Language Action Description Composition Guidance

1. Third-grade composition guidance, how to write a real example of a character's language movements.

People-oriented writing, mainly through the description of people's appearance, language, movements, psychological activities and typical cases, reflects people's thinking, personality, quality and other characteristics. To write a human-centered composition, we should start from the following aspects:

1, write characters.

Character images generally refer to the appearance, language, movements and psychological activities of characters. The appearance of a character is the appearance characteristics of a character, including appearance, clothing, posture, expression and so on. Appearance description should first proceed from the needs of the central idea of the article, and demand to grasp the essential characteristics of the characters and describe them selectively and emphatically. Character language includes monologue, dialogue, dialogue and tone. "What you say must be done". Characters' language is the direct expression of their inner world. Therefore, successful language description can properly express the identity, age, thoughts, quality, style and personality characteristics of the characters. When describing characters' language, we should pay attention to their identities, express their thoughts and feelings, and reflect their relationship. When describing a character's actions, you should write not only what the character does, but also how to do it. Psychological activity is a silent language and a means to directly express the mental outlook and ideological activities of characters. When describing the psychological activities of characters, we should pay attention to clearly describing the reasons of psychological activities, and also pay attention to combining them with the description of appearance, movements and language. When the appearance, language, movements and psychological activities are written, the characters will be prominent and distinct.

2. Choose a typical case.

People and things are inseparable. There are many things a person does, so choose when writing.

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Choose typical events that best express the thoughts, personalities and central ideas of the characters.

3. Describe it in detail.

Detail description is a concrete and detailed description of the appearance, language, movements and expressions of the characters, which can fully express the central idea of the article.

In the composition teaching of grade three, writing people is the basic proposition of composition. For example, I did this when I described my childhood friends in teaching.

Teaching objectives

1, by guiding students to recall life, relive the past, ignite true feelings, arouse students' desire to talk, and cultivate students' interest in writing.

2. Cleverly use the writing method of "expressing the characteristics of a certain aspect of a character with one thing", and learn to use the language, movements and demeanor of the character to reveal the characteristics and reflect the personality.

Get ready.

In advance, students intentionally recall and collect the materials of friends they liked in childhood, such as graduation photo in kindergarten, and then enrich the materials through activities, so that the composition is closely related to life and prepare for practice.

2. Writing guidance for primary school students: How to write a good action description? 1. Write a coherent action.

Describing a person's actions needs decomposition, that is, a person's actions are composed of a series of actions. Break a big action into several small moves, grasp the most characteristic movements of the characters and describe them one by one, then the whole article can write the movements of the characters concretely.

Please read the following composition fragment:

Fried dishes

Mother washed the cabbages piece by piece, piled them up piece by piece, held the vegetables in her left hand, picked up a knife in her right hand, cut them one by one, cut the cabbages into small squares, and put the remaining leaves aside.

Start cooking. Mother put the pot on the fire first, and then poured the oil into the pot when it was hot. After a while, oil smoke emerged from the pot and made a "sizzling" sound. Mother threw the chopped green onion into the pot first, and then poured the vegetables into the pot, grabbed the spatula and kept turning it over. When the dish slowly changed from white to Huang Shi, my mother poured in soy sauce and vinegar, sprinkled with salt, then turned it over with a shovel, sprinkled with sugar and monosodium glutamate, quickly took the pot down, stirred it a few times, and then took it out.

Sweet and sour cabbage and My Sweetie fried by my mother are sour and delicious, with unique taste. This is mom's specialty!

How did Mom fire sweet and sour cabbage? The author decomposes mother's cooking actions, expresses coherent actions in words, and then describes the most representative actions of mother's cooking in detail. For example, first wash the vegetables and cut them into pieces, then start cooking in a pan, then put the vegetables in the pan, then pour in the seasoning, and then turn them over with a shovel. In this fragment composition, because of the use of words indicating the sequence and coherence of actions, the whole process of mother's cooking is clearly written, and the skillful way of mother's cooking is clearly displayed to readers, which left a deep impression on us.

Second, use words accurately.

The language of our motherland is very rich, for example, the words expressing actions are: take, carry, carry, push and so on. What words are used? It depends on the specific environment of the article. Therefore, when describing the characters' movements, we should use accurate words and carefully select verbs, and strive to write the characters' movements accurately, concretely and vividly, and the characters' movements and images vividly.

3. The action description in the composition describing the verbal expression of the characters' actions is concrete. Before the high jump, Li and one person were left.

At this time, the crossbar has risen to 1.47 meters, which is one centimeter higher than last year's group B high jump record. The whistle of the game sounded, and I saw Li He galloping forward. Less than half a meter away from the crossbar, he jumped over the crossbar and broke the record of the school sports meeting.

There are only 100 words in this passage. It is not specific to really write the scene where Li and his classmates break the high jump record. Only most sentences have only 23 crosses. How to write "high jump" in detail? Method one decomposition method [explanation] The so-called "decomposition method" is to divide the whole thing into several small parts from different angles such as place, time, events and people, and then write them out one by one.

As far as "high jump" is concerned, the record-breaking scene of high jump can be divided into four aspects from the action, namely, run-up, take-off, leap and landing, and then described one by one in order. [Demonstration] When the whistle sounded, Li He jumped a few times in the same place, habitually pressed his left leg, then pressed his right leg, straightened up and took a deep breath. This just took a brisk and powerful step, rushed up and jumped off the viaduct.

(Run-up) When approaching the high jump, a sharp turn and one foot on the ground are almost completed at the same time. Before the audience could blink, her head and shoulders had crossed the crossbar, and then she held out her chest, abdomen and waist. This was a "back-crossing".

(End) ... "Success!" Breaking the school record, the applause thundered around, and the crossbar on the elevated platform seemed to jump. (Landing) Method 2 Memory Association Method [Explanation] The so-called "memory association method" is to recall scenes related to things at that time through supplementary narration or interpolation.

For example, what is the difference between this school sports meeting breaking the high jump record and the previous school sports meeting breaking the high jump record? What is the difference between the high jump performance of the same athlete and the past? It can also be linked in many ways: How did Li He look before he started? Have confidence? How did she spread her feet at first? How fast? How did she cross the crossbar before reaching it? What did she look like when she climbed over the crossbar and landed? [Demonstration] The crossbar has risen to 1.47 meters, and the whistle is going to sound again. At this time, a ray of sunshine shines on Li and her classmates' faces, and she looks more energetic.

(Write down the expression before jumping) She thought of physical education class practicing with her classmates on weekdays, and the teacher encouraged her more than once. She is generally the best dancer. It seems that she is full of confidence in breaking the record of the school sports meeting this time.

(Write about Li He's confidence in winning) As the whistle sounded, Li He jumped a few times in the same place, habitually pressing his left leg against his right leg, straightening up and taking a deep breath. She dashed forward, strode from the starting point to the crossbar, carefully measured the distance, and then returned to the starting line.

I saw her suddenly clench her fist and run forward, six meters, five meters, four meters, ... one meter. Less than half a meter from the beam, she is as light as a swallow and lifts her feet. What a "back crossing" that broke the school record. The movements are so light and graceful.

"It worked!" In the cheers of the students, she ran to the PE teacher and thanked the teacher for her careful guidance in the past: she ran to the class again and thanked the students for their warm encouragement ... (Li He wrote the expression after success) Method 3 Add details [Explanation] The so-called "add details" means adding some details around the center and writing down some subtle performance details when Li He broke the school sports meeting record, such as one of her eyes and hers. If these details can be properly added to the article, the article will be more delicate and touching.

[Demonstration] Li He stood at the starting line, as cool as a cucumber. She habitually presses her left and right legs. After these preparatory activities, she smiled at us and gave her good classmates a look.

(Details 1) I seem to be telling the whole class that I must live up to everyone's expectations of her. When the whistle sounded, she measured the distance from the starting line to before striding onto the viaduct. Be careful at every step, lest there be any mistakes.

Then, she ran back to the starting line and spat on her palm. (Detail 2) She rubbed her hands, clenched her fists and began to rush to the beam. The audience held their breath and watched the wonderful performance at this moment.

The squeaks of Li and her classmates gradually disappeared, and she was getting closer and closer to the crossbar. Take off! She gritted her teeth.

(Detail 3) I saw her turn around and kick, both of which were done almost at the same time. Before the audience could blink, her head and shoulders had crossed the crossbar, and then she held out her chest, tilted her waist, closed her abdomen and closed her feet. How "back-to-back" ... "It worked! After breaking the school record, the applause around shook the railing on the elevated platform ... The students ran into the field and hugged her, and another student punched her several times (detail 4) and then lifted her high.

4. Writing Language Guidance Training When it comes to writing language, many college entrance examination candidates regard it as an insurmountable "peak", often sighing "helplessness" and feeling "difficulty". Many articles and books, such as writing instruction, also use "language can't be learned casually" to scare candidates. In the long run, more and more students have psychologically formed a "difficult" knot to improve their writing language level. Many of them turn their psychological difficulties into actions. Therefore, in recent years, most of the compositions seen on the marking field of the college entrance examination are dry and tasteless. In order to help you make a breakthrough in language in a short time, the author talks about the strategy of adding points in language expression from the perspective of narrative and argumentative essays for your reference. Touch the teacher's heart 1. Let the language have a sense of picture. Language has a sense of picture, which is the first characteristic of excellent narrative. "Painting in Poetry" makes his poems sway in the garden of Tang poetry. If we write a narrative, we can "portray" a picture with words, reproduce a scene and make it possible. Then our composition will stand out among hundreds of thousands of candidates. Please look at a passage in the essay answer card "Curiosity" of Jiangsu college entrance examination in 2008, only a few meters away. Grandma will put down her work every few minutes, "old man! "Grandma called this. Grandpa didn't answer, so she rushed to the front. Grandpa was fine, and fell asleep on the cane chair. So she smiled like a child and said, "This dead old man is ignored when people shout. "This kind of thing happens every day. This is a text describing the daily life scene between grandparents. This passage shows the mutual care, warmth and care of grandparents in their later years after the storm of life: people. We should always know that he is fine, so that we can feel at ease. This kind of love, which is always in our hearts, comes to the fore a few minutes after we put down our work and can't get the "sense of urgency" when we respond, as well as the "anger" of a child smiling step by step, showing the most beautiful "love" scenery in the world. Read it. The language is simple and very life-oriented. Its main advantage is that the author observes and experiences the scenes that best reflect the deep love of grandparents' lives every day, and "reproduces" its typical language and form, which has a very vivid sense of pictures and has the power to touch people's hearts. Come to think of it, is it difficult for us to do so? 2. Let the language have a sense of flow. Fluency in language means that words should be stable and sentence patterns should be vivid. In other words, words should be accurate and vivid, and sentence patterns should be smooth and free. Reading sentences fluently often makes people feel as refreshing and sweet as biting pears. Please read the following passage and be curious about a city, which will be the most extraordinary experience in your life. In the morning, when you shuttle through the silky mist, the purple core of paulownia flowers falls silently, so soft that it seems to break when pinched, and flies away when blown away. What kind of shyness is hidden inside? From far and near, from near to far, the ringing sound "cheep-cheep-cheep" penetrates the fog and disappears silently in the ear. Who is humming? When the fog cleared, all this seemed to be pulled away from the dream. Where did they go? I can only go on with curiosity. This is the beginning of an essay entitled "Curiosity" written by a candidate in Jiangsu College Entrance Examination in 2008. It depicts a beautiful and elegant city scene. In this sentence, the examinee is very skilled in describing the details, whether it is the verb "shuttle", "run", "step", "hide", "sprout" or the modifier "silk". They are all used accurately and vividly, which means that the words are "stable". You see, "dew" moistens the bluestone road, what is the sound image of cloth shoes "budding", paulownia flowers are "soft" and will be "broken" when squeezed, and paulownia flowers are "shy" and so on. The sentence pattern of this passage is also rich and colorful. There are rhetorical questions, figurative sentences, personification and parallelism sentences, symmetrical sentences and declarative sentences. The arrangement is orderly, rich and diverse, such as flowing water, giving people beautiful enjoyment. 3. It makes language implicit. The expression is meaningful and intriguing, which is the symbol of the top narrative language. The symbol of hidden language is often the author's thoughts and feelings. It often carries profound meanings with limited words. Generally, it expresses a wide and profound meaning by generalizing, hinting, writing with a pen and incoherent words. Please look at a passage in an essay entitled "Living Poetically" written by a candidate in Hunan College Entrance Examination in 2007. Grandma is still using the most primitive firewood stove. She said that cooking with coal fire is too wasteful and gas is too expensive, so it is better to burn firewood. So, in the season when weeds grow wildly. My sister and I followed my grandfather's axe and were active in Shan Ye. We cut it down, tied it up, carried it home, arranged it, dried it, and bundles of firewood went into the woodshed. So, in the moment of countless smokers, my sister and I saw grandma's red smiling face in the sound of peeling in grandma's kitchen hall. Especially in winter, grandpa makes a fire, grandma cooks, and my sister and I compete to snuggle up next to grandpa to keep warm. Telling the warmth of winter. After reading this passage, a deep and lasting sense of happiness ripples in our hearts. In this passage, the author shows the simple human feelings and happiness of an ordinary farmer, and describes the author's unique feelings and understanding of poetic life. The crackling firewood, grandma's smiling face with stove fire on fire, grandpa's warm and harmonious cooking, and the innocence of "me" and my sister scrambling to snuggle up next to grandpa to keep warm. They vividly described a poetic picture of the life of ordinary farmers. We were deeply impressed by the sentence "A string of laughter and laughter rose to the sky with the smoke from the kitchen, telling the warmth of winter".

5. The manner and language actions of the teacher who wrote the composition. In class, Mr. X stands on the platform. He is over 50 years old.

Wearing a pair of glasses with high myopia. He carefully took off his glasses and wiped them with the hem of his clothes.

"Uh-huh ..." He was about to speak when he suddenly remembered something. He fumbled in the plate and then reached into his pocket for it. Only then did he say "uh-huh" again, stood up straight and said in a very loud voice, "I'll play a game with you today." The game has begun.

First, Teacher X takes out two paper cups and a plastic cup filled with water. He gently picked up the plastic cup, carefully poured water into two paper cups, and put the plastic cup down again.

At this point, I thought, "It's that simple. Who can't pour water? " What kind of game is this? "I'm getting impatient.

Then, Teacher X mysteriously took out two small paper bags. So, what does this mean? I thought to myself, teacher, what does this mean? I saw Mr. X open these two paper bags, gently plug them with his hand and pour them into two paper cups respectively.

"What is this? Why not let us see it? " So, I bowed my head carefully with questions. Later, Teacher X invited two students to taste the water in these two cups, and each student could only choose one cup.

After the first male classmate took a bite, he seemed very calm, only to see that he frowned slightly. I thought, "It's not delicious."

The second is a female classmate. She came running happily, but the smile on her face suddenly disappeared after drinking. It seems that the lips that were slightly upturned have also flattened.

But it is also a leisurely look. I'm more skeptical than before.

What did Teacher X add to the water, which made two students look like this after drinking it. I look at other students again, and everyone seems to be very skeptical.

Some students began to whisper. Finally, I realized that Teacher X didn't put anything into the water, but asked the students to learn association by observing the expressions.

6.2. Composition My grandfather is over eighty years old and often does stupid things! Just like grandma named him "confused king"!

I remember once, when my grandfather was going to ask Uncle Wang in the next building to go out to play chess after breakfast, he searched all his pockets and couldn't find his mobile phone. He began to worry-like "ants running around on hot bricks". He thought: I saw my mobile phone at breakfast today! Is it: the mobile phone "flew away"? Or did someone "steal" into the house? Grandpa is puzzled. Later, grandpa launched a "family mobilization", and mom searched every corner of the house: she took out all the clothes in the closet and put them underground, making the whole room a mess. Dad searched every corner of the living room: everything in the living room fell on the floor. In the end, nothing.

So I thought grandpa was not used to turning off his mobile phone, so I said to my mother, "Mom, I have an idea!" " ""you this wench will only make trouble, stand aside! "Mom said." If you can find a way to get everyone in the family to send a different set of dolls, grandpa will send you a story book! "Grandpa said." Very well, "I replied happily. So, I dialed my grandpa's phone. Suddenly, a sweet song came from the refrigerator. I found my mobile phone as soon as I opened the refrigerator. It turned out that grandpa put the rest of the food in the refrigerator after breakfast and put it in the refrigerator with his mobile phone. "Mom, dad and grandma each have a set of doll toys! Grandpa's set of books is not allowed to be less! "I am proud to say, of course, this is an encouragement! "

The whole family laughed, except grandpa.

7. Write a person's language, movements, expressions, composition, action description and concretization. Before the high jump, only Li He was left alone.

At this time, the crossbar has risen to 1.47 meters, which is one centimeter higher than last year's group B high jump record. The whistle of the game sounded, and I saw Li He galloping forward. Less than half a meter away from the crossbar, he jumped over the crossbar and broke the record of the school sports meeting.

There are only 100 words in this passage. It is not specific to really write the scene where Li and his classmates break the high jump record. Only most sentences have only 23 crosses. How to write "high jump" in detail? Method one decomposition method [explanation] The so-called "decomposition method" is to divide the whole thing into several small parts from different angles such as place, time, events and people, and then write them out one by one.

As far as "high jump" is concerned, the record-breaking scene of high jump can be divided into four aspects from the action, namely, run-up, take-off, leap and landing, and then described one by one in order. [Demonstration] When the whistle sounded, Li He jumped a few times in the same place, habitually pressed his left leg, then pressed his right leg, straightened up and took a deep breath. This just took a brisk and powerful step, rushed up and jumped off the viaduct.

(Run-up) When approaching the high jump, a sharp turn and one foot on the ground are almost completed at the same time. Before the audience could blink, her head and shoulders had crossed the crossbar, and then she held out her chest, abdomen and waist. This was a "back-crossing".

(End) ... "Success!" Breaking the school record, the applause thundered around, and the crossbar on the elevated platform seemed to jump. (Landing) Method 2 Memory Association Method [Explanation] The so-called "memory association method" is to recall scenes related to things at that time through supplementary narration or interpolation.

For example, what is the difference between this school sports meeting breaking the high jump record and the previous school sports meeting breaking the high jump record? What is the difference between the high jump performance of the same athlete and the past? It can also be linked in many ways: How did Li He look before he started? Have confidence? How did she spread her feet at first? How fast? How did she cross the crossbar before reaching it? What did she look like when she climbed over the crossbar and landed? [Demonstration] The crossbar has risen to 1.47 meters, and the whistle is going to sound again. At this time, a ray of sunshine shines on Li and her classmates' faces, and she looks more energetic.

(Write down the expression before jumping) She thought of physical education class practicing with her classmates on weekdays, and the teacher encouraged her more than once. She is generally the best dancer. It seems that she is full of confidence in breaking the record of the school sports meeting this time.

(Write about Li He's confidence in winning) As the whistle sounded, Li He jumped a few times in the same place, habitually pressing his left leg against his right leg, straightening up and taking a deep breath. She dashed forward, strode from the starting point to the crossbar, carefully measured the distance, and then returned to the starting line.

I saw her suddenly clench her fist and run forward, six meters, five meters, four meters, ... one meter. Less than half a meter from the beam, she is as light as a swallow and lifts her feet. What a "back crossing" that broke the school record. The movements are so light and graceful.

"It worked!" In the cheers of the students, she ran to the PE teacher and thanked the teacher for her careful guidance in the past: she ran to the class again and thanked the students for their warm encouragement ... (Li He wrote the expression after success) Method 3 Add details [Explanation] The so-called "add details" means adding some details around the center and writing down some subtle performance details when Li He broke the school sports meeting record, such as one of her eyes and hers. If these details can be properly added to the article, the article will be more delicate and touching.

[Demonstration] Li He stood at the starting line, as cool as a cucumber. She habitually presses her left and right legs. After these preparatory activities, she smiled at us and gave her good classmates a look.

(Details 1) I seem to be telling the whole class that I must live up to everyone's expectations of her. When the whistle sounded, she measured the distance from the starting line to before striding onto the viaduct. Be careful at every step, lest there be any mistakes.

Then, she ran back to the starting line and spat on her palm. (Detail 2) She rubbed her hands, clenched her fists and began to rush to the beam. The audience held their breath and watched the wonderful performance at this moment.

The squeaks of Li and her classmates gradually disappeared, and she was getting closer and closer to the crossbar. Take off! She gritted her teeth.

(Detail 3) I saw her turn around and kick, both of which were done almost at the same time. Before the audience could blink, her head and shoulders had crossed the crossbar, and then she held out her chest, tilted her waist, closed her abdomen and closed her feet. How "back-to-back" ... "It worked! After breaking the school record, the applause around shook the railing on the elevated platform ... The students ran into the field and hugged her, and another student punched her several times (detail 4) and then lifted her high.

8. Describing a 40-word composition with language actions touched me.

Time flies like water, and many things fade with the passage of time, but one thing impressed me deeply-that deep maternal love.

That morning, I was going to school with my schoolbag on my back. My mother suddenly ran out of the room, handed me an umbrella and said, "The weather forecast says it will rain today. Take an umbrella! " I looked up at the sky. Wan Li is clear. How can it rain? I left my umbrella and ran away.

When school was over at noon, the weather suddenly changed a lot. In an instant, the rainstorm suddenly came down. I stood at the school gate and watched my classmates being picked up by my parents one by one. My heart began to feel uneasy, like fifteen buckets of water-I was so anxious that my father had just gone on a business trip and couldn't come back for three or five days. My mother has a high fever and is still infusion, so she won't come to pick me up. I was waiting at the school gate alone, anxious and hungry. Seeing that it was raining harder and harder outside the window and no one came to pick me up, I couldn't help crying.

Suddenly, a familiar figure appeared in the heavy rain. It was my mother. I thought: how is this possible? Isn't mom sick? How can it be indirect to me sometimes? I rubbed my eyes and looked intently. It's really my mother! The strong wind with the heavy rain seemed to engulf my mother, who came to me with difficulty in the heavy rain.

"Come here, son, put on your raincoat." My mother took off her raincoat and put it on me. At this time, it is raining harder and harder. My mother's hair, face and body were all wet by the rain. Looking at her kind smile, tired eyes and innocent face, I couldn't help crying again.

9. My brother's name is Wang. He is two and a half years old. His big eyes rolled and he didn't know what he was thinking.

One day at noon, my aunt and I played in the living room. I told a joke that made my aunt laugh, and I couldn't help laughing. By this time, John had already laid down for a nap.

However, when he heard my aunt and I laughing in the living room, he immediately sat up and said to the lying aunt, "We won't sleep!" " Then he flew barefoot into the living room and shouted, "John will laugh, too." "Say that finish, just burst out laughing.

Brother Scud likes running. He ran as soon as he lifted his leg. We all call him "Scud". No matter who goes out to play with him, he always trotts behind.

Grandma is old, so she has no choice but to follow him by bike. According to my aunt's statistics, he can run more than ten kilometers in one night! Brother is so funny when he runs! When the small arm is thrown, the wind is born at the foot.

Aunt said that every part of his body was moving except his nails. You see, maybe, my brother will be the Liu Xiang of Goshen in the future! Study hard and ask more questions. Although my brother is naughty, he actually loves learning.

Once we ate scrambled eggs with tomatoes, he suddenly asked his aunt, "How do you say eggs in English?" Seeing his serious appearance, we were amused by him. We take him out to play, and he always asks questions.

"What is this?" "What's that?" Going to Liqun Supermarket, he has become familiar with every commodity in it. The funny thing is, when grandma wouldn't let him buy things indiscriminately, he said, "This one has preservatives, so we won't buy it!" " "That tone is very firm! I'm afraid of my brother's menstruation, and I'm afraid of my menstruation.

Every time he eats, if it doesn't taste good, as long as his mother stares, he quickly sits up straight with a meal in his mouth and keeps saying, "Oh, yes!" " "If his mother is not at home, he will say to menstruation when he is naughty:" You call me sister! " "Then he shouted," Sister! Sister! " How funny! This is my brother, the clever and lovely Wang.