Subtle action description composition

1. The composition "character" describing the detailed movements is the soul of the article, but the common characters in students' exercises are often one-sided, without personality and vividness, and the whole article looks boring and lacks appeal. If you read these works carefully, you will find a common problem: you often just pursue writing something completely, ignoring vivid, concrete and nuanced details.

Detail description has a wide range and various functions, but it mainly depicts characters and shapes their images. Vivid details are like human cells. Without them, people will lose their lives. Without details, the characters lose their flesh and blood. Writer Lee Joon said: "In revealing a character's personality characteristics, a detail sometimes plays the same role as a plot or a scene." As the saying goes, "the spirit is seen in the nuances."

The creation of literary masters attaches great importance to the description of details. In Lu Xun's The True Story of Ah Q, the first sentence of Ah Q was described in detail: "When it was time to draw a circle, the hand just shook with a pen, and the man spread the paper on the ground, and Ah Q fell down and tried to draw a circle. Afraid of being laughed at, he decided to draw a circle, but the damn pen was not only heavy, but also disobedient. It just shook and almost closed, but shrugged its shoulders and turned into a melon seed. " The details of this behavior concretely, vividly and vividly reflect Ah Q's personality characteristics ―― he stuck to the "spiritual victory law" of self-deception until his death. When people read this detailed description, who can not think that Ah Q is ridiculous, pathetic and pitiful? How can we not "mourn its misfortune and anger it" and then think deeply about the national inferiority?

Not only China writers, but also foreign writers. Like Balzac's Eugénie? Grandet wrote that before Grandet died, when the priest sent the gold-plated cross to his lips to kiss the icon of Christ, "he made a terrible gesture to hold the cross in his hand, and this last effort killed him." Only this detail vividly depicts the ugly image of the insatiable and untiring miser. It is the description of details that makes the characters vivid and vivid. The characters are vivid, the whole article is full of vitality and strong appeal.

Of course, not all the details of life are valuable, and it is not just to write "fine". A good detail description must be useful, true and typical. It must express the mental outlook of the characters and deepen the theme of the article. It must conform to the personality characteristics of the characters and the reality of real life, and should best highlight the personality characteristics of the characters. Where do the details come from? Literature comes from life, and details are in colorful life. Be a conscientious person in life and always pay attention to the people and things around you, especially the objects you describe. On the streets of Shaoxing, Xianheng Hotel, Lu Xun concentrated on observing short-sleeved gangs and long-sleeved guests before "painting the soul of the silent". In the dark coffee room in Dublin, Joyce coldly looked at the wandering * * *, liars, mental patients, beggars and rich people, brewing Ulysses that shocked the world. Throughout the ages, great writers have always devoted their lives to catching people and things that make the soul tremble and casting them into chapters that will last forever. Capture the details, use the details, make this golden key work for you, and make your article shine!

2. Composition describing the details of human movements 1. Childhood: When I was a child, I was infatuated with watermelon. Now that I'm grown up, sometimes I really miss that chilling feeling.

Street stalls or melon shadows on the screen come into view, and the moment when I ate melons in my childhood reappears in front of my eyes: in summer, the brilliance of the rest of the day sinks into a corner of the sky, and the summer heat gradually disappears. Under the blowing of the evening breeze, people's spirit is particularly comfortable.

At this time, the fragrance of watermelon filled the streets, sometimes thick and sometimes light, as if nothing had happened. I (about five or six years old) put my arms around my knees and squatted on a small bench like a cat catching a mouse. My small black eyes glanced at the watermelon spinning up and down in the water.

Across the water, the sweat on my face has already dried up, and "Qianchuan" hangs like a waterfall. Mosquitoes "swim around" in their ears and don't care.

Under a bright smiling face, there is an expectant heart waiting-My Sweetie in a melon seed shell. Until the watermelon was cut into pieces: I saw watermelon seeds embedded in red melon meat like black pearls; The melon meat is a little cold; Melon juice flows down the mirror-like melon surface, one drop, two drops; The texture on the surface of melon is like the fine lines on the surface of painted porcelain ... The happiest moment is that the iced watermelon is held in your hand, and it seems that there is a cold current floating back and forth all over your body.

2. The fragrant mud flies yellow, the northwest wind whistles, and the residual snow rolls on the road. Although it is early spring, the weather is still very cold.

She, leaning against a poplar tree at the school gate, was as motionless as snow sculpture. The sudden ringing of the bell.

Her dim eyes sparkled with longing. A group of children, singing, walked out of the school gate without her son; Another group of children talked and laughed and set foot on the road without their son ... The figure was sparse, scattered and gone.

The creaking iron gate locked the silent campus. She was dizzy and could hardly stand up. She stumbled over and held her hands tightly on the iron fence.

"For what?" An old man in a message came out with a democratic face. "bright! My little light! " Like breathing, like crying.

"School is over." "Know the way ..." She murmured in a low voice with glassy eyes, lowered her head feebly, slowly released her hand, and took out a candy wrapped tightly with body temperature from the pocket of a long-breasted cotton-padded jacket: "Uncle, please ... give it to the child."

"What's your name?" "Wang Xiaoliang." "What grade and class?" "Today, just after my eighth birthday."

"I asked what grade and class." The old man is getting impatient.

"Oh ... maybe ..." She shook her head again. The old man looked at the neurotic woman strangely. "Who the hell are you?" What he answered was the tears in his eyes and the back that hobbled away.

The old man sighed in confusion and seemed to understand something. In the afternoon, this bag of candy finally reached Wang Xiaoliang in Class Two, Grade Two.

The child was very surprised. I haven't tasted this favorite toffee for a long time. His little hand rubbed his clothes back and forth, thought about it, and respectfully sent one to each child, two to his good friends and five to his teacher.

"Eat!" He shouted and jumped happily, even throwing off the prostitute with his mouth open. The students shared the joy with him in the laughter of hip-hop. Only the teacher quietly turned around ... After school, Xiao Liang was still immersed in joy and skipped home.

Suddenly, he stopped and felt the candy left in his pocket, and a sense of fear came upon him. He seemed to see it again: now mother raised her slender eyebrows and whispered something in her father's ear. Dad grabbed a stick and came up to him angrily.

He looked blankly, not knowing what to do. He patted his pocket hard, but it was bulging at first sight.

He lowered his head, sucked his fingers, thought for a long time, and looked around. He quickly buried the sugar in the snowdrift by the side of the road and specially inserted a small stick. Xiao Liang slept soundly and sweetly that night.

He dreamed that his old mother came back with a smile, and now her mother is hanging her head and leaving. I'm so happy. Next day, Xiao got up early.

As usual, he emptied and rinsed the bedpans of the whole family first, then washed rice, added water, poked fire, sat in the pan, and then slipped out with a cold steamed bread on his back. He wants to digest his candy quickly.

I don't want to. Overnight, the ground temperature rose, the ice and snow melted, syrup and snow water mixed together and penetrated into the earth. On the wet ground, there are some crumpled candy paper and small sticks as marks.

Xiao Liang blinked and couldn't help rolling down tears. He squatted on the ground sadly and looked blankly.

After a while, I couldn't help reaching out my chapped little finger, picking up some dirt and putting it on the tip of my tongue-he smiled again: that dirt, My Sweetie's. Summarize several common detail descriptions: (1) portrait detail description, that is, portrait detail description.

For example, in Daddy's Caregiver, the portrait of the patient is a detail. It is this detail that drives the development of the plot.

(2) Description of language details, that is, a detailed description of the typical language of characters. For example, in "Deer Fetus Hitting Kansai Town", after Lu Da killed Kansai Town, he faked his death. This is a language detail, which shows Lu Da's bold and refined character, courage and wit.

(3) action detail description, that is, a thorough and detailed description of the typical actions of the characters. For example, in the passage about Lu Da borrowing money to help Jin Lao's father and daughter in the boxing town of Lu Tiha, the verbs used vividly show the different personality characteristics of the three men.

(4) the detailed description of psychological activities, that is, the detailed description of the psychological activities of the characters. For example, in the article "Daddy's Caregiver", the description of young Sisillo's psychological activities after seeing "Daddy" seriously ill can well show the excellent quality of caring for his parents.

(5) Detailed description of expression changes, that is, a detailed description of the process of expression changes of characters. In the article Seven Matches, the description of the expression change after the unknown soldier handed the match to Lu Jinyong is a detail worth savoring.

(6) Description of clothing details, that is, detailed description of characters' clothing. It is necessary to see the professional characteristics of this person through the description of clothing, and it is also possible to see the personality characteristics other than professional characteristics. This is a good description of clothing details.

(7) a detailed description of things, that is, a detailed description of the development and change process of things. For example, in.

How to write a person's subtle movements in detail when writing a composition is the focus of writing a composition.

Detailed descriptions can be expressions and action descriptions.

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A drop of water can reflect the brilliance of the sun, a dead leaf can show the cold of autumn, and you can see the "whole leopard" at a glance. The sound of hooves makes my heart wander. That bird must be comforting me. Looking at the palace in the dusk, I found it a bit decadent and dirty. I clearly remember that in the palace, I spent every night alone on the cold jade pillow, and every day was spent in suspicion and jealousy. After living a luxurious life, I faced the greed and exploitation of Mao Yanshou and the lonely tears of my sisters. I had hoped that the emperor would favor me, but how could I bow to Mao Yanshou! "Old Shuan also looked over there and saw a group of people with long backs and necks, as if many ducks were held up by invisible hands." (Ah Q) It was time to draw a circle, but his hand shook as soon as he held the pen, so the man spread the paper on the ground, and Ah Q fell down and tried his best to draw a circle. Afraid of being laughed at, he decided to draw a circle, but the damn pen was not only heavy, but also disobedient. It just shook, almost closed, but shrugged and turned into a melon seed. "Guest (Zhao Shixiu) L Every time it rains in Huangmei season, frogs are everywhere in the grass pond. It's past midnight, and the invited guests haven't come yet. I tapped the chess pieces bored and shook the wick of an oil lamp. Material 2: 00 Li Qingzhao opens the swing and gets up to adjust her delicate hands. Beside her, the thin Germany hung with crystal dew, and the sweat on her chest permeated with the thin silk robe. Suddenly, a guest came. She was desperate. She walked away without shoes, only wearing socks, and even the gold pin on her head fell off. She ran away shyly and leaned against the door, smelling the fragrance of plum flowers. 1. The posture of yellow leaves falling slowly on the trees in autumn makes people stop. It will always make a final struggle before landing, at least make an elegant back flip or turn around again, and then willingly become an unintentional creaking sound under people's feet. The crescent moon on the horizon exudes a faint glow, which is quietly sprinkled on the balcony. In the dim moonlight, the colorful flowers and green leaves all seem dim during the day. At this time, a few newly blooming epiphyllum are pure and clean, emitting a wisp of fragrance and refreshing. Ah! There is another bud in bud. Will it bloom? I studied it for a long time. Suddenly, the bud moved ... and finally a small hole opened unconsciously at the tip of the bud. Then, the hole slowly opened, and then the petals gradually spread out one by one. The petals are carved like crystals, and even the veins can be seen clearly; The flower heart is white and tender, and the lace shows a layer of goose yellow. 1, Taoist Wang gets up early every day and likes to walk around the cave, just like an old farmer looking at his house. He is a little dissatisfied with the murals in the cave and looks a little dizzy. I wish it were brighter. He found two helpers and brought a bucket of lime. Put a long handle on the grass brush, soak it in the lime bucket and start his painting. The first time lime was painted too thin, and the color was still faintly visible. The farmer said seriously that he brushed it carefully for the second time. The air here is dry, and the lime will soon dry. There is nothing left. Laughter in the Tang Dynasty and clothes in the Song Dynasty are all white in the cave. Taoist simple and honest smile, by the way, inquired about the market price of lime. After some calculation, he felt that there was no need to paint the cave for the time being, so he painted these. He put down the brush handle philosophically. He sat on the ground, his eyes glazed over, and everything was irretrievable. Everything is still in sight, the executioner's knife fell, and he lost his dignity as a man. He thought of death. Bai Ling has hung up. He combed his messy hair and washed his face. He wants to confess leniency. After that, he slowly stepped on the stool and put his head into the circle formed by Ghost. Just as he was about to turn over the stool, he thought of Historical Records and his ideal. Yes, I can't kill myself like this. It's sorry for my life. So he got off the stool, adjusted his clothes and started his life again.

4. Observe a person's subtle language, movements and demeanor to write a composition, which requires no less than 500 words and is fast. Hello, at first glance, she is quite tall, with a good figure, neither fat nor thin, and she is a piece of dancing material.

Look carefully, she has ear-length short hair, and always wears two hair clips on her head, one on the left and the other on the right. Her hair is tightly tied behind her ears, revealing a smooth and fair face. Her eyes are small, long and thin, but they are full of spirits. When she laughed, she became two cracks.

The nose is slightly upturned, giving people a playful feeling and looking cute. What she likes best at ordinary times is a dress with blue background and white flowers. This skirt is wide and big.

As soon as she ran away, the skirt flew like a flower. He is about thirteen or fourteen years old.

A small black and fat face with a pointed nose. Long hair, I haven't cut it for a long time

A pair of big eyes are shining under thick eyebrows, and black eyes are turning proudly. The bush was pushed away and a child's head stuck in. This is a boy, about twelve or thirteen years old, with a dark, thin face and dusty hair about two inches long. It's a mess. It looks like a magpie nest.

Tweety is a beautiful girl, and she is famous in the mountains near here. She spends every day in the wind and rain, but she won't wither, her face is white and her eyebrows are clear. When you smile, your mouth flaps like a calm meniscus, and when you speak, your voice sounds like an oriole's hoof.

A boy stuck to me as soon as I entered the garden gate. He is about eleven or twelve years old, wearing a red vest, blue shorts and a drooping belt. All dirty, like a small landowner.

Hairy crew cut and small round white face remind me of dandelions. He wandered around in front of me like a moth on fire, craning his neck to look at my spotlight.

5. This surprised me. Looking up, I saw a 12-year-old girl sitting high on a branch, holding a harmonica in her hand and preparing to play. She is wearing a lux cashmere sweater and a pea-green skirt.

Two little feet in lux shoes are hanging and pulling, which is very comfortable. Her pigtail head leans on her right shoulder, her big watery eyes blink at me, and her nose is slightly upturned, revealing a naughty look.

As soon as you see her, you will like her from the bottom of your heart. 6. Xiao Ju is fourteen years old this year, but his figure is not high, his arms are still so small, his cheekbones are still protruding, and his ten fingers are like a pile of dead bamboo branches, which seems to be broken when folded; Because she is thin, she looks very light.

7. Jianhua has a uniform figure, neither fat nor thin. His black hair is combed into two slender braids, his ruddy oval face, big round eyes and two deep dimples on his cheeks are lively and lovely. There are two country children in our yard.

One is my sister, with pigtails and a little flower jacket. One is a younger brother with hair on his forehead, like a teapot lid.

9. Xiaomaha (Mongolian), with fine features, red lips and white teeth, round face, high nose, black curls, is quite handsome. It's just that the ears are long and ugly, but the old people all say it's a "Buddha statue". They are blessed.

10, that's a skinny teenager. He is seven years old. He is neither tall nor thin, but he looks very energetic. He has short hair, a handsome face with bright black eyes and a high nose like a carrot.

People who have been to his house say that he has good features and is a good-looking boy. My sister is very cute. She has been three months.

A few days ago, it was my sister's centenary birthday. My mother drove her little sister to "Love You Baby" and took some photos. My sister has a pair of sparkling eyes, a bulging face and a very small mouth.

She has a pair of lovely ears, and a pair of small hands clenched their fists and swayed from time to time. Look! That meaty little foot looks like a steamed bun, so cute! I love my sister.

My favorite classmate is Geng Hao, a handsome boy. Look! He is not tall, but he looks strong. His arms and legs are like ripe corn cobs. He likes to wear a coat without buttons, and he says, "That will be more imposing."

Geng Hao's head is round, his red face is round, and coincidentally, his shiny black eyes are round. I like his smile best. When he laughed, his black eyes turned into two crescent moons.

His little red mouth likes telling jokes. His jokes always make us laugh until the end, and then the curved crescent moon appears again. My father is the first mate of the merchant ship of ocean shipping company.

He is very tall, his yellowish hair is naturally curly, his white square face is embedded with a pair of smart eyes, and his nose is particularly big under his high nose. When I was a child, I often looked at his nostrils and asked, "Dad, why are your nostrils so big?" He always answers with a smile; "Choose a horse with a big nose, because a horse with a big nose runs fast.

Dad was a sprint champion at school when he was a child. Ask your mother. "At this time, my mother and I will look at his big nostrils and laugh.

Dad is thin, of medium build, with a pair of modest eyes and a flat head. His high nose looks more energetic. The chiseled lips are covered with whiskers like steel needles.

Dad has a lot of knowledge. He often tells me many amazing and interesting science stories and tries to exercise me in many ways. There is such a little boy in our class. He is not tall, his body is like a small tree, and his limbs are like fresh shoots.

His thin body bears a big head, which really worries people whether his weak body can hold on. His face is very white, and the most striking thing is his big watery eyes, which are wide and round. Sometimes it really reminds people of the Monkey King's critical eyes in The Journey to the West. People say, "The eyes are the windows to the soul."

His big head is full of rich knowledge, which is enviable. He also has a clever little mouth, red, and sings a beautiful song! Do you know him? Want to know who he is? He is Wang Yuxi from our class.

My cousin is five years old this year. Although she is only five years old, sometimes I can't even tell, so I have to give her three points. Cousin is very cute, with two dimples on her chubby face.

Sometimes when we smile at her, she will say, "I know what you are laughing at. You are laughing at my dimples.

5. The composition "character" describing the detailed movements is the soul of the article, but the common characters in students' practice are often one-sided, without personality and vividness, and the whole article looks dry, boring and lacking in appeal.

If you read these works carefully, you will find a common problem: you often just pursue writing something completely, ignoring vivid, concrete and nuanced details. Detail description has a wide range and various functions, but it mainly depicts characters and shapes their images.

Vivid details are like human cells. Without them, people will lose their lives. Without details, the characters lose their flesh and blood. Writer Lee Joon said: "In revealing a character's personality characteristics, a detail sometimes plays the same role as a plot or a scene."

As the saying goes, "the spirit is seen in the nuances." The creation of literary masters attaches great importance to the description of details.

In Lu Xun's The True Story of Ah Q, the first sentence of Ah Q was described in detail: "When it was time to draw a circle, the hand just shook with a pen, and the man spread the paper on the ground, and Ah Q fell down and tried to draw a circle. Afraid of being laughed at, he decided to draw a circle, but the damn pen was not only heavy, but also disobedient. It just shook and almost closed, but shrugged its shoulders and turned into a melon seed. "

The details of this behavior concretely, vividly and vividly reflect Ah Q's personality characteristics ―― he stuck to the "spiritual victory law" of self-deception until his death. When people read this detailed description, who can not think that Ah Q is ridiculous, pathetic and pitiful? How can we not "mourn its misfortune and anger it" and then think deeply about the national inferiority? Not only China writers, but also foreign writers.

Like Balzac's Eugénie? Grandet wrote that before Grandet died, when the priest sent the gold-plated cross to his lips to kiss the icon of Christ, "he made a terrible gesture to hold the cross in his hand, and this last effort killed him." Only this detail vividly depicts the ugly image of the insatiable and untiring miser. It is the description of details that makes the characters vivid and vivid. The characters are vivid, the whole article is full of vitality and strong appeal.

Of course, not all the details of life are valuable, and it is not just to write "fine". A good detail description must be useful, true and typical.

It must express the mental outlook of the characters and deepen the theme of the article. It must conform to the personality characteristics of the characters and the reality of real life, and should best highlight the personality characteristics of the characters. Where do the details come from? Literature comes from life, and details are in colorful life.

Be a conscientious person in life and always pay attention to the people and things around you, especially the objects you describe. On the streets of Shaoxing, Xianheng Hotel, Lu Xun concentrated on observing short-sleeved gangs and long-sleeved guests before "painting the soul of the silent".

In the dark coffee room in Dublin, Joyce coldly looked at the wandering * * *, liars, mental patients, beggars and rich people, brewing Ulysses that shocked the world. Throughout the ages, great writers have always devoted their lives to catching people and things that make the soul tremble and casting them into chapters that will last forever.

Grasp the details, use the details, make this golden key work for you, and make your article shine.

6. The detailed description should include the elements of action description. A word in grade three is the soul of the article. The common characters in students' exercises are often thousands of people, which are neither personalized nor vivid. The whole article looks dry, boring and lacking in appeal. If you read these works carefully, you will find a common problem: you often just pursue writing something completely, ignoring vivid, concrete and nuanced details.

Detail description has a wide range and various functions, but it mainly depicts characters and shapes their images. Vivid details are like human cells. Without them, people will lose their lives. Without details, the characters lose their flesh and blood. Writer Lee Joon said: "In revealing a character's personality characteristics, a detail sometimes plays the same role as a plot or a scene." As the saying goes, "the spirit is seen in the nuances."