A composition of about 500 words for fifth grade primary school: Diary: The Secret of the Universe

Composition title: Diary: The Secret of the Universe

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This composition is about 500 words about the fifth grade of primary school. The title is: "Diary: The Secret of the Universe". Everyone is welcome to contribute.

The weather on Friday, May 13, 2010: Sunny

The Secret of the Universe

This morning, our second-grade classmates were all dressed in neat school uniforms, wearing Wearing a bright red scarf, we came to school happily. As soon as we finished the first class, we lined up neatly and got on the No. 1 bus.

Along the way, we were chatting and laughing, and it was lively. Unknowingly, the aerospace show we had wanted to go to appeared in front of us. The conductor checked the tickets, and we rushed into the aerospace show. exhibition.

As soon as we entered, we were attracted by everything inside. We saw the magical astronaut oxygen bottles, interesting astronaut toilets, unique space water bottles and space dinner plates, which were particularly large. parachute, rocket model, artificial satellite.

We had so much fun!

Mom’s words

Last Friday, Yaoyao’s school organized them to go to the space show. Yaoyao’s dream has always been to be an astronaut, so she has always been excited about this space show. It's full of expectations. The Chinese homework on weekends was to write a diary of a visit. Seeing how excited she was after returning from the space show, I was full of expectations for her diary. What did she see? What did she gain after watching the space show?

Finally, at noon today, she finished writing. I asked her: "What do you think of your writing?" She said it was pretty good. I suggested that she read her diary with me, and she happily agreed. Then, we started reading. After reading the second paragraph, "We rushed into the aerospace show quickly," I said excitedly: "I'm so looking forward to the next paragraph! You can't wait to rush in. There must be many things in it that attract you, and I also I really want to visit with you.” However, we will finish the next paragraph with just a few sentences, and the last one will be finished. After reading, I asked Yaoyao:

"What do you think the teacher wants you to write most when he asks you to write this diary?"

"Write what you see."

"I think you wrote the first two paragraphs very well and explained all aspects in great detail. But when it comes to the most critical moment in the third paragraph, others want to see what exactly you saw? What kind of gains have you achieved? But if you just write a few sentences and end it, it will make people feel disappointed. It is time to write a diary in detail."

"I. You know, the important parts should be written in detail, and the unimportant parts should be written briefly. "Yes! So where do you think this diary should be written in more detail?"

"It's the part about watching the space show."

"By the way, can you tell me more about what you saw?"

"I I also saw a large display board with photos of astronauts, the five-star red flag, and various rocket models..."

Yaoyao said a lot in one breath.

"It turns out that you have seen so many items. If you write them all in your diary, others can learn a lot about it."

Then, I guided Yaoyao shared some of her gains and thoughts after the visit, and a revised diary was released!

After modification

This morning, the sun was shining brightly and there were no clouds in the sky. Our second-grade classmates, all wearing neat school uniforms and bright red scarves, came to school happily. As soon as we finished the first class, we lined up neatly and got on the No. 1 bus.

Along the way, we were chatting and laughing, and it was lively. Unconsciously, the aerospace exhibition hall we had wanted to go to appeared in front of us. The conductor checked the tickets, and we rushed in quickly. exhibition hall.

As soon as I entered, I was dazzled by many items in the exhibition hall. I was first attracted by the many rocket models inside, including Yangtze-3, Shenzhou-7, Shenzhou-3, etc. I came to an exhibition board again, and walked from one end of the board to the other. I saw six astronauts who went into space. I learned that every astronaut must carry a Chinese five-star red flag when they go to space, which represents Now we Chinese can also go to space. I am very proud of them. Then, I saw the magical astronaut oxygen bottle, the interesting astronaut toilet, the unique space level and space dinner plate, and the particularly large parachute.

Finally, I also saw the space food "Crystal Beef", which looks weird and lumpy after being packaged. I saw from its wrapping paper that it can be eaten as soon as it is torn open. How convenient!

By watching the aerospace exhibition, I got to know many aerospace items and learned a lot about space and astronauts. I feel that we Chinese are very smart and have invented so many space items that allow astronauts to live comfortably in space. I think our Chinese astronauts are very capable and can successfully go to space and explore the mysteries of space.

My dream is to be an astronaut when I grow up, to be able to go to space, to experience life in space, and to explore the mysteries of space. From now on, I will protect my eyes, study hard, make progress every day, and strive to grow up to become an excellent astronaut!

An episode about the naming of the diary

Yaoyao named herself "Secret of the Universe" from the beginning. After revising it, I suggested that she should change the title? But Yaoyao insisted on using this topic. The reason is that through the visit, she discovered many secrets in the universe that she did not know before, and she herself found this topic more attractive. After listening to her reasons, I thought it was quite reasonable and I should respect her opinion, so I still used the title "Secret of the Universe" named by herself.