Composition: Lovely hometown

Pictures of the Four Seasons

Tian Meng, Class 2, Grade 2, Maple Leaf International School, Dalian

My hometown is Japan. The scenery there is beautiful all year round, and it is a beautiful picture.

In spring, trees sprout new green branches and grow tender green leaves; grass sprouts from the ground, like strong warriors; little frogs wake up from their dazed state; little frogs wake up from their dazed state; The squirrel started its labor work again.

In summer, the sun shows its majestic face, as if it wants to eat us. In such hot weather, squirrels hide in their holes to rest. Only at night do bad and smart animals like wolves come out to move around.

Autumn is a colorful season and "Labor Day" for animals like squirrels. Some small animals lay their eggs in the grass so that they won't freeze to death. Look! How smart she is!

Winter is even more joyful! Some children saw the ice and jumped on it immediately. The ice was empty and they suddenly fell into the hole in the ice, so they all became drowned rats. We laughed so hard that we burst into tears. We got a little cold standing there, so I went hiking. The hills are very slippery, so I always slip and fall. Later, I gradually mastered the method and stopped slipping. We also found frog eggs. It feels smooth on the hand, with small black "beans" in the middle, like millions of pairs of little eyes.

Look! My hometown is beautiful!

Comments: The characteristics of the scenery in my hometown are very well written, and it is hard to put down when reading. The article has vivid metaphors, vivid descriptions, appropriate adjectives, and interesting activities. The blend of scenes is thought-provoking.

Instructor: Liu Yuxiang

Shuangfeng Reservoir

Liu Xiaohui, Class 2, Grade 3, Maple Leaf International School, Dalian

Next to Harbin there is a place called Founder place. There is a reservoir there called Shuangfeng Reservoir.

One summer vacation, I went there to play, and we parked under the "highway." As soon as we got off the car we ran quickly into the forest.

The car is like hell, and this place is like heaven. Hell and heaven are different. The air in one is fresh and the air in the other is sultry. A sketch I watched put it well: "They are all the same place." "Why is the gap so big?"

The second aunt picked up lunch and said, "Where to eat?" We had already gone to play and didn't hear it at all.

Now, the trees are growing green and lush, and the dense layers of branches and leaves have sealed the grove tightly. Thousands of dazzling golden lights are like sharp swords, one is dark and the other is bright. If the scenery in front of you is regarded as a painting, it will definitely be included in the national exhibition. I found a tree with small mushrooms of different sizes emerging from a crack in the tree. I raised my head, and some random trees shot up into the sky. The tops of the trees were swaying in the air, as if they were talking. You said a few words, I said a few words, chatting and laughing, some laughed to their death; some laughed. They bent over; some laughed until tears came out, and some even had their mouths numb.

I saw the most beautiful scenery here - a small building next to the roaring and roaring river of Shuangfeng Reservoir. Look how the gurgling river looks like a group of music groups singing beautiful songs.

Sometimes there will be snow-white water splashes, going straight up and down, which is really amazing!

I like Shuangfeng Reservoir, especially the endless river and the dense groves.

Comment: You are in a state of passion when writing, so the article you write is so wonderful, your writing style is amazing, your writing is fluent, you use appropriate rhetorical methods, and your imagination is extremely rich. Reading it makes one's imagination soar, as if one were in the Fengshan Reservoir and fell into love.

Beautiful Golden Pebble Beach

Eric

Today, my sister took me to Golden Pebble Beach, which has beautiful scenery and is a beautiful place.

The trees there are strong, tall, and dense, like soldiers practicing walking in unison, shouting: "One, two, one, one, two, one."

The most beautiful thing is the beach on the seaside. The golden beach, the blue sea, and many small crabs crawling over and over, like children playing "Eagle Catching Chickens"!

Then I saw slippery little fish swimming around the reef. Their eyes were round. One little fish kept looking at me. Maybe he liked me!

Then we went to buy flowers, and a breeze blew over, and the flowers swayed, as if they were blowing the wind to us!

Then we went to the hunting ground. The animals there were very clever, especially the monkey. It had big eyes, a long tail, a sensitive nose, and a red butt. It was very cute!

Then I saw a butterfly and a dragonfly. They were chirping as if they were chatting. It may mean: "I am so lucky today! When I flew by on the road, someone gave me food." The butterfly said again: "You are so lucky! But I am very unlucky. I had a quarrel with my friends at home today." The dragonfly said: "It's okay!" Then the butterfly and the dragonfly flew away.

Finally I went home, I am so happy today!

Comment: The exercise vividly describes the beautiful scenery of Jinshitan. The author has rich imagination and writes his own unique experience, which is very similar to children's life.

The beach in Dalian

Wang Yang

Since I came to Dalian, I have fallen in love with this beautiful place, especially Haiwei here.

On Saturday, my father and I went to the beach to play. When we got to the beach, my father and I bought a swimming ring and went swimming in the sea.

After swimming for half an hour, we went to the beach to pick up sea vegetables. After a while, my father and I almost picked up a bucket of sea vegetables. My father and I picked it up so seriously, all for drinking. Mom's seaweed soup. After a while, a big wave rushed towards me. This big wave hit my feet and it felt so refreshing.

My dad and I played building sandcastles again. My dad went to find shells to use as windows. I built a sandcastle here. When my dad came back with the shells, I saw shells of various colors. Pink, white, yellow... I also brought a five-pointed star and placed it on the top of the sandcastle.

There are many fun things in Dalian!

Comment: Your writing has always been wonderful. You can appropriately express what you see, hear, think and feel, and your language is fluent. It is a masterpiece!

Times Square

Ma Siqi

When I was a child, during the Chinese New Year, my mother said: "Go to Times Square to see the fireworks."

I asked my mother: "Is it fun there?" My mother said: "You will know how good it is when you go there." I said: "Okay!"

I went to Times Square with my mother, and when we got there , there is everything there, but I said with satisfaction: "Mom, you lied to me." Because there is nothing I like there. Over time, I feel that Times Square is a good place. There are many flowers, plants and trees there in summer. There are also many insects in Times Square. Some butterflies gather among the flowers, like a dancing lotus. During the Chinese New Year, there are huge crowds of people and there are some fountains. What surprised me most was the ice lantern, which was white and contained a light, like a Kongming lantern. I saw a dragon moving, with shining eyes and a red body.

The most interesting thing is that a person tied the little man to a wooden stick, which is very beautiful. I think Times Square is a famous square and the best square in my mind.

Comment: The author truly wrote about the scenery of Times Square and my emotional changes, with fluent language and vivid descriptions.

The Victoria Peak in Hong Kong

Zhao Yueheng

Today, I went to the Victoria Peak in Hong Kong. The trees there are very lush, there is a lot of grass, and the Victoria Peak is very high. , we had to take the cable car. My mother, sister and second uncle and I took the cable car together. We got on the cable car and there were many foreigners on it.

Taipingshan is very steep, and there are buildings on the mountain, all of which are sloping. We took the cable car to the rooftop. We looked down from the rooftop, wow! There are trees all down below, some are green, some are yellow, and some are red. Not to mention how beautiful they are.

There is a telescope up there. Just put a coin in the telescope. I put a coin in it. When I saw it, there was a small house.

The most interesting thing is that my mother wanted to take pictures. I said, "Mom, please stop taking pictures. I'm afraid you might have to lift your camera. That would be terrible." The second aunt was startled, and she I didn’t dare to take the photo anymore, but my mother still had the photo, so I said, “Mom, don’t take the photo. If it falls, we won’t be able to take the photo.”

Isn’t Hong Kong very good? !

Comment: The author gave a more detailed description of the Taiping Mountain in Hong Kong. Since the author visited the Taiping Mountain, he had a deep feeling and the writing was fluent. It would be better if he could describe the scenery of the Taiping Mountain in more detail. Better!

School

Huang Zhirui

Our school is a happy and lively place.

In spring, the school is still a little cold, but in a few weeks, the school will not be cold at all, and the green trees have sprouts, as sharp as grass.

Summer is the season I most want to come to, because this is when there are the most insects. When we were playing at noon, Jia Yi and I experimented with ants. At first, I caught an ant, and then I saw a spider web and threw the ant up. I saw a spider crawling out of a pine tree and tied the ant with its web. Because the ant could not breathe, it died quickly.

In autumn, the fruits are harvested. There are many fruits that I love to eat, so autumn is also a wonderful season.

Winter is also my favorite season. You can build snowmen, have snowball fights, and watch! How much fun those children had!

This year is really happy and joyful!

This is my life in school!

The United States

Tian Jincheng

The United States has many beautiful places, let me tell you.

I traveled there, and the tour guide told us that there is a tree that can live up to 70 million years. It is still alive today, and there are also some animals that grow solely on the plants in the desert. Yes, there are many plants, almost as many as a very, very large pasture, which should be thirty kilometers long. This is all found in "Death Valley". I also found some animals raised by rich people and living in villas.

I also went to the Grand Canyon. At that time, I met Sister Wang Xing. We arrived at the Grand Canyon, ah! I thought it was a big mountain, but it turned out to be just a small mountain.

We came to another mountain, I don’t know the name. It is very tall, more than three times the size of the school building, and the Grand Canyon West is three to four times the size of the Grand Canyon.

Later we arrived at the Grand Canyon West. The Grand Canyon was too high and there were strong winds. I was too timid to stand next to it, so I took pictures with my dad. Later we had dinner on the mountain again. Then go see the "Glass Bridge". There were also people who could go there by helicopter, but I didn’t go because it was too expensive, so I didn’t go.

This is the process of my four-day trip.

Comment: The author traveled to the United States and wrote about what he saw and heard. "Traveling thousands of miles, reading thousands of books", the author has gained a lot of experience during travel, so he can write beautiful articles full of true feelings.

Lushun Snake House

Gao Jianguo

Today, we are going to Lushun Snake House.

I was so happy that I wanted to go right away, but I hadn’t had breakfast yet.

After breakfast, we set off and arrived soon. We bought tickets immediately and went in after buying the tickets.

When I first entered, I saw that the scenery here is very good, with water and trees, which is very beautiful.

The most attractive thing is the cute baby snakes. One baby snake has the same posture as the other. Look at this one, lying there lazily; look at that one, motionless.

In the cave there are the most terrifying and strange animals. There are many lizards in the cave in front of us. It is a lizard cave. I found a two-headed turtle in a lizard cave. This turtle has two heads and looks like a monster.

We went to the snake area again. More than a dozen snakes were infected with the city-dwelling disease, but their venom was poisonous. Some can even poison people's eyes.

Finally, I returned to the development area. To this day, I still tell my classmates about the snake house I went to.

Comments: The exercise truly describes the scenery "I" saw in the snake house. When writing the posture of the snake, I can imitate the writing method of the text. This learning method is very good!

The scenery of Xinghai people’s home

Ye Zhixin

Our Xinghai people’s community has many flowers, grass and trees, like many happy elves.

There are maple trees, sycamore trees, ginkgo trees...

In autumn, some of the elves on the maple trees are green and some are red. They are happy and happy, and the maple leaves are dancing on the branches of the mother maple tree. Now, they are happily falling to the ground one by one, jumping happily. It seems to say: "We don't need our mother now, we are free." Look! How happy they are!

The elves on the branches of the ginkgo tree are also very happy. Fanning a small fan on the branch of the ginkgo tree, it seems to be blowing the wind to the ginkgo tree! The elves are playing happily on the branches of the ginkgo tree. How free they are!

The child of the mother of the sycamore tree is so like a maple leaf. The little girls sang and danced on the branches of the mother phoenix tree, like a group of dancers singing and dancing! Singing a nice song!

They must be very happy.

Comment: Xi Jinping used anthropomorphic writing to write about the autumn scenery of Xinghai people, and wrote down his own observations, experiences and feelings. This writing habit is very good!

The hill beside our house

Yu Haifei

The hill beside our house looks like a small green velvet ball from a distance. On the way to the top of the mountain, a few shiny black squirrels will occasionally appear. It is about twenty centimeters long, and its tail accounts for half of its body.

I also saw a very strange tree on the road. It also had one root, but when it reached the top, it split into two.

When you reach the top of the mountain, look east and you will see the endless sea passing by a community. Looking west again, you will see hills one after another. I also called to the east.

There are also various kinds of trees on the mountain, such as willows, pine trees, locust trees...

This mountain also has a nice name, called "Etherothers".

There is also a place to play chess at the foot of the mountain. There are chess, backgammon, and go...

I really like "Eternal Oath"!

Comments: The exercise uses many good words and sentences accumulated in the Chinese class, and vividly describes the characteristics of the plants and animals on the hill. The level of the exercise has been greatly improved.

My hometown

Wang Yuwen

My hometown is in Jinzhou.

In spring, a jujube tree in our hometown is covered with small green leaves. The willow tree wakes up in the call of the spring breeze. The braid of the willow tree is blown by the wind, and the braid flutters with the wind.

In summer, my brother and I catch dragonflies outside the door. Once, he and I accidentally bumped into each other while catching dragonflies, but we didn't catch the dragonfly. In the morning, my uncle and I took a bottle and a big cake to the small river to go fishing. The uncle opened the bottle, we put the big cake in the bottle, and then threw the bottle into the water. After a while, there were seven or eight small fish in the bottle. My brother and I were very happy. Even the small fish smelled the smell and rushed away. Coming.

In autumn, the leaves all fell to the ground, and my brother and I collected them one after another.

In winter, we went to the small river again to cut open the ice, and then water flowed out of it. The water level became lower and lower. After a while, the water dried up, and we blocked it. When it snows, we build snowmen and have snowball fights.

This is our hometown.

Comment: The exercise describes the scenery, people and things in my hometown. The author's language is more fluent, his narrative ability is stronger, and he is better at using words. When writing essays, he must be good at writing his own thoughts and feelings. He has made great progress in this aspect.

The maple trees on our campus

Guo Sixian

There are all kinds of strange trees on our campus, and the most common tree is of course the maple tree. I used to think about why our campus has the most maple trees? Later, I suddenly learned that we are students of Maple Leaf Elementary School, and of course we are countless "Maple Leafs"!

In spring, the children of the maple tree turn green and have a very special shape. They look like countless small flames!

In summer, we were happily playing downstairs and found that the maple leaves were looking at us with their little eyes. We saw that the little maple leaves had changed color and turned red! I used a good word - booming.

What’s even more interesting is that in autumn, the students are happily playing under the maple trees, some skipping rope, some playing hide-and-seek, some playing football, and some telling stories and jokes... But we But I didn’t see the maple leaves quietly falling from the tree mother’s body!

I love maple trees.

Comment: The author chose the material very well. He wrote about the maple leaves that he often sees in his life, and his understanding of the unique meaning of the maple leaves in Maple Leaf School. The language is smooth and fluent. It is a masterpiece!

Winter in my hometown

Lv Guihao

My hometown is a world of ice lanterns in winter. Every winter, an ice lantern festival is held in my hometown.

You will definitely slip as soon as you enter the door. After you slip, you will see all kinds of ice lanterns. The lights are colorful and dazzling from a distance. Many foreigners are playing around. While taking photos. There is a 40-meter-long large slide in the Ice Lantern Corridor with light boxes inside. Isn’t it exciting?

Once, I couldn’t wait to go up. I shivered a little when I touched the ice, but I gradually adapted to it. I came to a curve, and it was spinning around like a big disk. After I get down, I go to the hothouse to warm up.

This winter, the Universiade Winter Games were held in Harbin. In order to welcome guests and friends from all over the world, my hometown has built many new ice and snow stadiums. Don’t you want to travel to Harbin?

Comment: The essay writes about the winter in my hometown that the author deeply loves, and also writes about the ice lanterns in my hometown. I can grasp the characteristics of the scenery and write, and my composition level has been greatly improved!

Flowers in the classroom

Ni Yanzi

There are several pots of flowers in our classroom, they are Chlorophytum, odd flower, and pothos.

This morning, Teacher Liu fattened the flowers. In order to have more flowers, Teacher Liu cut a pot of flowers and pressed some flowers into the vase.

Maybe the flower in the pot that the teacher can cut is still crying, right? I think it must have been very long before, but now there is only one braid left.

Chlorophytum said proudly: "I just cut off one or two hairs, why are you so stingy?"

"I will make people laugh if I don't have braids."

The director opened the door and said: "Your class is going to become a botanical garden." I think the small flowerpot and the cut flower must have laughed, and Teacher Liu also laughed.

Although there are no braids, it still smells good.

The teacher gave the flowers green leaf fertilizer. I said, why are the leaves so green? It turns out that I eat green leafy fertilizer.

With green plants and nature, we can have a fresh feeling.

Comment: The author's composition level has been greatly improved, the language is vivid, imaginative, and has a sense of children's life.

Fujiazhuang

Wuyunqiqige

Fujiazhuang is right next to my house and is my favorite place.

Every summer vacation, my father and I go to Fujiazhuang every day. As soon as I walked to the beach, a huge wave rushed towards me, like little babies who were tired of playing and went to the beach to find their mother. Sometimes, Langhua's temper gets a little grumpy. The last time I went into the water, a wave knocked me back to the beach. I told the wave to be obedient, and it seemed angry. Then, another wave rushed at me, as if to say: "You haven't paid me the money to play with me yet! I'm doing this for your own good. Swimmer hits the beach. "I can't help it, that's probably what it does. I swam in and it seemed to be angry again. "You are still a child. It is too dangerous to swim in. Go back quickly!" Then another wave knocked me back to the beach. I had to play with the sand at the beach, but something seemed wrong with it. When I was about to pile the sand into a mountain, a huge wave washed away the mountain I had built. I can't stand it anymore, but as soon as I talk about it, it makes waves. Every time I fell down, I was covered in sand.

Although it is like this, it makes my life full of fun.

Comment: The exercise describes the unique scenery of Fujiazhuang, Dalian, and uses personification to let Langhua have a dialogue with "I" during the game. It not only writes Langhua's emotional changes, but also writes It made me happy and very vivid.

Our backyard

Liu Mei

One day, I went to the backyard to play. There were many fun things there. Because it was winter, all the insects Hibernated.

When I got to the backyard, I found something sticky and disgusting like a spider web between two trees. I thought it was a spider web at first, but the more I looked at it, the less it looked like it. Later, I couldn’t help but ask the science teacher, and the teacher smiled and said, “That’s the silk spun by a caterpillar.”

"The silk spun by a caterpillar?" I was very curious because I had never seen the silk spun by a caterpillar before. The caterpillar's silk was a disgusting solid, the same shape as a marshmallow.

Later, I found some white snowflakes floating in the sky. After a while, the ground was covered with a thin quilt, and after a while, the ground was covered with thick blankets.

After a while, class started. I walked back to the classroom from the snow-covered backyard. The snow is as soft as a quilt.

Comment: The scenery in my backyard was written with true feelings, especially the section "The silk spun by the caterpillar". It wrote the children's unique observations and experiences. It was very successful!

Our campus

Weng Qiaoyang

Our campus is colorful.

There are many flowers, plants, and trees in the school, such as maple trees. The maple leaves on them are like our chubby little hands.

There are many trees. Among them, my favorite is the locust tree that looks like the branches of a willow tree. The branches hanging down really look like our little girl’s braids!

Look! How much our campus looks like a botanical garden!

Our dormitory looks beautiful from a distance!

In spring, sister Xiaocao became green and beautiful. Brother Liushu also wanted to become beautiful, so he said to Grandma Feng: "Grandma Feng, cut my hair quickly!" Grandma nodded and said, "Okay!" With a click, Brother Xiao Liushu said happily, "It's finished." Grandma Feng also disappeared.

Our campus is as beautiful as heaven!

Comments: I have made great progress in my practice. I used vivid metaphors to describe the characteristics of maple leaves and locust trees. The dialogue between the willow tree and the wind is also very interesting, and the writing is childish and innocent.

Four Seasons on Campus

Huang Tianlin

Early in the morning, I arrived at the campus and saw the spring flowers blooming. Suddenly a breeze blew by, ah! It smells so good! This is cherry blossom.

I was walking on the playground and saw the flowers blooming, as if they were competing for beauty!

Oh, it’s spring! The days go by so fast.

Summer is here again, and the boys are playing football on the playground. They are so hot that they take off their clothes.

The cicada on the tree shouted "Cicada, cicada", as if cheering for the team. Suddenly a gust of wind blew, and some of the small flowers and grass swayed to the left and some to the right, as if they were cheering for the team.

Autumn, with its clear and crisp air, has arrived. The butterflies are tired of flying and are resting at home. But there are still some butterflies, which are fallen leaves.

There are red maple leaves on the maple trees, which are as red as the torches of the Olympic flame.

Snowflakes are flying in the winter, covering the earth with a thick, snow-white quilt.

I love the beautiful campus.

Comment: The campus you wrote is both beautiful and full of vitality. Being able to describe the cicadas and maple trees in their own words not only describes the characteristics of the scenery but also reflects the vitality of the campus. Rich imagination.

Beautiful little pond

Hou Xiaoyu

There is a small pond downstairs in our house.

The small pond is very deep and wide, about four or five meters wide and two or three meters deep. There are also small fish and frogs there, and many people go there to play. When some people go there, they bring some snacks for the little fish to eat. If they go up there, there will be a dolphin show. There is only one dolphin there. Some people bring a small rubber ball and throw it down. It can push it with its nose, and then push it with all its strength, and the ball will come up again. Sometimes, it will sing and applaud... If it performs well, the coach will give it two fish. Downstairs of my house Isn't the little pond fun?

There are all kinds of marine animals in the small pond downstairs of my house. I like small ponds.

Comment: The exercise describes the appearance of a beautiful small pond and the dolphin show there, and uses anthropomorphic writing to make it vivid and vivid! It would be better if it was more novel!

The four seasons on campus

Zhang Yingyue

The four seasons on campus are beautiful all year round.

In spring, new green leaves grow on the branches, and some small wild flowers bloom with the help of raindrops, forming a beautiful campus.

In summer, the campus is extremely hot. The scorching sun hung in the blue sky. Some students were playing games under the trees and some were playing football on the playground.

In autumn, there are many fallen leaves falling on the ground. The leaves that have just fallen are like a group of yellow butterflies rushing home.

In winter, snowflakes are floating everywhere, like a group of little angels.

This is the four seasons of the year on campus. Aren’t the four seasons of the campus beautiful?

Comments: The exercise describes the four seasons of the campus and the characteristics of each season. The language is fluent and vivid. It would be better if it were written more carefully!

Our classroom

Liang Fangyuan

Our classroom is filled with green plants.

They each have their own appearance, for example, some are like curtains, some are like dense hair, and some are like moss. My favorite flower is the "American Chlorophytum". Its green leaves and fiery red flowers form a beautiful "flower", which reminds me of a potted flower in my home, which also has red flowers, but it Not a spider plant.

After seeing so many flowers, I couldn’t help but call the classroom “Flower Classroom”!

I suddenly felt like I was a beautiful flower. The breeze blew by my side, and I danced gracefully. Not only me, but all the flowers in the classroom were dancing, like a flower. Like a beautiful girl. When the wind passed, I stopped dancing and stood there quietly, enjoying the warmth that Uncle Sun brought to me.

After a while, I woke up. I was not a flower, I was looking at flowers!

Comment: The exercise describes the environment of our classroom, mainly the flowers in the classroom. It has detailed observation and rich imagination, and it is very well written!

School

Jia Yi

Our school has beautiful scenery all year round, and many parents send their children here.

The school is colorful in the spring. Winter jasmine and morning glory are in full bloom, one after another. The bright yellow winter jasmine is the same color as bananas, and the purple morning glory is like a small trumpet.

In summer, the weather is very hot. We play games in the sun. Some play football; some play tennis; some play with sports equipment; and some walk in circles. Ants in summer are the most interesting. Huang Zhirui and Huang Tianlin each caught an ant and competed to see whose ant could climb higher. Huang Zhirui won, but Huang Tianlin lost because his ant fell to the ground and died.

In autumn, the maple leaves are red and yellow, and they make a clicking sound when stepped on. It is so fun.

In winter, snowflakes were flying in the air. I wanted to eat snow, but ended up drinking a lot of cool wind. In the winter we made snowmen and had snowball fights, and had so much fun!

Our campus is beautiful! Do you also want to come to school here?

Comment: Your composition is very wonderful. You consciously use various writing methods in the article, and the wording is very subtle, such as "clicking sound" and "a flower-like gesture". The description of the scene incorporates his own feelings, such as "many parents sent their children here", "drank a lot of cool breeze", etc.