blink" means "stare". Remove one. 6. and "change to" etc. 7. "Although ... but" change to "even if ..."

8. Change "harmony" to "night view". "Remove 10." Many, many "and" countless "and then go to 1 1. "Disease" and "health".

12. Add personal name before "Delete 13". "Very cultured", such as: classmate 14. "All" conflicts with "Most", so choose any one.

15. "Sparse" and "sparse" go to 16. Concentrate. Concentrate on going to A.

17. Go to "incorrect" 18. Change the order of "our hands" and "dirt" 19. Who am I talking to? Change "I" to "We"

20. "72" is so accurate and still "around"? Go left and right 2 1. "Almost" and "completely" leave a 22. "Tree" instead of "plant"

23. Football is not a children's toy, so "24." And "25" and "wearing" were deleted on the morning of 26th.

27. Add "phenomenon" after "waste". Change "quantity" to "quality". Remove one from "activities" and "days".

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Common types of ill sentences

First, the word order is improper

1, the attribute position is wrong. For example:

(1) It is impossible for China to be self-sufficient in cotton production for a long time.

Cotton produced in China cannot be self-sufficient for a long time. )

(2) The vast rural youth show great enthusiasm for socialism.

The attribute "incomparable" is misplaced in the adverbial position, which leads to a sick sentence. We should put "incomparable" before "enthusiasm". )

2. The adverbial position is improper. For example:

(3) In the cause of socialist construction, we should give full play to our extensive knowledge.

(The adverbial "enough" is misplaced in the attributive position and should be placed before "play". )

3. Improper position of function words

& lt 1 & gt； The adverb "bu" is in the wrong position. For example:

(4) If we don't do our own domestic affairs well, it will be difficult for us to have a say in the world. The negative adverb of the word "ba" should be placed before the word "ba".

(5) If we don't check the work of contract farming now, we can't hoe the land ahead. (The word "no" should be moved before the word "and")

& lt2> Improper placement of related words

When two clauses in a complex sentence use the same subject, the related words should be behind the subject; When the subject is different, the related words should be in front of the subject. If it is upside down, it is out of place. For example:

He not only studies hard, but also helps other students. ("He" should be moved before "Not only")

Second, improper collocation.

1, improper collocation of subject and predicate, such as:

(7) In the early morning, the students who participated in the long-distance running galloped on the expressway. Students should use "running" instead of "galloping". )

(8) the torrent of feelings is rolling, and the blood of the whole body is whistling. ("Hot blood" can only "boil", not "roar")

His lofty revolutionary qualities often appear in my mind. ("quality" can't be "budding", but it can be changed to "his great revolutionary image". )

2. Improper collocation of verbs and objects. For example:

(10) These articles are full of Marxist viewpoints. ("flicker" should be "light". )

(1 1) Before liberation, my father and brother didn't earn enough money to support their families. Only people can "feed" but not "live". )

(12) Shanghai Science and Technology Development Center has gathered a group of professional teams who are enthusiastic about science and technology development services and good at management. ("Gathering" should be "specialized talents". )

3. Improper collocation of subject and object. For example:

(13) The last day of work is the most tense, enjoyable and meaningful day for the students. ("labor" means "one day", so just delete "labor". )

(14) The political situation of stability and unity is the prerequisite for the establishment and perfection of China's socialist market economic system. ("situation" means "condition" is not suitable, so "situation" can be deleted. )

4. Improper collocation of modifiers and headwords. For example:

(15) He has made great efforts in cultivating improved varieties. (The word "big" should be changed to "many". )

(16) I have a pair of smart and capable hands and can do anything. ("Smart and capable" should be changed to "smart". )

(17) At this meeting, we had an extensive exchange of views on salary. (It should be changed to "extensive communication". )

5, one side and two sides are not properly matched. For example:

(18) The improvement of academic performance depends on whether students work hard or not. ("improving your grades" is one-sided, and "whether you work hard" is two-sided. It can be changed to: the improvement of academic performance depends on students' own efforts. Or changed to: whether the academic performance can be improved depends on whether the students work hard or not. )

(19) Artists have always been looked down upon by people, but now they are popular. Between this supercilious look and love, they appreciate the warmth of the world. "White eyes" and "favor" refer to two sides, while "tenderness" only corresponds to one side. )

6. Negation and affirmation are not properly matched. For example:

(20) Should we attach importance to Chinese learning? Is it okay to study only math and physics? Our answer isno. There are both positive and negative answers to the previous questions, and the latter answers only take care of the negative answers. )

(2 1) I think it is unnecessary to describe this, and no one can imagine it. ("No one can imagine" means "No one can imagine", which is just the opposite of the original sentence. )

When checking whether collocation is appropriate, we should pay special attention to checking coordinate phrases to prevent the phenomenon of paying attention to one thing and losing another. For example:

(22) Take various measures to cultivate and improve the level of teachers, especially middle-aged teachers. (Improper collocation of "cultivation" and "level")

Third, the results are incomplete or redundant.

1, the composition is incomplete

& lt 1 & gt； Missing theme. For example:

(23) From this small matter, it illustrates a big problem. What is the subject of "explanation"? The subject-object phrase cannot be the subject, so "from ……" can be deleted. )

(24) There are many comments about the TV movie Peking Man in new york. (Delete "about" to make the subject of the sentence appear. )

& lt2> is missing predicates. For example:

(25) These roles are of different types and have a considerable distance. If you don't have the skills to shape the role, you can't play well. ("These roles are different types" lacks a predicate, so it should be supplemented by "belonging". )

(26) recently, a comprehensive quality inspection activity was carried out, and a series of work such as establishing and strengthening the technical management system should be carried out in this activity. Which verb is the object of "a series of jobs"? If you can't find a suitable one in the original sentence, you should add the predicate "completed" before "established" to make it smooth. )

& lt3> is missing an object. For example:

In the past two years, they have promoted the scientific farming of horses and brigades throughout the county. ("promote" what? The object "experience of ..." is missing. )

We should make every effort to mechanize and collectivize our agriculture. It is appropriate to "take the road of …". )

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There are redundant elements such as subject, predicate and attribute. Here is just an example for a brief explanation.

(29) We sophomores, in class, generally speaking, we can listen carefully and observe classroom discipline. (The topic is redundant. )

The lecture notes borrowed from your college last time are being printed and can be distributed to students before class. (Predicate redundancy)

(3 1) Commemorating "Three? The arrival of the eighth festival. (There are redundant elements after the object. )

(32) What a rich subtext of "silence" is behind this sentence. (Attributive redundant)

Together with the old farmer, he repeatedly conducted high-yield wheat experiments. (pile up adverbials and delete one at will. )

Xiao Wang takes every job seriously. (The complement is redundant. )

Fourth, the structure is chaotic.

1, sentence combination. This means that two or more groups of sentence structures are mixed together, making the meaning unclear. For example:

(35) This method is sanitary and convenient, and is deeply loved by the masses. (or "deeply loved by the masses" or "deeply loved by the masses")

(36) People who have been bound by the planned economy for many years have also awakened. ("Once bound ..." and "bound by ..." can be mixed, and both can be used. )

2. Change the subject of the sentence. Sometimes the subject of a clause is changed in a complex sentence, which makes the original subject and predicate unable to match, and also causes structural confusion. For example:

The old worker's words deeply touched Xiaoqiu's heart, and he could not be calm for a long time. (The subject of the former clause is "words" and the subject of the latter clause is "Xiaoqiu's heart", which is a secret transformation and causes confusion. It can be changed to "... touched Xiaoqiu and kept his heart for a long time ..."

3. The level is not clear. For example:

(38) Xinhua News Agency found that after the successful completion of the synthetic yeast alanine transfer ribonucleic acid in Shanghai, readers attached great importance to it, and the scientific community also attached great importance to it and reacted strongly. ("Arouse a strong reaction" is an abstract sentence, which should be said first and then concrete; For scientific achievements, let's talk about the reaction of "scientific people" before the reaction of "readers".

4. Improper punctuation will cause confusion. For example:

The success of this film is attributed to the collective strength, the artistic leadership of the film bureau, the assistance of the original author of the stage play and the dedication of all the actors. These are all new experiences that I have never experienced. (When a comma is used after "collective strength", readers naturally regard the following words as the object of "thanks", but the author's original intention is to regard the following words as the subject of "everything is", and a period must be used after "strength")

Verb (abbreviation of verb) is ambiguous.

Ambiguity includes two situations: one is "inexplicable" and the other is "ambiguous". "Confusion" is expressed in one sentence, but it can't make people understand what it says; "Ambiguity" means that there are two understandings of a sentence. No matter "inexplicable" or "ambiguous", it is a manifestation of unclear expression. Here is an example:

1, puzzling. For example:

(40) Visiting the Firesaw Factory with Ridge and the Forest Light Rail is my way home from this trip. How can a "visit" be a "homecoming"? The author means, "... is what I plan to do on my way home from my trip." ”)

2. ambiguous. For example:

(4 1) The factory director adopted the rationalization suggestions of two workers, which greatly stimulated the enthusiasm of the employees in the factory to make suggestions. ("two workers" or "two suggestions"? Understanding leads to ambiguity. )

(42) The county informed Zhao Xiangchang to report before 15 this month. (it can be understood as "before 15") or "before 15")

When buying apples, no child wants them. (It can be understood as "a person's apple" and "a child". )

3. The reference is unknown. For example:

After thinking for a long time, she still can't make up her mind. Finally, she decided to go to Aunt Wang's house not far from home and let her go home with her. (Who will accompany who? Probably "two aunts accompanied her". )

(45) Boss Song reunited with Qi San after a long separation and talked about speculation. He lit a cigarette for him ... (Who lit a cigarette for whom? I can't guess. )

Sixth, illogical.

The "illogical" here means that the meaning of a sentence cannot be said in reason. Common types are:

1, which is contradictory. For example:

He is one of the survivors of many deaths. (The contradiction between "victim" and "survivor". )

Many people who have made achievements in scientific and intellectual research have achieved success through tenacious and hard work under very difficult objective material conditions. (The contradiction between "everything" and "many")

2. Improper juxtaposition of concepts. The concept of juxtaposition should also be divided according to the same standard. If the standards are confused, it will lead to the mistake of juxtaposing the concepts of size and different categories. For example:

This farm is determined to increase the output of grain, cotton and cash crops. ("Cotton" is a "cash crop", and the two cannot be juxtaposed. )

Swimming tickets are divided into ordinary tickets, visiting tickets, monthly tickets and season tickets. "Visiting ticket" is not a "game ticket" and cannot be juxtaposed with "ordinary ticket". )

3, strong pull cause and effect. For example:

Because he is partial to science, he is not interested in mathematics and physics. (The latter is the concrete manifestation of the former, not the result. )

(5 1) Because he is a northerner, his thoughts are basically the same. (There is no causal relationship before and after)

4. The subject and object are reversed. For example:

The name Edison is no stranger to us young students. Students' recognition of the name Edison. )

(53) The study mood last year was quite different from this year. (Comparing the first two with the last two, the latter is always the main body, so it should be said: "My study mood this year is the same as last year ...")

5. Improper denial. For example:

No one can deny that excellent academic performance is not achieved through hard work. There is a triple negation, and the whole sentence expresses the meaning of negation, which is just the opposite of the original intention. )

(55) Of course, the play also promoted feudal ideas such as karma, so who can deny that the play has no negative effects? The rhetorical question itself is also negative, so this sentence expresses a negative meaning, not intentionally. )

6, unreasonable. For example:

In the afternoon, after a thunderstorm, a beautiful rainbow appeared in the western sky. The rainbow appears in the opposite direction to the sun, and the rainbow in the afternoon can only appear in the east. )

As long as you study hard, you can get into a good university. "Study hard" is not a sufficient condition for "getting into a good university". )

Reply: BD 199444- Beginner in Jianghu Level 2 6-22 13: 10.

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Common types of ill sentences

1, the word order is not much

(1) China is now self-sufficient in cotton production. (The attributive and the head word are reversed and should be changed to "cotton production")

Many teachers talked enthusiastically with him in the lounge yesterday. (The multi-layer adverbial is out of order, and the object-object phrase is usually next to the head sentence, so it should be changed to "talk to him enthusiastically")

(3) The document has made detailed provisions and profound exposition on some issues in the economic field in theory and policy. The words are not arranged in the right order, so "profound explanation" should take care of "theory" and "detailed rules" should take care of "policy". )

2. Improper collocation

(1) Spring breeze blows in waves, branches sway, moonlight and shadows shake together, making a rustling sound. If the subject and predicate are not properly matched, "moonlight" will not make a sound. )

(2) After filming the film, she announced her formal retirement. ("Career" can't "quit" because of improper collocation of verbs and objects)

(3) This is a highly competitive exam, and it takes great efforts to beat other competitors. (The related words are not collocated properly, so "Fei" and "Cai" cannot be used together. )

3. Incomplete or redundant components

(1) Mr. Lu Xun created essays in the struggle and became a wonderful flower in literature and art (missing the subject, changing "creation" to "being created")

(2) Actively participate in the disposal of social catastrophic accidents, resolve risks and stabilize social life. (lack of predicate, add "bear" before "participate")

(3) As long as you are diligent and willing to endure hardships, nothing can beat you. (If there is no object, add "determination" after "willing to endure hardship")

(4) This is a worrying idea. (redundant, "thinking" means thinking, and "thinking" can be deleted)

4, the structure is chaotic

(1) Zhike expectorant tablets, the main components of which are made of polygala tenuifolia, platycodon grandiflorum, Fritillaria cirrhosa and ammonium chloride. (It should be "the main component is ..." or "it is composed of ...", two formats or one. )

(2) Do you know how many people have to work hard to publish a translation before they can meet the readers? ("strive to publish …" and "a translator … met" are mixed together, and only one sentence can be selected. )

5. The ideographic meaning is unclear

(1) bureau leaders such as the director and deputy director attended the commendation meeting. (It is not clear whether the leaders of other bureaus are leaders of this bureau or leaders of other bureaus)

(2) Palestinian guerrillas are preparing to attack Israel. (It is not clear whether "Palestinian guerrillas attack Israel" or "Israel attacks Palestinian guerrillas")

6, illogical

He is one of many surviving victims. Since it is "spared", it is not dead. How can you say "one" in "victim"?

Second, the basic methods of modifying sick sentences

1, learn about several common types of ill sentences, especially the six types pointed out in the exam instructions; Improper word order, improper collocation, incomplete or redundant components, chaotic structure, unclear meaning and illogical. Familiar with the routine methods of correcting sick sentences.

2. The purpose of modifying ill sentences is to make the sentences accurate and clear. When you modify a sick sentence, you must keep the original intention and don't change it.

As soon as I entered the West Lake Park, I saw colorful flags flying and singing loudly in the park.

This sentence is guilty of improper collocation. You can see "colorful flags flying", but you can't see "singing loudly" When modifying this ill sentence, you can't delete "loud singing" because of improper collocation, because the whole sentence shows the excitement of the park from two aspects. Deleting "loud singing" will change the original meaning of the sentence. This sentence can be changed to "As soon as I entered the West Lake Park, I saw colorful flags flying and heard loud songs".

3. Grasping the main sentence from the perspective of grammar. Whether it is a single sentence or a complex sentence, grasping the trunk of the sentence will also grasp the basic meaning of the sentence, which is conducive to retaining the original intention when correcting the sick sentence. When grasping the trunk, pay attention to identify whether there is a problem with the trunk. If there are defects such as incomplete components, improper collocation of subject and predicate, improper collocation of verb and object, we must first correct them.

The dereliction of duty of the director of the grain depot caused 40 tons of wheat to rot. In order to strictly enforce the law and discipline, the superior leaders decided to give them administrative demerits and compensate some economic losses.

The backbone of this sentence is "the superior leader" ... decides ... and gives compensation ... "It is obviously contrary to the meaning of the whole sentence. The person who "compensates" should be the director of the grain depot who is dereliction of duty, not the superior leader. "Order him" should be added before "compensation".

4. From the lexical point of view, see whether the modifiers of the sentence are properly matched with the head language, and whether the content words and function words of the sentence are used properly.

After the Chinese class, Huang Xiaojing handed over the two compositions finished after class to the teacher.

The numerals in this sentence are not used properly, so the word "two" should be changed to "two". Say "two meters" and "two lights" instead of "two meters" and "two lights".

5. Let's talk about logic first. Although there are no chapters to introduce logical knowledge in middle school texts, some logical knowledge is often needed when modifying sick sentences. Usually, we should pay attention to mastering some basic logical knowledge. Some sentences are logically wrong, so we should consider them from a logical point of view when modifying them.

The car sped along the winding mountain road like an arrow.

The "arrow that leaves the string" goes straight ahead, and the "winding" twists and turns, and the metaphor in the sentence is unreasonable and illogical. It should be changed to "the car is galloping on the expressway like an arrow leaving the string."

The conventional methods of modifying sick sentences are adding words, deleting words and changing words.

Third, choose, imitate and change sentence patterns.

A meaning can be expressed not only in this sentence pattern but also in another sentence pattern. For example, "we have finished reading the book" can also be said to be "we have finished reading the book"; "There are many things in the shop" can also be said to be "there are many things in the shop". However, due to the different tone, emotional appeal and stylistic colors of different sentence patterns, the rhetorical functions are also different. Therefore, oral composition should carefully select and transform the most appropriate and expressive sentences according to the needs of expression and expression. There are many kinds of sentence patterns, such as active and passive sentence patterns, positive and negative sentence patterns, general sentence patterns and special sentence patterns. If you master the law of sentence pattern change, you can choose the most suitable sentence pattern to serve the expression of ideological content.

1, positive sentences are transformed into negative sentences.

The same sentence can be expressed by affirmative and negative sentences, but the semantics of the latter is not as good as the former. When turning positive sentences into negative sentences, we should be careful not to reverse the meaning of the sentences.

The appearance of this building is very beautiful.

In the negative sentence, we can say "this building looks not ugly", but we can't simply add the negative sentence "not ugly" and say "this building looks not ugly". In this way, although it is also a negative sentence, the meaning of the sentence is reversed.

This sentence can also be expressed in the style of double negation. The positive significance of double negation can be said as "I have to admit that the appearance of this building is very beautiful." The meaning is the same as the original sentence, but the tone is stronger.

2, long sentences into short sentences

In the face of complex long sentences, we must first find out its trunk, then distinguish whether it is the trunk of the sentence or the branches and leaves, turn the complex part into a clause, and the long sentence becomes a short sentence.

① The far peak pine slope of Taibai Mountain to the west of Qinling Mountains and the bamboo forests and villages and towns in the upper reaches of Weihe Plain are all shrouded in endless spring rain.

The backbone of the sentence is "the distant peaks, pine slopes, bamboo forests and villages and towns are shrouded in boundless spring rain." The complex part is the subject, and the subject is acted as a coordinate phrase. We can take the coordinate phrases apart, make several clauses with predicates, and turn this long sentence into the following short sentence.

The distant peaks and pine slopes of Taibai Mountain at the western foot of Qinling Mountains are shrouded in boundless spring rain. Bamboo forests and villages in the upper reaches of Weihe Plain are also shrouded in endless spring rain.

(2) When we marched from the burning land of Shandong to the Central Plains, under the majestic Shanhaiguan, on the vast North China Plain, between Jianghan Huaihe River and the northwest plateau covered with sand, a magnificent picture of historical March has been unfolded.

The main part of the sentence is "the magnificent picture of the great historical March, which has been unfolded on the vast territory of our motherland." There are five adverbials before the subject. The combination of adverbial and predicate can form several clauses.

When we marched from the burning land of Shandong to the Central Plains, under the majestic Shanhaiguan, on the vast North China Plain, between Jianghan and Huaihe River, on the northwest plateau covered by hills and sand, and on the vast territory of the motherland, a magnificent picture of historical March has been unfolded.

3. Short sentences and long sentences

To summarize several short sentences into a long sentence, the most important thing is to find a central sentence, and then organize the contents of other sentences into this central sentence as a sentence component. Pay attention to the fluency of sentences when correcting.

Change the following three sentences into single sentences, and the content cannot be changed.

We should unswervingly develop China's socialist economic construction.

We should adhere to self-reliance and strive for foreign aid as a supplement.

We should learn and introduce foreign advanced technology.

Take the second sentence as the central sentence and the third sentence as the attribute of a long sentence, and write it as follows:

We should unswervingly adhere to self-reliance, strive for foreign aid as a supplement, learn and introduce foreign advanced technology, and develop China's socialist economic construction.

You can adjust, delete and add words when organizing sentences, but you can't change the meaning of sentences.

Imitation sentence refers to writing another sentence according to certain requirements according to the provided sentence. When imitating writing, you should pay attention to the fact that the sentences you write are as similar as the sentences you provide, with the same self-description, the same sentence pattern and the same structure. For example, fill in the appropriate sentences on the horizontal line of the following paragraph, and take care of the content to form a parallelism sentence.

Write a book with friendship, a thick book. In the book: friendship is like a pearl, we wear it together to form a brilliant necklace; Friendship is like us, friendship is like us,

Metaphor is used in the examples given, and metaphor should also be used in imitating the sentences written. The sentence after metaphor should be related to metaphor and the content should be taken care of. The title requires that the imitation sentence should form a parallelism sentence with the example sentence, and the structure of the imitation sentence should be the same as that of the example sentence. Examples of parody are: friendship is like colored silk, which we cut together and sew into gorgeous clothes; Friendship is like oil painting. We paint together and paint a wonderful scenery.