How to write the composition "Drunk"

The beginning of the composition (Shunde teaching and research section)

When commenting on the Grand View Garden, Jia Baoyu said something insightful: all beauty must be "natural and interesting". The excellent college entrance examination composition of millions of candidates in China cannot be separated from a "reason" and a "fun". The college entrance examination magazine collected and sorted out the excellent compositions of the college entrance examination in recent years, and found that there are many remarkable places, but they are all interesting. Just reading the beginning and end of these articles is enough to make us feel gratified and encouraged. Let's classify them and dedicate them to you. Maybe you can learn from them.

First, the voice saw the opening.

The most taboo at the beginning is the feeling of digressing with a pen. Tell the marking teacher directly that the author has not carefully examined the meaning of the topic, and the composition score will be greatly reduced. Please look at the beginning of several compositions in the 2004 Guangdong College Entrance Examination.

Example 1 "remembered by language and communication": "Look at the flowers blooming and falling, the clouds are rolling and the clouds are comfortable. The bright sunshine in early spring reveals the breath of summer; The lush green clothes in midsummer indicate the harvest in autumn; The fruit of autumn shows the bleak winter. The four seasons cycle, autumn comes and winter comes, and everything in nature is wonderful. How can we expect the hope of early spring without the baptism of severe winter? Our human society is also like nature. Without language connection and the same lifestyle, how can we connect the world into a whole and build a bridge of communication? " The metaphor at the beginning is inappropriate, and the previous metaphor part does not pave the way for similarities. Why do you say that? Language and communication are the relationship between premise and result, but where is the relationship between "green dress" and "bumper harvest", "fruit" and "bleak"? In particular, the rhetorical question "How can we hope for early spring without the baptism of severe winter" has nothing to do with the topic.

Example 2 "Spiritual interaction": "Trees never laugh at the weakness of grass, which, though weak, adds green to the grassland; Peony never laughs at the simplicity of wild flowers. Although wild flowers are simple, they bring infinite vitality to the earth. Trees and grass, peony and wildflowers can live in harmony because they have a common language, mutual communication and spiritual interaction. " When the beginning is close to the topic, there is no similarity, which seems far-fetched.

Example 3 "Language and Communication": "Language is a grass, and communication is a shade; Language is white clouds, communication is floating clouds. Language is a flower, and communication is an ocean of flowers. " This beginning regards "language" and "communication" as the relationship between individuals and the whole, and fails to understand the relationship between them.

All the above three situations use metaphors to increase literary talent, which is also the usual writing method of many candidates. If the examinee does not have an accurate grasp of the topic, he will take a wrong turn at the beginning, which will seriously affect his score. The following examples illustrate the function of language more accurately and vividly.

Example 4 "Communication begins with language": "Language is a bridge, connecting this shore and the other shore; Language is a waterfall, connecting streams and deep pools; Language is a rainbow, connecting the sky and the earth. Only when the language is expressed accurately can communication be successful. If the language is wrong, it may have unpredictable consequences. Then how can we make the language expression accurate and promote the success of communication? "

Therefore, whether the opening is well written or not, the core issue is still in the exam; When judging the meaning of a question, seek accuracy first, and then seek image. Many methods are introduced at the beginning.

1, quoting famous sayings and sentences

(1) Ask what the world is and teach people life and death. Yuan Haowen is really good at asking questions, and so is he. His question can be said to have been asked for a long time Over the years, how many people have lingered on this issue, and how many people have made the final answer in life after paying a huge price. But every family's words are as different as everyone's face.

Shi said, "Love is a tool. ..... "("What is love in the world ")

In a medieval church, a saint began his speech: "I became a saint because I saw through money. What belongs to me belongs to everyone." Long years, a snap of your fingers. In a cross-century prison, a thief began his monologue: "I became a thief because I saw through the money, and everyone's is mine."

(Saints and Thieves)

Rodin, the master of aesthetics, once said, "Beauty is everywhere. For our eyes, it is not the lack of beauty, but the lack of discovery. " Today, inspired by this innovative scholar, I want to say: "The answer is universal. For our brains, it is not a lack of thinking, but a lack of perspective. " Many times, we are confused by problems or wandering at the crossroads of multiple solutions. How to go has become a mystery in our hearts, and we are often indecisive. At this time, it is necessary to consider it from another angle, which will bring you more chances of success. ("Spin this kaleidoscope")

2. Clever use of letter format

(1) Dear Grandpa Confucius:

Hello! I am your ordinary descendant. Thousands of years later, I still dare to write to bother you, not only to pay tribute to you, but also to have some difficult problems waiting for your advice. (A letter to Confucius)

(2) Damn standard answer:

Seeing you, I am really filled with indignation. Therefore, driven by the flame of anger, I wrote this letter to condemn you. The answers are colorful, but you have to wear a "standard" hat. You know, because of the word "mark", countless tragedies have happened. Here are your three main accusations: ... (A letter with a standard answer)

3. Borrow Zhang Hui's novel brushwork.

1 "It is said that the general trend of the world will be combined for a long time, and it will be combined for a long time." At the beginning, the era of Wei, Shu and Wu Dingli no longer existed. In The River of No Return, the waves washed away the heroes of the past. And the former Shu heirs have also become "happy without thinking about Shu", and the world has become Sima's world. ("Heroes of the Three Kingdoms")

(2) water margin Juyitang, now is brightly lit, buzzing. One hundred people and eight people are gathered here, and everyone is quarreling. What are they arguing about? It turns out that Liang Shanbo is going to select heroes who fight tigers recently. It's great to be awarded this honorary title. Whoever is awarded can sit in the second place in the Water Margin. That's why all the heroes gather here and argue endlessly. ("Who is the hero who fights the tiger")

4. Clever use of rhetoric

Starting with rhetoric, it is easy to express the author's feelings and arouse readers' interest in reading. For example, in 2002, the beginning of "Choice of Heart" wrote: "If you choose wings, you will embrace the whole blue sky; If you choose fins, you will kiss the vast blue sea; If you choose a quadruped, you will appreciate the vast green forest. And my choice is a cage. " Starting with a parallelism sentence, the sentence pattern is neat, the language is sonorous, and the contrast is formed before and after, which not only points out the topic but also sets suspense to promote people's appreciation. In addition, the article "Honesty-Forever Green Card" written in 200 1 College Entrance Examination begins: "Honesty is like the first sunshine in spring, which is desirable; Such as a sweet watermelon in summer, contained in the mouth, sweet in the heart; For example, the autumn wind sent a fiery maple leaf from a distance, which attracted infinite attention; Such as snowflakes flying in winter, cover the wheat fields with thick quilts. " At first, metaphor and parallelism were used to describe the value and significance of honesty and express the desire for honesty.

5. Lyric method.

That is to say, pour out your true feelings directly at the beginning of the article to point out the main idea of the article. There are three common lyric ways: hypothetical lyric, comparative lyric and comparative lyric. For example, the 200 1 college entrance examination masterpiece "Carrying a Backpack of Honesty" wrote at the beginning: "If life is a Mercedes-Benz train, then honesty is an indispensable wheel; If life is a long-distance ship, then honesty is an indispensable backpack, which will accompany you all your life. " The author uses metaphor and contrast to illustrate the importance of honesty from comparison. Another example is the beginning of the excellent composition "The Steps of Choice" in the 2002 college entrance examination: "What suddenly crossed my mind and left an instant glory? What is it, quietly watering the heart and cultivating sweet memories? What gently taps the soul and brings eternal beauty? What makes your heart, my heart and his heart play that magnificent movement together? One by one is a shocking choice, a difficult and beautiful choice again and again, a song of one's own choice ... "The four parallel questions at the beginning cause people to think deeply, expressing the value and significance of choice to life, thus expressing the author's feelings.

Step 6 cut to the chase.

Because this kind of opening is straightforward, it can go straight to the subject, enter the scene described by the writer at once, or grasp the essence of the discussion at once, so it is suitable for many styles. For example, the excellent composition "Choosing the Chinese Soul" in the 2002 college entrance examination begins with "Looking through the past history and looking for the choice of the soul without regrets", and the subtitle is: 1, the choice of heroes. 2. The king's choice. 3. Choice of scientists. In this way, a few words are directly introduced below. Another example is the excellent composition "Wisdom and Thought-My Choice" written at the beginning of the college entrance examination in 2002: "After finishing middle school and receiving the enrollment brochures of three universities, I must make a sacred choice." The author is straightforward and concise, and introduces the following with a general introduction, giving a general introduction on how to choose between "Fortune University", "Power University" and "Wisdom University".

7. Descriptive method.

Descriptive method is to use some rhetorical devices or some descriptive devices to describe the scenery, render the atmosphere, contrast the atmosphere, and pave the way for the beginning of the people or things behind. This method is particularly effective for narratives, essays and argumentations. For example, the article "The Choice of Zhaojun", an excellent composition in the 2002 college entrance examination, begins with the following words: "Deep walls, bright-eyed ladies-in-waiting, silent butterflies, and lazy dressing, like the wheels of the court, slowly run over Zhaojun's heart." At the beginning of the article, four formal phrases are used to describe the characteristics of the characters, including neat form, elegant words and modifiers. The image accurately reveals the personality characteristics of the characters, and renders and contrasts Zhao Jun's wise spiritual choice below, which makes the initial description and the events in the article form a good contrast. Another example is the ethnic composition of 1997. Someone wrote in the article "White Clouds, Water Drops": "There is a white cloud floating in the blue sky, and there are small water drops in the white cloud. Who let the white clouds float high? It is those small water droplets, you hold me, I hold you, and jointly create that freedom and elegance. " The article begins with a metaphor, personifying each other and asking questions. This passage is very poetic. For the following metaphor, our society is a white cloud, and every member is a molecule in the white cloud, which inspires us to create a beautiful environment together.

8. Take the title method.

That is, the beginning of the article is reasonably imagined and extended along the topic materials and the ideas provided by the topic. This kind of undertaking can continue from the end of the topic background, or it can be intercepted from the raw materials. For example, 200 1' s excellent composition "Honest Interview" wrote at the beginning: "It's so boring. Honesty has always been annoying, so I sigh from time to time. Why did you abandon me? Is it useless for me to follow the times? No, I'm going to find my good friends and let them judge! " Subsequently, the article compiled the story of "sincerity" visiting "money", revealing that there are a lot of money transactions and power and money transactions in real life, and even "literary and money transactions" have appeared in civilized and pure cultural places. The ingenious design at the beginning gives a scientific and detailed introduction to the following story.

9. Character appearance method.

When writing a narrative, in order to attract readers, sometimes close-ups can be used to let the characters appear themselves, so as to get a sneak peek before the characters start work and attract readers' attention. For example, the excellent college entrance examination of 200 1 begins with "Can you abandon me-honest self-report": "My name is sincerity, and I don't cheat. Living with the universe depends on the human heart. It can be traced back to ancient times and can shine today. It can help diplomatic relations and get close to friends and friends. " At the beginning of the article, I introduce myself, explain my surname, background and unique personality, narrow the distance between the author and the reader, express my feelings through white characters, and point out the main idea of the article.

10, clever use of fables

Gong Yu's family has lived here for generations, and Wangwu Mountain and Taihang Mountain at the entrance stand in the way. Life is pathetic! It seems isolated here. What's new in this city has long been old news. This life really needs to change. The foolish old man thought, I have to find a way to move Taihang Mountain and Wu Wang. (The Story of New Gong Yu and Zhizuo)

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1 1, skillfully using inscriptions to reveal the theme

(1) there is no tree, but there can be grass green; Without the beauty of peony, you can have the freedom of small wild chrysanthemum ... life is not necessarily brilliant, but it must be great!

Notes before the text of a book or after the title of an article.

Butterfly was once a beautiful and excellent dancer. Her long shawl and gentle dance brought her thunderous applause and countless flowers. She was hailed by others as China's future Duncan ... but it's all over, and fate will keep her in a wheelchair forever. Life is bleak and silent, and the "white swan" has become an ugly duckling that nobody cares about. How many times, she dreamed that she put on glass shoes and continued her pursuit, but when she woke up, she only heard the cold autumn wind. ("Star Night Talk")

If you lose money, you only lose a small part; If you lose your health, you only lose a small part; If you lose your integrity, you are almost bankrupt.

Notes before the text of a book or after the title of an article.

What is "honesty"? So is honesty and trustworthiness. Throughout history, the word "sincerity" has soaked many people's blood and tears. Who is praising the emperor's new clothes? )

12, clever use of problem-solving forms

Once, a friend gave me a unique question: which of the following beautiful scenery do you like best?

A. A piece of pure white feather falls leisurely in the shining golden sunshine.

B. A petal falls red and floats in the quiet and deep pool water.

C. a meteor, in the deep blue sky, is fleeting.

D. A drop of crystal dew slipped quietly on the tip of the green grass.

After reading this question, I suddenly froze. The ever-changing nature, the rising sun, the ebb and flow of the tide, how many beautiful scenery is exciting and fascinating. ..... (infinite possibilities, infinite beauty)

13, skillfully using celebrities to do questions and answers

Someone asked: What is happiness? The answer is colorful.

Nietzsche thought: "The happiest person is the one who can swallow centipedes, broken glass, meat worms and stones together, but not disgusting." The stoics believe that "having unlimited wealth and power and being able to handle things calmly is the real happiness." ("The answers are colorful")

Archimedes said, "Give me a fulcrum and I can pry the earth up!" "

I said, "Give me a fulcrum, and I can support my soul!" " ("Give the soul a fulcrum")

14, skillfully using poetry to express poetry

(1) Looking at the colorful poems of the Tang and Song Dynasties, countless poems can be regarded as parting poems. Wang Bozhuang sang loudly: Why linger at the fork in the road, the children are stained with towels. Liu Yong plaints: Where will you wake up after drinking tonight? There is a breeze and a waning moon on the bank of Yangliu. Jiang Yan, however, Qian Fan put it in a nutshell: those who are ecstatic just leave. Some people beat their chests and feet: how can a whip be urgent! Today, there is Wang Guozhen's croon: how can you go back after a hundred years of life? No matter where you are, just pray like water and like a boat. Xi Murong's gentle warning came: If parting can remind us of the details that we neglected because of gathering, is it really bad to leave? This kind of feeling is really beautiful. Reciting the feelings of different times and different lives will have unexpected gains. ("Vientiane Life Insists on Yourself")

2 What is beauty? I know that beauty is the first light that rises on the horizon. Beauty is a maple leaf hotter than fire in autumn, a red-crowned crane flying on the beach at dusk, and a sika deer flying on the grassland ... Baum Tong Jia agreed with me and added: "Beauty is perceptual knowledge, and studying aesthetics is the science of studying perceptual knowledge." But Kant glared at me angrily and said, "One-sided, beauty is a purely subjective feeling of human beings and has nothing to do with the thing itself." I suggest you look at my judgment and criticism. "I humbly and carefully studied his aesthetic works on emotion. When I was complacent about my mystery, Hegel poured cold water on me: "No, beauty should be the externalization of human nature." Then he proudly talked about his aesthetic theory. Just when my second monk was at a loss, Marx whispered beside me, "Don't listen to him. He has turned right from wrong. Don't fall into the mud of idealism. "Beauty should actually be the unity of human nature and free form." What is beauty? I decided to leave. Can't agree? Pick mine! ~O(∩_∩)O Thank you ~ \ (≥ ▽≤)/~ Lala!