Comments on spring outing composition

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Comments on spring outing compositions 1

"Visit to Wuzhen"

Content: Beginning The introduction is concise and layered, and the description of Wuzhen's people and environment also captures its characteristics. The last paragraph is very good, lively, interesting and attractive.

Overall comments: There are many students who travel during the summer vacation, and there are also many who write travel notes. This article should be considered more distinctive. The young author has a good ability to summarize things, and he can always capture the characteristics to describe, making readers interested in reading. I hope you will continue to write better works!

"The First Day of Traveling to West Lake"

Content: The writing method at the beginning is more like a diary than a composition. The beginning of your essay is very important and it is recommended not to be so casual.

Overall comments: This is a travel note. The author uses a more vivid writing style to describe the experience of visiting the scenic spots in West Lake. There is a lot of interest in the work and it is easy to read. However, travel notes are not simply narrated in sequence, which can easily turn them into a running account. The young author can focus on the description of "Three Pools Reflecting the Moon" in the composition, and weaken the description of other parts, so as to make the article clear.

"Travel to Xianlin University Town"

Content: The word "Giao" is used well, which not only conforms to the characteristics of the red scarf, but also shows the relaxed and happy mood of the students. The language in this paragraph is concise, clear and meaningful. Briefly describing the gains from the second stage of the study journey, the young author quickly applied the scientific vocabulary he learned into his composition, and also imagined the development of science, which is enough to show his attitude of loving science. The young author showed his own observation and understanding of the library, and benefited a lot from the big brothers and sisters, which is very good!

Overall comments: The whole article reads very smoothly, according to the It describes three places in chronological order: "Biological Museum", "Science Museum" and "Library", and briefly explains the knowledge and insights I have learned. It is really amazing! The article has a smooth tone and clear structure. It is not difficult for us to see that Xiao The author has meticulous ideas and good language control skills. Although the article is not long, I believe that the author has experienced a wonderful and profound trip to Xianlin University Town! I also hope that the author can explore more unique insights in life!

"Qingdao Beach" "Travel"

Content: The content describes the calm and turbulent sea. The author compared the sea to a "blue gem" and a "runaway wild horse" respectively, which is more appropriate.

Overall comments: The article describes the author's experience of going to Qingdao to see the sea. The writing is fluent, the imagination is rich, the description is vivid, and the love for the sea is revealed between the lines. In some places (such as the chat with my mother on the road, how to play with sand, etc.) it would be better to be more specific.

"Travel Notes to Caishiji"

Content:

The opening chapter explains the time, place, characters and events, allowing readers to have an idea of ??the content of this article. Rough grasp.

The sentence "Don't get too excited" is a bit colloquial. It is recommended to make changes.

"Only Seeing the Yangtze River Skyline" expresses the young author's surging mood facing the rolling Yangtze River water. It is expressed through poetry and shows the young author's daily reading accumulation.

It can be seen that the young author is a cheerful and very active "little tour guide".

The order of the underlined sentences can be rearranged to make it more coherent: "The great romantic poet Li Bai once recited poetry here many times, leaving many unfortunate chapters."

The use of idioms is very appropriate, which shows the author’s daily accumulation.

Use poetry to fully express your excitement of climbing high and overlooking the distance. He spoke directly from his heart and expressed his unforgettable feelings about this trip to Caishiji.

Overall comments:

The article systematically describes the experience of a one-day trip to Caishiji, showing the nostalgia and unforgettable feeling in the heart of the young author.

According to the order of the tour, the author describes the Qifu, Taibai Tower, Sanyuan Cave, Guangji Temple and other landscapes in turn, highlighting the characteristics of different landscapes, and revealing the novel feelings about the scenery and experiences along the way.

It is worth mentioning that it is really rare for a young author to use multiple lines of poetry to express his inner feelings. I hope you can continue to work hard! Comments on Spring Outing Composition 2

1. The spring described in the writing is rich and beautiful: red flowers, green grass, green mountains, blue sky...

2. The quiet picture is full of vitality and vitality. The beauty of nature has both stillness and movement - they are all beautiful. What if there is no movement? So you think of it again.

3. When describing the scenery, write down your own experience and express your inner feelings.

For example, the surprise when you find the first grass sprouting, the excitement when you see the swallows nesting under the eaves of your house, the admiration when you smell the fragrance of peach blossoms, the joy when you hear the teacher announcing spring outings... these They are all inner feelings. While describing the scenery, appropriately expressing inner feelings and even associations will make the work more vivid and real, and will also move others.

4. Write down all the beautiful things about spring that you see, hear, smell, and feel into your exercises, so that your exercises will be as vivid and beautiful as spring!

5. Kite flying is children’s favorite activity, and the fun is self-evident. Through detailed description, the colorful flying scenes of kites in the sky are shown.

6. Reading your exercises, let us see how lovely and crystal-clear a childlike innocence is.

7. Grasp the different characteristics of spring grass, trees, flowers, etc., and follow the order of "" to depict the vibrant scene of spring and reflect your sincere joy.

8. Write out the characteristics and new ideas. Beautiful scenery - natural beauty; beautiful people - lovely, innocent and flawless beauty.

9. Write scenes to capture the characteristics of the scenery, describe the blending of scenes, from far to near, from surface to point, handle it in an orderly manner, and the written articles are even more organized, and the scenes have different shapes and colors. , capturing the shape characteristics.

10. This passage has a general description and a specific description, some dynamic and some static, and it describes the cuteness of "". I took care of everything before and after the composition, observed carefully, and even wrote down my own feelings about it.

Comments on Spring Outing Composition 3

1. The opening is concise, concise and orderly; the key description... leaves a deep impression on people

2. The beginning is quite innovative with the scene as a metaphor for emotion. ;The beginning of a flashback, rendering the artistic conception

3. Going straight to the theme at the beginning is also a way of writing

4. The beginning is very lively. The use of anthropomorphic techniques makes the beginning appear lively,

5. Begin with a rhetorical question to attract readers

6. Go straight to the topic at the beginning and make it clear at a glance

7. Point out the topic at the beginning and use words that are very attractive

< p> 8. The description of the scene and atmosphere adds a lot of color to the article;

9. ... briefly describe the wonderful places; combine points and aspects

10. Briefly introduce the situation and make a natural transition Go to the next paragraph;

11. Situation description arouses suspense;

12. Make full use of language, action, and psychological description to make things concrete and vivid

13 , briefly describe the antecedents and foreshadowing

14. You can add dialogue or some psychological description to this part

15. It is more appropriate to change... to...

16. A natural connection between the past and the following, and the detailed description highlights the character's quality, which is touching

17. The narrative is interspersed with descriptions of scenes to judge people with one's own feelings and empathize with others

18. Personification of language makes the article more interesting Appears lively

19. The description of the appearance is very interesting, highlighting that... the lovely introduction incorporates his own thoughts and is contagious

20. Uses a list of numbers and examples. The method is very vivid

21. The transition is natural and each paragraph is explained clearly

22. This part refers to the examples in the text. The language is too flat. It can be modified appropriately to make the language more clear. Vivid

23. Use metaphors, personification and other rhetorical techniques to vividly describe the beauty of... This part can also be expanded to write about seeing the big from the small, expressing...

24. Metaphorical sentences It is well used and combined with ancient poems for association, which is full of charm

25. ... and ... form a sharp contrast, highlighting...

26. It is impressive that primary school students can have such an experience

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27. The ending is a bit sudden and exaggerated

28. The ending is concise and touching

29. The ending is equally interesting

30. The ending Echoing the beginning, the structure is complete

31. The scenery creates emotions, and the ending is natural

32. The metaphorical image is appropriate and the wonderful ending is the finishing touch

33 , the ending seems to be unfinished, it should be able to echo the beginning, observe carefully, and describe vividly

34. The ending echoes the title of the article and points out the center

35. The beginning of the article is simple and appropriate. The description of the environment is used to set off the mood of the characters. It is very artistic and complex but not chaotic. It can be detailed and appropriate, with the focus highlighted and the ending just right to highlight the center. The language is simple but profound and thought-provoking

36. Begin with feelings. Ending with feelings makes the article coherent and coherent, and at the same time makes the theme of the article loop over and over again, which is highly contagious

37. With full passion, it describes..., the beginning is concise and to the point, and the key points are Prominent, appropriately detailed, and specific in content

38. The article conveys the atmosphere of... fully and appropriately, and depicts the key points of the article in a delicate and vivid manner. The intention is high and admirable

< p> 39. ... is realistic and contains simple but profound philosophy. It is inspiring and exciting to read.

40. ... the close-ups are unique and full of interest. The full text is full of childlike innocence and childishness, making it twice as enjoyable to read. Feeling cordial