How to write a composition: introduce a scenery of the West Lake to others.

When introducing a scene, there are usually two situations. One case is that the natural scenery of a place is properly interspersed in the narrative of the note author. For example, the article "Grassland" depicts the beautiful scenery of grassland landscape to set off the brotherhood between Mongolian and Han nationalities ... This kind of scenery description accounts for a small proportion in the full text, and what can be written is often only a part of a certain scenery, or just a certain scenery or one or two specific scenery in this place. On the other hand, the whole article mainly talks about a certain natural scenery, and there are many such narratives in primary school Chinese textbooks. Song, do you remember any articles?

Yes, yes, almost all of them.

A: Then tell us about it.

B: For example, the landscape of Guilin, the wonders of Jingbo Lake, colorful ponds, the underwater world, a bird's eye view of the sky, the Golden Flower Shuanglong Cave, the Summer Palace, the beautiful Xiaoxing 'an Mountains, the seaside and the rich Xisha Islands. ...

A: Not bad, not bad. You remember very clearly that these words and general travel articles are all about introducing and describing a landscape. Of course, the scope of scenery description varies greatly, but the purpose of writing is to show readers the beautiful and spectacular mountains and rivers of the motherland and express the author's praise and joy for the scenery of his hometown, mountains and rivers of the motherland, natural environment, social environment and living place. Primary school composition training also requires children to learn to write a scene. Today, we focus on the second situation of landscape writing-the full text focuses on depicting landscapes-to discuss how to guide primary school students to "introduce a scene". Okay？

C: Well, every time primary school students see beautiful articles or wonderful scenery clips, they can't help but "tut-tut" and sometimes even read aloud. Why? Just because these beautiful scenery writing articles can bring people into a beautiful and charming situation, such as rough sea, towering mountains, mirror-like West Lake, crystal-clear Lijiang River, singing brook, sky with flowers and birds, colorful ponds ... These scenery make children feel novel and beautiful, so that they often envy the authors of these articles, and they often think, if it is myself, I can't write it because I am too ambitious.

B: This situation is not unique. Some children just shout "beautiful", "lovely" and "charming" in their articles because they don't know how to describe the scenery. Others eat some words and fragments from Travel Notes in their own compositions, but they don't know how to express their true feelings and passions in life.

A: Let's talk about the basic method of "introducing a scene" for primary school students. What's your opinion?

B: In my opinion, there are many kinds, levels and colorful natural scenery, and the observation and attention of primary school students need to be developed. If you look at the scenery from east to west, it is difficult to grasp the characteristics of the scenery, and the composition is inevitably chaotic, unorganized and not specific. So first of all, we should guide students to observe and describe the scenery in a certain order.

There are three main ways and sequences of primary school Chinese texts. One is in the order of spatial transformation. Description of scenery is generally a narrative observation of scenery. We can guide students to choose a foothold of description, that is, a fixed observation point, and observe and describe in order with the movement of the eyeball.

C: This method is most commonly used to guide primary school students' composition, just like shooting the camera lens from left to right or from front to back, from top to bottom or from far and near. The author of the third grade Chinese textbook "San Tan Yin Yue" observes and describes the indoor furnishings, and the author of "Rain" observes and describes the rain scene outside the house in this way.

A: You remember clearly that you were right. It can be described in the order of spatial transformation, and it can also be described by the steps of the observer.

C: This is often called "changing scenery".

A: Yes! This method is often used for visiting, sightseeing and observing complex environment. In real life, eye movement and foot movement are often described together, and examples are also given in this paper. Observing the scenery in this way can better grasp the characteristics of the scenery and leave a relatively complete and concrete impression on the whole scenery and the main scenery. So this method is basically used to guide students to write travel notes. Song, tell me about the other two.

B: Good! The second is to observe and describe according to the order of scene categories. For example, in the article Landscape of Guilin, the water of Lijiang River is described as "quiet, clear and green", then the mountains of Guilin are described as "strange, beautiful and dangerous", and finally the beauty of landscape is described as "a picture scroll".

The third is to observe the description in the order of delay. This method is called "time series method" and "time lapse method". The time series here can be year, month and season, such as morning, afternoon, evening and night of a day, spring, summer, autumn and winter of a year and so on. The purpose of this observation and description is to capture and express the different characteristics of the scenery in different periods and reflect the overall beauty of the scenery more comprehensively.

Answer: It is very specific to instruct students how to observe and describe the scenery in turn. What I want to emphasize is that in teaching practice, students should be guided to flexibly choose and determine the order of observation and description from the purpose of writing and the actual situation of scenery.

After guiding students to "introduce a scene" and solve the problem of orderly observation and description, the focus should be on guiding students to observe and describe the scene carefully, and we should start from three aspects, namely:

First of all, students should be guided to discover and describe the color characteristics of the scenery. We often say to observe and describe colorful scenery. The so-called "color" refers to color, and "posture" refers to posture. Any landscape has its own unique shape and color. For example, Guilin's mountains are "strange", "beautiful" and "dangerous", one after another "rising from the ground" and "unconnected with each other", "dangerous peaks stand tall and rugged", while Daxinganling is "rolling and stretching for thousands of miles".

The second is to discover and describe the dynamics of the scene. Trees and flowers are swaying in the wind, the Three Gorges of the Yangtze River is leaking thousands of miles, and the sea of clouds in Huangshan is ever-changing. Also, sometimes a still scene under different light and angles will give people a moving feeling. The third is to guide students to observe and seriously experience the feelings aroused by the scenery in their hearts. Guide children to think about those waterfalls, waves, flying snowflakes, drizzle, drunken maple leaves and white lotus flowers ... to arouse those memories and beautiful reverie in their hearts?

C: How can these basic methods of introducing scenes be mastered and used independently by children, and gradually become their abilities?

A: It is up to our teachers to carefully design the teaching process and guide children to learn and use actively. In this respect, the teacher has a very distinctive and enlightening class. In that class, she first led the children to understand "the method of introducing a scene" from the learning of examples. Let's watch a video of her.

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A: After watching the teacher's teaching video, do you have any inspiration on how to let children master the method of "introducing a scene"?

C: It's really enlightening. From the teaching, we can see how to introduce a scene in detail in this class, so that students can understand that there are two ways to achieve this requirement. One is to write down the impressive places, and the other is to write down the associations generated by the scene. Teachers always firmly grasp this teaching focus in teaching. What is more worth learning is to guide the whole class to gradually understand from the appreciation, comment and analysis of an example, and gradually sum up these two methods of writing specific scenery, instead of telling students the methods directly.

A: Well said! The teaching design that teachers use model essays to guide the whole class to learn landscape writing methods is really worth learning, as Tang Xiao said. She does not simply and directly impart composition knowledge, but guides the whole class to actively participate in the activities of case evaluation and experience a process of gradually understanding and summarizing methods.

This process can be roughly divided into three meanings. At the first level, starting from the actual life of the whole class, students' compositions are drawn out for young authors to read aloud in class and enjoy by the whole class. On the second level, guide the whole class to watch the video, recall the garden, and evaluate the article paragraph by paragraph, so as to find out how Zhou Yu specifically introduced trees, lakes and rockeries in his composition, and which places are related to them. At the same time, let the author state his own views, talk about his writing experience and why he can write specifically. On the third level, on the basis of appreciation and analysis, two methods of writing landscapes are naturally trained, which makes sense.

B: I think Mr. Gu also chose a good model essay in this class. This article makes good use of the method of writing scenery and meets the teaching requirements of this course. This is of course the most basic condition for choosing an example. It is worth noting that the scenery introduced in this composition is familiar to all the children in the class, and the author of the article is a classmate around him. Examples are very close to students' life, which has a positive effect on arousing children's desire to read and learn examples, arousing their memories of life and understanding the methods used in composition.

A: This opinion is a good supplement. Teacher Gu's practice is worth learning.

After children understand the methods from examples, they should create conditions for children to actively recall their lives, try to use them, gradually master the methods and develop their abilities.

Let's watch another video of the teacher's teaching and see how she designs and arranges it.

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B: The teacher's teaching design is really easy to arrange. First of all, she asked each student to take out the photos he took when he visited a certain scene, recall what he saw at that time, and introduce them to his classmates, which not only opened up his mind, aroused his desire to talk, but also created conditions for everyone to try to write the scene independently.

On this basis, she organized the whole class to communicate, and asked several children to introduce them to the class, so that other students could listen and think; Is this classmate's introduction specific? If the introduction is unclear and not specific, she can either guide everyone to make suggestions and add anything, or encourage everyone to ask questions: "What else do you want to ask?" Then let the introduced students answer the questions to make the content more specific. In this way, in communication and discussion, students will gradually master how to write a specific description of a scene, how to expand association, and then know how to use it.

C: In class, the children carefully recall, speak actively and have a heated discussion. This arrangement of the teacher is really worth learning.

A: You both speak very well. In order to let each student introduce a scene better by using the method of scene description on the basis of discussion, Mr. Gu gave concrete help in how to think before writing, how to clear up the train of thought and grasp the key points. Let's watch another video to see how she designed it.

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C: The teacher asked the students to fill in a form first, and then write, which quickly helped the children to concentrate their thoughts, clear their thoughts and establish the key points of the composition. This really helps students to concentrate on independence according to the requirements of this composition. It is conceivable that the children must have written a wonderful composition this time.

A: Not bad! After the students write independently, the teacher randomly asks several students who have written first to read the composition fragments and exchange comments. The children's work is really great. Let's enjoy it, too

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B: The children's writing is really great. From how to design teaching and guide students to introduce a scene, I think teachers can actively and appropriately use modern educational technology according to the needs of guiding landscape writing in this course, which is worth learning. For example, the teacher plays the songs of birds with recordings, renders the atmosphere of the park, and reproduces scenic spots with videos; Showing photos through projection, evoking memories and imagination of scenery, proper selection and active use of media, making the classroom closely connected with children's lives, making children understand the relationship between words and things in specific situations, and recalling imagination is conducive to strengthening the development of their thinking in images. Because of this, the demand for composition training has been implemented. Children's compositions are naturally wonderful.

C: Teacher, I also think that the training method of "learning to be a little tour guide" adopted by teachers is very suitable for children's age characteristics and has a strong flavor of the times. This not only satisfies the children's desire to talk about their feelings and exchange experiences, but also arouses their sense of responsibility, so that they can mobilize their potential and do their best to complete the task, so they are full of enthusiasm and the classroom atmosphere is warm.

You're right. These two points are very prominent in Mr. Gu's class. These two points are of great practical significance for guiding primary school students to learn how to introduce a scene, which is worth learning and learning from.

Let's call it a day and discuss how to introduce a scene.

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