Why write a composition in detail?

1. What is the reason for writing a detailed article? I found this. As we all know, in the narrative, whether you are taking notes or taking notes, you can't use the materials equally, but you should choose something and pay attention to the choice of details.

So, what is the basis for detailed selection? The only basis here is the needs of the center. If it is closely related to the central statement, it should be written in detail, deeply and thoroughly; If it has little to do with the center, you should simply write it and stop here.

Students have read Growing Peanuts by Xu Dishan in junior high school. This article describes the process of growing flowers and eating peanuts raw in my family. When we look back, we will find that in this article, planting peanuts is very simple: "Our brothers and sisters like it very much. We bought seeds, broke ground and watered the garden. A few months later, we actually gained something. "

It's even easier to write about eating peanuts, just saying: "The food made from peanuts has already been eaten, but my father's words are deeply imprinted in my heart." The article is very detailed about the family talking about peanuts, especially my father's words. Father said, "Peanut has many benefits, but one of them is the most valuable.

Unlike beautiful apples, peaches and pomegranates, this kind of adzuki bean hangs its fruit on the branches, and its bright red and light green color makes people envy it at first sight. Peanuts can only be dug up when the fruit is buried in the ground and ripe.

When you happen to see a peanut growing on the ground, you can't tell whether it has fruit at once. You have to touch it to know. ""You should be like a peanut, because it is useful, not beautiful and useless. "

So, why does the author write like this? Because the center of the article is to praise a simple and useful person through the discussion of peanuts. Maybe some students will say, in this case, why write about planting peanuts and eating peanuts? Doesn't it seem verbose to write even a little? In fact, it is impossible not to write these.

Because there are no flowers and peanuts, there is no scene to celebrate family reunion at the "Harvest Festival". Without this scene, there is no way to arouse the profound words of my father. This tells us a detailed principle: it helps to highlight and express the key content of the center, so we must write in detail and splash ink; If the content is not heavy, lacking or discarded, it is necessary to take a cursory look and cherish the ink as gold.

Why detailed, why omitted? Everything is decided by the expression in the center of the article. The above is a memorable article. Let's read another unforgettable article and experience the relationship between the complexity and the center of the article.

The following is an exercise called Pepper, which is about a female classmate in the class. Because of her hot personality, she got the nickname "Chili". In this article, the author chooses three groups of materials: the first group is the origin of the nickname "Chili"; The second group is to write the performance of "spicy" through a specific thing; The third group wrote another expression of "spicy" through one thing.

Let's look at how these three groups of materials are handled in the article. The first group, The Origin of Nicknames, pointed out at the beginning that "there is a reason to call her Chili", and wrote down the reason why she got this nickname: that is, one day after school, her deskmate accidentally knocked her pen to the ground and the nib was stained with mud.

This is a great thing, just like poking a hornet's nest, she is about to explode. My voice was very sharp, and then I shouted hard, which was deafening.

Her deskmate said, "I'll pay you one!" " Look at you! You are going to eat people! I don't think you should call it Li in the future, just call it' Li Chili'! "Since then, the nickname has spread. Of course, this paragraph is indispensable. Judging from the origin of her name, it has initially shown the "spicy" power.

This article is outlined here, but it is not introduced in detail. Even though Li didn't specify what she shouted, her expression and words at that time left a concrete impression on the readers. This short paragraph is still "explanatory" to the full text, and it really should be abbreviated.

Then the author turns to the first case, with a small transition, and summarizes many cases, but there is only one sentence: "Chili" is becoming more and more "spicy". Whoever touches her, whether intentionally or unintentionally, she will quarrel with you. Referring to the following, I wrote one thing in detail: once, the student on duty sprinkled water and accidentally spilled water on her newly worn pants.

As soon as she saw it, her favorite New Pants was splashed with water, and the shrill voice rang again: "Are you blind, sprinkling water on other people's pants? Do you think I'm greedy in New Pants? How can you be so bad and shameless ... "Her voice grew louder and louder, and the air seemed to be too scared to walk any further. I hurried forward to persuade them to leave.

The students began to talk about it. One of them said, "Chili is really real. We quarreled over such a trivial matter." Another student stuck out his tongue and said, "It's really Chili."

More and more students call her Chili, and some even call her face to face. Instead of being angry, she said, "What's wrong with spicy food? Save yourself from being bullied by others! " This detailed description is very useful to show the hero's personality characteristics of "being reasonable and not letting people"

Compared with the nickname, this paragraph is much more detailed. He not only wrote the specific language of "Chili", but also touched the atmosphere at that time and wrote the emotional dynamics of students.

Not only that, but also specifically mentioned her own views on this "spicy": What happened to "spicy"? Save yourself from being bullied by others This sentence is very important. Explain that the original intention of "pepper" is not to bully others, but to "defend itself" and not allow others to bully themselves; At the same time, it also tells people that this feature of her is dominated by some kind of thought. At this point in the article, this "spicy" feature has been clearly written, and there is no need to add it.

Therefore, at this turning point, the article writes about the change of "Chili", and there is another small turning point here: Later, with the help of teachers and classmates, "Chili" made great progress, studied hard and was very active, and was elected as a class-level cultural and entertainment Committee member by classmates. Her high-pitched and harsh voice can come in handy this time, but her "spicy" strength has not changed.

Speaking of her change, she became more active and at the same time she was telling.

There is a good composition teacher who writes in great detail.

When I was in primary school, I was always an inferior person. No one wants to be friends with me because of his stubborn temper and withdrawn personality. Every time I row seats, the teacher always makes me sit in the last row.

Most of the people sitting in the last row are poor students, and I have nothing to say with them. I want to look at the blackboard and copy notes, but there is nothing I can do. Who said that I liked reading after class since I was a child, and I was nearsighted if I didn't pay attention to my reading posture! So every class can only stare at the blackboard in a daze, stare at the book for a while, and play tricks for a while.

One semester before graduation, the original class teacher "jumped ship" and a new class teacher came. She is young, wearing a white dress, with short ears and a smile. Her dimples are exposed and she looks very sweet.

"My name is * *, and I will know every student's situation clearly." She introduced herself with a smile.

I gave her a disdainful look: Is she really that powerful? Will she know that I am nearsighted? Will she know that I don't want to sit in the last row but stubbornly sit in the last row? She'll know ...

Unexpectedly, a few days later, she really noticed me. It was a Chinese self-study class, and everyone was doing homework. I also spread out my homework and pretended to be doing it. In fact, I do nothing but make sentences-a topic that allows me to play freely.

Suddenly, she came up to me and asked me, "What are you doing?" I picked up my exercise book. I have never received such a "courtesy", and I can't help but feel hot, but I still lie on my desk, waiting for the thunderbolt I am used to. Unexpectedly, she smiled and asked, "Did you do all this?"

"hmm."

"That's great." Flower bones listen to branches in spring ",how aura! But why don't you say' Listen to the footsteps of spring'? "

"Sometimes there is no spring, but it is covered with green gauze and riding the breeze." The first time I received such a reward, my courage suddenly increased.

The teacher took my exercise book to the podium and made sentences-taking my exercise book as a model. I only remember that half an hour is my most unforgettable.

Later, I won the first prize in a Chinese exam. She woke up three students in the first row, pointed to a seat in the middle and said to me, "You can sit here in the future."

I walked past in a daze. She added: "I hope everyone can learn from XXX. You know, there are seats in the last row in the world, but there are no people sitting in the last row all the time. "

Tears filled my eyes.

Three years have passed, and I am about to graduate from junior high school. In the meantime, I forgot many people and things, but my impression of this teacher is unforgettable. I know I will never forget her-a mentor who changed my life.

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This is a masterpiece with sincere feelings, literariness and emotion. The little author tells an exciting story to people in concise and accurate language, and vividly depicts the image of a beautiful, kind and good teacher who is good at discovering students' advantages and helping them.

To write a composition in 400 words, you need to have some details about the person I admire most-Lei Feng (below, about 400 words).

He wore a military uniform with a smile and a red scarf fluttering in the wind. He, an ordinary person, has something extraordinary. He is a man who is never proud, but I am proud of him. He is small in the world, but great in our hearts. He has a resounding name, but a kind heart. He, the person I respect most, is an example for us to learn-Lei Feng.

I admire him because he serves the country and the people wholeheartedly. Once there was a flood in Liaoyang City, he did not hesitate to give 100 yuan to the people in the disaster area in Liaoyang. Some people call him a "fool", which is wrong. He said: "I want to be a person who is beneficial to the people and the country. If this is a "fool", then I am willing to be such a "fool". People's life needs such a "fool", and so does the construction of the motherland. I just have a heart. I am dedicated to the party, to socialism, and to capitalism! " It is this sentence that makes me deeply admire Lei Feng. Now our life depends on such a "fool" as Lei Feng. Yes! It is people like Lei Feng who make us live a happy life. I am deeply sorry to think of this. It was a period when the whole country paid attention to "Project Hope". Our school held a donation ceremony for Project Hope. My classmates are very concerned about Project Hope, and each of them has donated dozens of dollars. I only thought about my own money, regardless of the suffering of others, and only donated one or two yuan. My classmate asked me, "Why do you donate so little?" I said, "It's none of my business. Why should I donate so much? Just donate one or two yuan. " My classmates walked away helplessly, but I didn't feel anything. Since I learned about Lei Feng's deeds, I realized how important it is for people to help each other and solve each other's difficulties. We should follow the example of people like Lei Feng and build a bright future for our motherland! However, when Lei Feng should accept people's love, he sacrificed it. But his spiritual torch will burn in my heart forever and never go out!

4. Because you asked to revise your composition: write two examples, omit them in detail, and deduct the topic from time to time. You will grow up on the road, because with you, you are no longer lonely;

On the way of growing up, because of you, I am no longer lonely;

On the way of growing up, I am no longer confused because of you.

I remember that morning, when my mother sent me to school, it was sunny. Hardly had I sat down when I heard the crackling rain. Oh, I don't have an umbrella. What should I do? Mom may drive when she picks me up from school. What should I do without a hat? I was in such a hurry that I didn't listen carefully all morning.

After school, I waited anxiously for my mother to pick me up. I stood blankly at the door of the classroom with my schoolbag on my back. The rain kept hitting my face and body with the strong wind, and I was shaking all over. Just when I was in a daze and felt depressed and helpless, my mother came. My mother hurried to my side with an umbrella, quickly wiped the rain off my head and body, and put my schoolbag on her left arm. My right arm still holds an umbrella for me and says in a distressed tone, "Baby, are you cold?" Put on the coat I brought you, and let's go home by car. "

I put on my coat, and under my mother's umbrella, I didn't get caught in the rain, and I was much warmer. After my mother was busy for me for a while, I suddenly looked up at my mother, only to find that my mother had been beaten through by the rain, and the umbrella in her hand was completely above my body, and most of her body was still drenched by the rain.

There is no rain on my face, but tears come out like spring water, which blurs my eyes. With great gratitude, I snuggled up to my mother, took her warm hand and walked to the station together. On the way of growing up, because of you, I am no longer lonely; On the way of growing up, I am no longer lonely because of you.

Mom, remember that night? That day, I cried because I didn't do well in the exam. When I got home, I thought you would criticize me, but you didn't. Instead, he comforted me and said, "This is just a quiz. I can't help worrying. Just work hard next time! " Ah! Don't cry, baby, just do well in the next exam! "Encourage me to do well in the next exam. After listening to your gentle words of encouragement, I feel worse than being criticized. I really blame myself. I am determined to repay your kindness with good grades and never live up to your expectations! Mom, believe me, I will succeed! On the way of growing up, I am no longer confused because of you.

Mom, you always say I won't grow up until I grow up. I'm not afraid, because you hold my hand, you guide me step by step, and you look at me silently on my way to growth day by day. Maybe you can't accompany me through this long and bumpy life, but my life will not be lonely because of you, but will be more exciting because of you!

5. Write a composition about clouds with transitional sentences, details and outlines. 400 words look out of the window to relax the visual nerve. Looking at the clouds in the sky, I feel so clean, so dazzling and so presumptuous. I really saw god. Big clouds are comfortable with their bodies in the air. The boundless blue sky is their world. No bondage, only freedom. They live their own lives. I don't care about other people's comments, saying that they are like this, saying that they are just posing comfortably, without deliberately imitating. They don't need to live for others, and they don't worry about what others think. They are just free to be themselves and perform their lives brilliantly. They don't need applause from others, but they will cheer for themselves. They are happy for their life, unbridled laughter and unruly dance. As long as they are happy, just look at this dazzling white.

Wish to be a cloud.

. The sky is like a blue sea, and the clouds are like canoes on the sea, drifting quietly and gently, for fear of waking up the deep dreams of the sea.

Large and small white and purple clouds look like faded blue cloth with several patterns embedded in them. The pattern looks like a goldfish, a Moby dick, a crab claw and a good horse.

For a time, they collided with each other and waved to each other, unwilling to get close or separate.

Autumn is the best time to watch clouds all year round. Clouds in the evening are the most beautiful in a day.

When the sun fell drunk on the roof, the cloud spread her beautiful face. Standing on a high place, looking around, thousands of rays of sunshine shoot out from the thin barrier, which is a cloud.

Red, crimson, then blue, dark blue. The sun is about to set on the horizon.

Clouds are more brightly illuminated by the sun, and being close to the sun is more attractive. Clouds float gently on the sun.

For a while, it looks like soft cotton wool, if it flies, if it stops, if it comes, if it pushes: for a while, it seems to be going to the battlefield; For a while, it looks like a palace, and it becomes a winding Great Wall. The golden sunshine outlined the outline of the palace. At the edge of the cloud, mouth to mouth, as if bitten by something.

It seems that the frightened Tengu dare not eat the moon any more, so he has to take this colorful cloud to satisfy his hunger. The sun continues to set.

The clouds are still so bright and colorful, but they are not so dazzling just now. Instead, a young girl stood in front of her, wearing colorful clothes and dancing. The wind is blowing slowly, and her skirt is swaying gently, which is very beautiful.

The sun is a little dim. At this time, another fascinating color cloud picture appeared. These colorful cloud pictures are not only like huge sculptures made of colored silk and soft cotton wool, but also like a mirage, which makes people think.

The sun has completely set, and the clouds are dark, showing a red color, which is particularly heavy. Only the edge of the cloud is reddish orange.

It's getting dark and the clouds are gone. The rising moon in Ran Ran.

The earth appears peaceful, harmonious and clear.

Today, I was alone at home, watching the clouds in the sky on the balcony. When my mother came home, she saw me on the balcony and asked me. I said, "I'm looking at the clouds. You can see that they are constantly moving and can be changed into various shapes! " Mom asked me to write down what I saw.

I see some clouds stretching into the distance like winding paths, some clouds piled up like mountains, some clouds like crumpled maps, some clouds like sheep, dogs, cows and other animals ... I can't take care of them. The clouds in the sky are still moving bit by bit, and after a while, the winding path becomes straight; The mountains were dyed red by the sun, as if on fire; The crumpled map turned into a big water cup.

All kinds of animals have dissipated and become small clouds ... the scenery in this sky is amazing! Looking up at the sky, beautiful clouds flying in the air will make my mood as relaxed as clouds. Clouds in the sky are varied and varied; If you are not careful, it will become another cloud that you can't find. It moves slowly, sometimes like a dragon, sometimes like a crocodile with a big mouth, sometimes like a luxury car you have never seen before ... look! The nearest cloud seems to be a beautiful angel. She looked at me as if inviting me to be a guest. Look again, the clouds on the distant horizon have different shapes and unusual characteristics. The color of the clouds on the horizon is very light, just like all the clouds are gathered there and paved.

There is a cloud that looks like a white palace. There are many small islands around the palace. It seems to have laid a carpet for me, and it seems to want me to pass. Sunset clouds are beautiful, different from daytime clouds.

But people expect it to appear at night. Because there is a folk proverb, "burn yin early, and burn sunny later."

It means there is a flaming cloud in the morning, which means it is cloudy. If there is a fiery red cloud at night, it means it will be sunny tomorrow, so people expect it to appear at night. I carefully observed the shape of the burning cloud. It's orange. This dark color almost renders half the sky. It's very nice.

Look carefully again, its color has changed from light yellow to orange, blending with the color of the sky, just like watercolor painting in art. When it was dark that day, the sky turned completely black, and there were no clouds in sight, only countless little stars were flashing.

The bright moon is in the sky, illuminating the way for pedestrians. Clouds, beautiful clouds and white clouds float from one side of the sky to the other with thousands of gestures.

Not long ago, a scholar told me: "If someone looks up at the sky with rapt attention, that person must be very lonely. Only when he looks up at the clouds in the sky will all his troubles disappear without a trace. " I firmly believe this sentence, whenever I am lonely, I will look up at the sky. Really, as the scholar said, all my troubles have disappeared.

Looking up at the sky, the clouds are moving, which will make my mood flutter with the clouds ... The mountain city of Chongqing is called "Fog Capital". The sky is gray, and there are few white clouds against the blue sky, but I can.

6. Ask for a narrative, 600 words in detail. I just want the title of the article, preferably the famous friendship.

"You and I, heart to heart, live in the global village. In order to dream, take Wan Li Road and meet Beijing. Come on! Friend, reach out your hand, you and I, heart to heart, will always be a family. " This song Me and You has become a very popular song now. Everyone will hum a sentence or two, because it symbolizes the success of China's Olympic bid, and also tells the story of an animal emotion-friendship. What is friendship? I think anyone who cares about and helps me is a good friend except my relatives. Teachers, classmates, netizens, passers-by and even shopkeepers are all friends. The help and care they gave me, the slightest warmth, were all friendship. People's friendship is priceless. You can't touch it or see it. It is only under the tacit communication between you and your friends and classmates that the profound friendship will gradually develop. I also had a beautiful friendship.

It was a hot primary school in June, and everyone was preparing for the final exam and sprinting. If you want to get good grades in the final exam, you can also go home and "get a reward" for your efforts for a semester. But something unexpected happened.

I was surrounded by the hot air in the classroom, sweating my homework. Somehow, I feel itchy behind my ears. I touched it with my hand and found a small pustule that had never appeared before. I didn't care too much at that time, so I continued to do my homework. But when I got home in the afternoon, I felt dizzy and my head was hot. My mother took my temperature. Ah! 39.5℃, high fever! I struggled to tell my mother the strange things behind my ears. My mother looked at my ear and thought for a while, saying that she might be infected with chicken pox. In order to prevent infection, we need to rest at home.

In the next few days, I will either have an injection in the hospital or take medicine at home. What worries me most is the final exam in two weeks. I haven't reviewed well, and the teacher doesn't know the key points of the class. Just when I was worried, the doorbell rang and my mother ran to open the door. My deskmate came in with a notebook in his hand. She opened it and mysteriously told me, "From now on, I am your' teacher'. These are the essence of these days' lessons, which will help you catch up on the lessons you have left behind. You can sit back and relax, return to school as soon as possible, and we will meet the final exam together. " His words came up slowly like a warm current, and came to my heart.

We had quarrels, joys and misunderstandings. I have cried and laughed, but all this will be a thing of the past. But the long river of friendship is a river that never dries up and has no end in sight. "... meet in Beijing, come on! Friend, reach out your hand, you and I come from the same world, we are a family ... "Ten years and eight years later, the song" You and I "will be forgotten by me, but my friendship with you will be deeply imprinted in my mind.

7. "Mulan Poetry": Why is there a detail when the author arranges the plot of the article? First, the use of stick figures in Mulan's poems. As for a simple pen, the description of the battle process is mainly simple, and ten years of life can be written in just a few words.

Why did you arrange this? What the author describes with pen and ink is often what he wants to highlight. What this poem wants to highlight is the praise for Mulan's filial piety to her parents and her courage to shoulder heavy responsibilities. Therefore, putting aside the cruel war can reflect the beautiful inner content and spare no expense. In addition, this complicated arrangement seems to imply the author's longing for a better life and his indifference and distance to the war.

A girl who has been fighting hard for ten years on the battlefield has made great achievements-"the policy of twelve turns, rewarding the top 100", which shows her courage and tenacity. But neither the author nor the readers like a superwoman without feminine taste, so the author simply touches on the killing on the battlefield and takes "Mulan is a girl" as the core of his thought. Therefore, he devoted himself to writing about Mulan's concern for her parents as a girl, her clever dressing up and the charm of her gorgeous dressing up. People never lack a warrior-like "Gu Dasao", and there are many standard beauties like "Cui Yingying" in China, but there are both beautiful daughters and provocative men. Mulan is unique in the history of China literature! This arrangement from complexity to simplicity has played a role in highlighting the characteristics of characters and expressing the author's tendency.

Second, the use of complex brushwork: Mulan's worries when knitting, Mulan's activities when preparing to pack, Mulan's mentality when going to war, Mulan's family's joy when coming home, and Mulan's joy when emphasizing "daughter's dress" are all written in detail.

For example, Mulan bought a pommel horse, which described the parallel of east, west, north and south, and rendered the tension and busyness of pre-war preparation. Readers seem to see Mulan's haste and busyness, and can also imagine how heroic Mulan in military uniform is!

For another example, when Hua Mulan went to the battlefield, she repeatedly mentioned "I didn't hear her parents calling for a female voice", which is actually a true portrayal of Hua Mulan's mentality at this time: at sunset, when dusk fell, Hua Mulan slept alone on the bank of the Yellow River, listening to the rushing sound of the Yellow River, but her heart was always echoing her parents' voices, drifting away, and her parents' voice calling for her daughter had long since disappeared, but it always echoed in her daughter's ears! The journey is long, when can I hear the kind call of my parents who warm my daughter's heart again?

For example, in the last paragraph, when Mulan was going back to her hometown, the different actions of her parents, brothers and sisters were repeated three times in the same sentence, vividly showing the happy mood and atmosphere when her relatives finally got together after ten years' separation.

The description of Mulan's re-entry into the boudoir and "daughter makeup" vividly renders Mulan's love for life and beautiful and lovely daughter modality.