A composition about beautiful weather

Xie zai Qing long vocational school

At noon today, I wanted to go out, but as soon as I opened the door, the heat wave hit my face. Looking at the burning sun, I flinched. Sitting anxiously in front of the electric fan, cursing the sultry weather.

Suddenly, dark clouds appeared in the sky, one piece, two pieces … bigger and bigger, more and more. They gathered in the air, as if driven by giants. The strong sunlight is blocked, ah,

It is going to rain!

Just then, with the sound of "Didi Dada", scattered raindrops fell. Raindrops fell on the mud, splashing clouds of dust; Falling on the concrete floor, it seems that small flowers suddenly bloom on the concrete floor. Before anyone could see it clearly, the sound of "whoosh whoosh whoosh ..." followed, just like a huge sprinkler suddenly opened in the sky, and dense rain came. The "blooming flowers" on the concrete floor disappeared instantly. After a while, the ground was flooded. Raindrops hit the stagnant water, splashing one after another. I remember that Mr. Lao She compared rain and splashing water to arrows, which are very similar. It's raining harder and harder, with rain curtains hanging on the eaves, and thick rain falls to the ground, splashing more arrows. Looking around, there are many raindrops and jumping arrows everywhere.

Rain hits the leaves and "poops" straight; Hit the roof and make a "da da" sound. Suddenly, a flash of lightning flashed, followed by deafening thunder, boom, boom ... like a huge roller, it rolled and gradually rolled away. The sound has not completely disappeared, and with a bang, another big thunder exploded ... high voice, low voice, long voice and short voice, mixed together, as if accompanied by heavy rain.

While enjoying the rain scene, the rain stopped. As if suddenly received an order to retreat, the wind stopped and the thunder disappeared. It's a sunny day, but it's getting cooler and cooler. At this time, although the sun was shining brightly in the sky, I still felt the cool breeze blowing gently, and the fragrance of the soil was fragrant and refreshing.

I rolled out my bike and took a gasp. I thought to myself, what a timely rain, what a beautiful rain!

(selected from junior high school students' compositions)

The success of commenting and guiding this composition stems from successful observation. The observation of this composition is very distinctive. The little author's observation is not only to use his eyes, but also to mobilize his ears, nose, skin and brain to see clearly, carefully, completely and clearly. The little author also noticed what was observed in the comparison. The sparse rain at the beginning was compared with the dense rain later, and the difference between heavy rain spots hitting mud and cement was compared. Pay attention to the different sounds of rain hitting leaves and roofs, and pay attention to the difference between distant thunder and nearby thunder ... More importantly, the little author gave full play to the imagination and association function of the brain in observation, otherwise there would be no writing of "(clouds) gathering in the air in a hurry, as if driven away by giants", and there would be no "like a huge sprinkler suddenly opening in the sky, dense rain falling down. (Thunder rumbling, rumbling) There will be no description ... just like a huge roller, it will roll away gradually "... How can a young author write such a good composition without such observation?