400-word composition for the fourth grade of primary school: Mom takes me to travel

Composition title: Mom takes me on a trip

Keywords: Mom takes me on a trip to the fourth grade of elementary school 400 words

Number of words: 400 words composition

This article is suitable for: The fourth grade of primary school

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This composition is a 400-word composition for the fourth grade of primary school. The title is: "Mom Takes Me to Travel". Everyone is welcome to participate Contribute. Once, my mother took me to travel to Zhangjiajie. My mother went home and prepared some food and gifts, then went to a place to wait for my mother's friend. Later, her friend arrived and we got in the car. After a while, it was evening. Soon the car arrived at the hotel. After dinner, we went to a place not far away and sold some food. Then we got in the car and arrived at ten o'clock. I slept in the hotel all night. The next morning, my mother and I went to Zhangjiajie and sold tickets to see the mountains in Zhangjiajie. After a while, my mother's friend saw that the mountain was full of mountains and fog. My mother’s friend also said that it looks like a fairy mirror. He also said that various people from that mountain went to the hotel again in the evening, slept a little, and then went back on the third day. The shadows there are beautiful. Comments from famous teachers: The article tells the story of traveling to Zhangjiajie with my mother and friends. The whole process is written in great detail, and every detail is written down. The teacher has two suggestions: First, the theme of the article is "Mom took me to travel", so it should focus on the process of traveling to Zhangjiajie and describe the beautiful scenery of Zhangjiajie, while the focus of this article is on the way to travel; second, The sentences in the article are not fluent, "My mother went to the house to prepare gifts and food, and then went to a place to wait for my mother's friends." It’s hard to understand a long sentence like “I slept in the hotel all night”, so punctuation marks should be added in the middle.

(Xuele China Distinguished Teacher: Teacher Lin Yaoji) 2009-5-27 23:04:00