How to keep a running account of primary school composition?

Almost 80% of students will use the following words to describe their children's compositions.

Daily account, dry, not specific, not vivid.

80% of children's exercises that have been read in excellent Chinese can also be described in one word.

simple

The language is too simple: I went to Lingnan Impression Garden today. Make ordinary sentences.

Feelings are too simple: I am so happy today that I want to participate in such activities again. Express your feelings. Too what what, really what what!

What is a running account?

What did you do? I have no feelings of my own. What is dry? The description is not specific, and the emotional expression is too simple, so it is dry.

This is what adults often feel when reading children's articles.

Parents all know what a good composition looks like.

This is the famous article that is often said.

How did she do it?

First, she likes to use short sentences.

In this article, most sentences are in the range of 3 to 8 words. So when you read it, you feel smooth and rhythmic.

Second, she likes to use symmetrical sentences. We can count how many sentences she used.

Red, green and green.

When the wind comes, the elms call first.

When it rains, elms smoke first.

If we can't count them, this kind of symmetrical sentence will be all over. What color? Red, red, green, green. What should the tree do when the wind comes and what should the tree do when the rain comes?

In this way, it seems that everything has been described in detail by her from different angles.

This is called richness.

Third, did she confess?

Yes From the expression of the sentence, we can feel that Xiaohong likes flowers, birds, insects, cucumbers, melons and so on in the garden very much. I feel that these plants are also particularly free. She used a lot of personification techniques.

Know the standard of writing a good sentence: short sentence, symmetry and personification.

Today, we will talk about how to write a sentence like a famous sentence, which needs to be learned step by step. Parents can guide their children from the following three aspects at home.

The first trick is to write short sentences.

Say a few words first. It's not well written. Please pay attention to this bad sentence, not a sick sentence, but a dry sentence we said. As follows:

1. In this Star Wars, we were divided into two groups.

All the members of the group left that night except the two of us.

The main problem with these two sentences is that they are too long. Every sentence is more than 15 words, and the meaning is very clear. We tried to divide two sentences into several. Read it again.

I believe you probably know the basic method of writing short sentences.

First, divide the time words into a short sentence. Read it again and you will find the rhythm of sentence expression, that is, short sentence expression. However, some people may have questions. A few more commas, and short sentences will come out.

The first move is to let the children have the meaning of writing short sentences, rather than making sentences, which will be very blunt. It is also an important step for children to express flexibility.

The second trick is to write symmetrical sentences.

We will invite two children who have been to strawberry garden to dry sentences.

1. In the bright sunshine in spring, we came to the square garden with green grass and flowers in full bloom.

2. Chocolate strawberry is a very sweet purple strawberry.

At first glance, this adjective and four-character word are used incisively and vividly. Is there a problem?

If there is a problem, the problem lies in the adjectives written together. I don't know where to pause when reading, so my fluency is even worse. Plus the description is not detailed, and the feeling of dryness comes out again.

How to change it? Turn it into a short sentence.

Please pay attention to add a requirement and turn it into a symmetrical sentence.

Have you found the knack of writing symmetrical sentences?

Write the same kind of words, but different words.

For example, the verbs of seeing and eating are the same, and adjectives describing color and taste are collocated.

If not, let's give a few more examples:

Flowers and green grass belong to the same category, both of which are plants.

Blue sky and white clouds belong to the same category and belong to nature.

Bees and butterflies belong to the same category and both belong to insects.

Wind and rain, lightning belong to the same category, both belong to natural phenomena.

Writing symmetrical sentences actually describes the same thing from different angles, at least from two aspects.

For example, when writing "plants", the content will be enriched from three aspects: flowers, grass and trees.

When writing an action, you can use "glance, aim, stare, stare" to write "look" action, then an ordinary action becomes a fine action, and then what you write is detailed and specific.

Therefore, writing symmetrical short sentences provides a good tool for children to express and describe in detail. Remember to keep training, so as to internalize your language expression habits, and your sentence expression is not far from celebrities.

However, the excellent Chinese teacher here has another trick.

The third measure: write long sentences with short sentences.

You may have another problem, but you don't agree. Do you want to write more short sentences? Why write long sentences again?

What I want to say is that we can connect short sentences together and write longer content. This is also the ultimate goal of learning to write short sentences today, making the content more concrete and vivid, and making the language smoother.

Let's see how children write this delicious meal after watching the meal cooked by their mother.

Dinner is really mouth watering.

We just commented on this sentence, which can be described as "good soil" in one word. Sentences are dry as soon as they arrive in the article.

How can we make this sentence glow with emotion and language again? This needs short sentences to help.

We have to help the child see first. What exactly is the dish he saw for dinner? What is the difference between these dishes? It's like writing from different angles. So the short sentence became a paragraph.

Dinner is really mouth watering. Fish-flavored eggplant, fried shredded potatoes and sweet and sour crucian carp are all my favorites. Like a greedy cat, I stared at the food on the table: golden shredded potatoes, red shredded peppers and oily garlic cloves, which made my mouth water.

After reading this passage, we will find that various short sentences describe this dinner from different angles, from the style of the dishes to the characteristics of the dishes.

With careful description, our sentences naturally become concrete, because the author has concrete perception, emotions are naturally revealed, and smooth and rhythmic expression is added.

Well, the three ways to write a sentence are all to train children's language expression to be too dull and rigid at the beginning of writing, which is what we often call dry, lifeless and specific problems.

It can also help students in grades five and six to train their fluency in language expression.

Finally, as a teacher who has been engaged in composition teaching for a long time, I think reading good books and accumulating a good sense of language are one of the keys to help children write good compositions.

Just like the passage in Xiao Hong's works that I read to you today, only when we are exposed to beautiful language can we write beautiful language.

At the same time, remind the third and fourth grade children in the critical period of writing that the guidance of methods and deliberate practice are more important than repeated writing.

The methods mentioned today can only help children form their own language habits if they are trained consciously.

"Method guidance and deliberate training are more important than repeated writing", and no matter how good the method is, it will never achieve good absorption effect.