The weather in Urqihan town

First, be realistic from multiple angles to avoid emptiness.

1, mobilize a variety of senses and use artistic synaesthesia.

(1), using various senses:

In the article "Rain makes me intoxicated"

"The rain fell on the ground and" opened "into beautiful flowers. It's beautiful. The rain falling on the leaves forms small water droplets, which fly and slide on the leaves. After the rain washed away, the leaves looked greener, as if "green" was dripping in Ye Zhi. (visual)

Shh, close your eyes and listen to the rain! It was an angel singing, singing melodiously, and Lianxin danced with it. Sincerely accept the blessing of the rain! (Listening)

Gee, a beautiful earthy smell enters the body with breathing and melts in the heart. Very comfortable. The body seems to be floating in the fragrance, floating into the sky and swimming in the galaxy. "(smell) (feeling)

(2) Using artistic synaesthesia

In Moonlight on the Lotus Pond

"The breeze blew and sent a faint fragrance, like a faint song on a distant building." Write the sense of smell by hearing.

2. Combination of front and side.

Example: "It was a spring morning in 1988, and I was tired of writing. I turn on the TV to relax. Hey, great, the famous composer Xu Peidong is talking about songwriting! His charming phrase "the cow bell shakes the spring" has shaken me back to the spring of my childhood hometown several times; Cow bells jingle in the green fields, making people linger. This time, we want to hear his experience. But-suddenly, a red light flashed before my eyes-it was a group of girls wearing Chili peppers, and a gust of wind came at me on the TV screen. This robot can frighten Xu Peidong's voice and smile. (With the musical charm of composer Xu Peidong as a foreshadowing, the beautiful and charming dance of red pepper girl is set off.)

Their headscarves are red, their clothes are red, their sweatpants are red, and even their shoes and socks are red. This made me feel elated by the red clothes of the new wives who just got off the sedan chair as early as childhood, and I was happy again. (The front says the dazzling beauty of the girls)

3, environmental contrast, scene rendering

Example: The sound of "pa-"in Shousui woke me up gently, and I opened my eyes hard. In the middle of the room, under a big air-dried stump, a red fireball was burning, with no flame or smoke.

Poof-the earthen pot by the fire let out a roar, like a herd of horses running wildly; Boiling water splashed on the ashes, and rolling hot air, white smoke and ashes rolled onto the roof. "

After several loud noises, there was "crash, crash, crash, crash, crash, crash, crash, crash, crash, crash, crash, crash, crash. The strong smell of gunpowder in the air, we ran and jumped to pick up those unexploded firecrackers and went door to door to pay New Year greetings. The description of the environment highlights the joy of the New Year.

4. The combination of reality and reality

There are many legends about him!

It is said that you are happy when you see the mountain, and you are worried when you are far away from it. Going out of the mountain is like losing your soul. As soon as you enter the mountain, you can talk to rocks, plants and flowers.

He said that he could understand the words of birds and beasts, birds would make him happy, goats would talk to him, rabbits would sleep with him, and even blind bears would bow their heads when they saw him!

It is said that one year there was a mountain fire, and he pounced hard. He himself became a fireman, still struggling to put out the fire, just like a Shan Yu pouring down, dousing the mountain fire and turning him into a water fighter. As soon as he touched his chin, his beard disappeared and he smiled. "Hey, ten years younger again!" " "

5. Time and space change writing

Example: In Zong Pu's February Orchid, I wrote my childhood in February Orchid by the stream next to Tsinghua's house, in February Orchid behind the hill where Snow's tomb is located, and in February Orchid near my home. (Spatial transformation)

"Because of illness, because of laziness, I often stay home for a few days. Flowers bloom and fall all spring, and come and go in a hurry, some of them can't be seen. However, I always see February orchid quietly open there, as if waiting at any time, asking, "Are you better? "

Take a walk in the garden after another minor illness. Suddenly I feel my eyes are green, and I am ready to cover my heat. When I went to the territory of February Orchid, there were no flowers, only green was directly connected to the pine wall. It seems that there used to be a big color painting, but now it has been pulled over, rolled up and placed somewhere, waiting for the next year. (Time variation)

5. Weather changes

If you write about willows, willows in rainy days and willows in sunny days, you will show the charm of willows more comprehensively.

6. Point-surface combination

An argument

The classroom in Class 3 (2) is really lively, and you can hear the chirping sound from a distance. I am a bystander. As soon as I heard some noise there, I ran straight in.

Now, Class 3 (2) has become a "daughter country", and all the girls in the class are here. Some sit in their own seats, and some simply sit on the table, occupying favorable terrain, which is really a bit overwhelming. What are they talking about? It turns out that the mid-term exam results have been announced, and all the students in the class before 10 are boys, but only "talented woman" Liu Tingting ranks in 1 1, which is a disaster. Boys are in high spirits and girls are in low spirits.

Li Mei, with a thin face, muttered, "When I was in primary school, the girls in our class were better than the boys, but not in middle school." My brain is getting more and more stupid and my grades are getting worse; Boys improve step by step, and we retreat step by step. Too bad I'm not a man. Hey! "She said, and sighed deeply.

Zhang Wei, the monitor with clear articulation and loud voice, disagreed with her and said, "The reason why we are inferior to boys is not that we are stupid, but that we don't work hard. We always want to dress up, and our eyes are devoted to seeing other people's new clothes. Really worthless! "

Lily, who loves to dress up, doesn't like to hear: "Can you dress in rags without buying new clothes?" Hey! "Say that finish, she shrugged her nose and twisted her ass, making everyone laugh.

7. Use imagination and association

The scene of the competition on Pingba is the most magnificent, and Autumn Soldiers in the Battlefield may have that style. No, the lineup is similar, not exciting enough. This is the scene of a grand festival. Think about it, heaven and earth are workshops, deep valleys are workshops, and mountains are memorial archways. Where in the world do textile mills have such a large scale? You see, the neat spinning wheel ranks are full of energetic competitors. At the command, hundreds of cars roared, and if nothing else, the buzz alone made the fleet take off at the airport. Where is the game, it is that Wan will complete a combat mission in * * * *. Remember the spinning wheel?

8. Use four typical methods to describe people.

I don't think he will listen to me, otherwise how could he be so mechanical and not even look at me from beginning to end! So, I feel a kind of sadness. (psychological)

He looked at me quietly, his eyes full of surprise, doubt and anxiety. His lips opened several times, but not a word slipped from his lips. His Adam's apple shook a few times and finally squeezed out a sentence: "Why don't you talk?" Why don't you talk about school? Why don't you talk about Yao Ming and Alec Su? "(Expression and Action Language) is selected from" Know You "

9, dynamic and static combination

The willows in the street are too lazy to move and roll on the branches like they are sick. (static). There are some monotonous jingles in the copper and iron shop, which makes people anxious. (mobile)

10, make it smaller.

For example, the topic of "beginning" is very big, and it should be minimized. At the beginning of a certain aspect, such as being brave, confident, strong and considerate of your parents, if you start writing something that causes you to change, you will generally stop writing and become empty.

Second, how to make the language vivid

A good article is not only profound in artistic conception, but also exquisite in language and rich in literary talent, which makes people never tire of reading it. And some articles, although they have good ideas and ideas, can't give people a straightforward sense of image because of their tasteless language, and it is difficult for them to become masterpieces that others like to read. Therefore, improving our language expression ability is very important to improve the readability of the article. How can we make the language vivid? May wish to start from the following aspects.

1, replace abstract account with image description.

Please compare the following two sentences.

(1) After the busy work, the girl began to feel homesick.

(2) After busy work, girls like to climb to the top floor alone and read the strict array and sunset facing home. (Yan Wenjing, "Looking for You")

Although both sentences are expressions of "the girl is homesick" (1), they only explain that "homesickness" is abstract and vague.

Sentence (2) expresses "homesickness" through the concrete image of a girl "climbing to the top floor alone and reading the strict array and sunset facing home", and such "homesickness" can be felt concretely. In particular, the image of "array, sunset" contains a feeling of loneliness and desolation, which reminds people of poems such as "I can finally send my messenger, geese, to Luoyang" and "it only takes a few dusk to ruin their lives", so it gives people a particularly deep impression. ? Usually, there are many similar examples in our spoken English. For example, if a person is "greedy", we use "eat what is in the bowl and see what is in the pot" to express that a person has no blood, and "three awls can't bleed" and so on, all of which are images rather than abstract examples. It is an important aspect to replace abstraction with images and choose rhetoric methods appropriately. Please look at the following example:

(3) The pavilion stands on a prominent corner of the rock, empty up and down, just like a goshawk spreading its wings in the sky. (Zhu Ziqing, "Green")

(4) The sparkling green of Meiyu River attracts us. (same as above)

It takes only four minutes for an English horse to run around Mars Square. Yesterday, it ran around Miss George for five minutes. (France? Morua's Three Dumas)

Through figurative metaphor, the shape and momentum of the pavilion are in front of us. Use "attraction" instead of "attraction" to personify the sparkling green of Meiyu pool and make abstract things come alive. Through exaggeration, Miss George's body image is firmly imprinted on the reader's mind. The clever use of rhetoric can highlight the main features of things, turn abstraction into concrete, turn vagueness into clarity, and make things that are difficult to write appear in front of us, which is very helpful to enhance the vividness of language.

2. Use words accurately and try to be vivid.

To achieve vivid results with accurate words, first of all, the French novelist Flaubert said: "No matter what we describe, there is only one noun to express it;" To give it movement, there is only one verb; Only one adjective can get its nature. "In writing, only by finding the word" one "can we be accurate and vivid. In Lu Xun's short story "Medicine", when Hua Laoshuan and his wife were ready to buy human blood steamed bread, the author wrote: "Aunt Hua took out a bag of foreign money under the pillow and hid it for a long time, and gave it to Lao Shuan ..." The good use of the word "Dao" shows that Aunt Hua cherishes this bag of foreign money. This hard-earned money is hard-won, so it is necessary to keep it strictly. If "Tao" is replaced by "take" or "touch", it means a far cry from it.

Look at the following sentence again: "The fire is getting bigger and bigger, smoke permeates the whole room, and red flames lick the floor." Among them, "flame tongue" is more accurate and vivid than "flame" or "flame". A word "lick" more vividly depicts the picture of the flame burning the floor, giving people a vivid and concrete feeling.

In addition to accuracy, we should make the language vivid, but also pay attention to turning static into dynamic, turning intangible into tangible, and making the language alive.

"Spring Garden can't be closed, and an apricot is out of the wall." There are no special action words, but we think it is very vivid, because the author writes intangible inanimate things into tangible living things, giving people a vivid and vivid effect.

Avoiding repetition and monotony of words is also a way to achieve vivid results. Please read an article describing festival fireworks:

"In a flash, a hundred flowers blossom over the square, some flying like geese, some splashing like steel flowers, and some rippling like wheat ears. This dazzling scene is like a thousand proud peacocks. There is no difference between these verbs, such as "Ru", "Xiang" and "Xiang", but the author's varied use here makes the words in the article varied, avoiding monotony and enhancing the vividness of the article.

3. Vivid methods.

This way of writing is to write out the sounds of nature, the shapes and colors of objects in detail, giving people an immersive feeling. Dostoevsky gave an example. He said, "A small silver ring fell to the ground." This sentence is not good enough. It should be written as "a small silver circle rolled down from the table and danced on the ground." (Quoted from Qin Mu's Yu Lin Cai Ying) This is a vivid picture; Liu wrote about Qutang Gorge in the Three Gorges of the Yangtze River, mainly using this technique: "... Qutang Gorge is still surging, the waves are thunderous, and countless eddies are formed on the river. The ship rushed through the whirlpool and only heard the sound of water. " "... the dark clouds suddenly disappeared, and there was a blue sky at the top of the canyon, with a few small golden clouds floating, and a ray of sunshine fell on the cliff on the left like lightning. "Through vivid techniques, the author tries his best to describe the precipitousness of the Three Gorges Mountain and the fierceness of the water, which makes people immersive, thrilling and gives people a real feeling.

Step 4 use argot

The argot here is somewhat similar to rhetoric taboo or graceful song, and is also somewhat similar to a riddle with a clear answer. For example, we don't say "it's September", but "when the chrysanthemums are in bloom"; Don't say "the sun is going down", say "the sun is kissing the mountain in the west"; Don't say "the tree withered", say "the tree lost its youth"; Don't say "old age of life", say "sunset of life" and so on. These words are endless, revealing the wisdom of language. The following is a self-introduction by Zheng, a contemporary poet, which is quite interesting because of the use of argot: "If I were forty, I would be eighteen. It landed in the mountainous area of Zhejiang and moved to the factory in Shanghai. Just because the roots are too shallow, it takes an average of four years to sprout a leaf-the last two are Wan Xianqin published in Ningxia and Island in the Middle of the Lake published in Shanghai. " The author did not directly introduce his age, native place, resume and creation, but. It attracts readers like riddles, avoids cliches and gives people a lively and refreshing feeling.

5. Write sentences in a fun way

If the article is too serious, it will inevitably give people a sense of heaviness and depression; A little humorous remarks will not only make you feel lively and interesting to read, but also make the article lively and literary. Please look at the opening segment of Wang Feng's essay "Adding a Little Man to the Family":

"At the end of 200 1, a sunny day, accompanied by a cry that is not loud, my family rose by an average of one generation. It's an honor that I was promoted to uncle. ..... The little guy can ignore these, open his mouth and cry at him. I don't think a man can cry easily. If he cries, there must be something sad! Sister coaxed her up, and the little guy opened his mouth as if he knew something and looked around for the "canteen"; My throat is still humming in a hurry. I'm hungry. Look at his eating, maybe I lived in the 1960s in my last life! "

The author's exaggerated words and advanced communication make the article have a unique atmosphere and emotional appeal. You can't help laughing when you read such words. Another example is San Mao's "The Return of Yan", which does not say "there is no wind", but wittily says "the wind doesn't know where to sleep"; Instead of saying that "the house is full of dust and garbage", he wrote humorously: "There are dust and garbage, which are more powerful than light, and light can't reach them, but they can come to my humble abode every time." The environment is so bad, but it is so easy to write, which shows the author's unique personality charm and innovative ability and enhances the appeal of the article.

The ancients said, "Words without words are not far away." He also said, "If a worker wants to do a good job, he must sharpen his tools first." The device of the article

Tool is a language, because it is the only material to describe the scenery and shape the image. Therefore, we must attach importance to language.

Study and exercise, learn the skills of using language. Try to make the language vivid, so as to make our article meaningless.

Poor, shine.

Third, the flexible overall expression technique adds color to the article.

1, suppress first and then raise.

Example:

Smelly chrysanthemum

Inner Mongolia roulixin

When I was a child, my father and I traveled all over China. In this land of flowers, I have seen elegant peony, elegant and colorful lotus flowers, and even mysterious epiphyllum, such as blood rhododendron, but these flowers have hardly left any impression on me, and gradually fade away after a long time; However, last summer vacation, I spent my holiday at my second aunt's house. The common stinky chrysanthemums that can be seen everywhere on the land in the north make me unforgettable.

It was last August, and my second aunt invited me. Go to Ulqihan for a holiday.

When I walked into my second aunt's yard, my eyes were full of flowers: all kinds of flowers were planted neatly on both sides of the spacious yard, leaving only a narrow passage in the middle: I always liked flowers, and I couldn't help bending down to see them: the golden lotus leaves trembled in the breeze, and the corn poppy looked at the sun delicately ... but I soon found that only a few of these flowers were planted, and most of the rest were stinky chrysanthemums: the leaves were bigger and the flowers were crimson.

Needless to say, the color of flowers is much less than that of other flowers. My second aunt saw that I was looking at flowers and said to me, "These are all planted by your second uncle:" Oh! That's the "stupid old man", I think it's no wonder that he planted some residual flowers; My second uncle appeared in my mind.

I only met my second uncle a few times, and that was when he went to his grandmother's house for the New Year. He is the chief of the finance department of Urqihan Forestry Bureau. In my impression, he always wore a gray tunic suit, wrapped his short body, and his face was covered with wrinkles prematurely, looking much older than my father. His surname is Han, but my uncles call him an "old fool", and everyone understands the implication. I also think he is a bit "stupid". For example, once during the Spring Festival, several uncles were drinking together, and the fourth uncle said to him, "I heard that your forestry bureau has a lot of birch bark. Why not bring some next time? " For him, this little thing can be done in one sentence, but he said for a long time, "I will definitely buy it for you when I issue the ticket again, but not now."

This is public. "-listen, how silly! Let uncles look down on him. As for me, from then on, I called him "stupid old man" behind my back.

There is really nothing wrong with calling him "stupid old man". Let's say his home. He is a big official there. There is a lot of wood in the forest farm, but his family doesn't even have a decent piece of furniture. However, he is very kind to me. I think he is sincere and simple, and I respect him very much.

My second uncle likes stinky chrysanthemums very much. He waters them when he has nothing to do and plays endlessly. I don't understand why he likes this ordinary stinky chrysanthemum. You see, the crimson color, the small flowers and the petals are not noticeable at all. Other flowers often attract bees and butterflies, but I have never seen moths land on stinking chrysanthemums. I smell it, ah! What's that smell? It doesn't smell good, but it smells bad. No wonder it's called "smelly chrysanthemum"! I asked my second uncle why he liked this flower. He smiled and said, "Think for yourself." Hum! This "stupid old man"!

Soon, I don't know why, peanuts in the yard caught a lot of white bugs, attached to the leaves of flowers and sucked juice, which was dense and annoying. Although I often water them, white bugs always increase. Gradually, the delicate and charming corn poppy flowers withered, and the golden lotus leaves could no longer give birth to small buds. However, I was surprised to find that none of the stinky chrysanthemums in the garden were infected with insects. The more they bloom, the more flowers will bloom. I asked my second uncle why, but he still smiled and said, "Think for yourself." Hum! This "stupid old man" certainly doesn't know it himself.

One day, my second uncle came back from work with a heavy face. When he entered the hospital, he squatted motionless beside the flowers and stared at the smelly chrysanthemums in full bloom. Later, several guests came and everyone advised him to relax. From their conversation, I understood that a few days ago, several leaders of my second uncle used public funds to travel around on the grounds of a meeting, but asked him to reimburse them. He thought it was illegal and did not report it. I didn't expect the leader to announce today that my second uncle was transferred to the "family planning office" because of work needs. Although I laugh at my uncle for being stupid, I think he did the right thing. I will comfort him as soon as the guests leave.

The second uncle said, "Lixin, do you like this flower?" I was noncommittal, and he went on to say, "Before, you asked me why this flower didn't have worms, but now I tell you because it has a unique fragrance. Other flowers attract butterflies and bees. They attract bugs more easily. But it has a unique fragrance that keeps bugs at a distance. " My heart moved and I understood a lot at once. Yes, stinky chrysanthemum keeps its lofty position with its unique fragrance, and at the same time it is discriminated against because it dares to keep this unique fragrance, and even called "stinky chrysanthemum". How unfair! Suddenly I feel that my second uncle is not just this stinking chrysanthemum. Nowadays, there are not a few people like my uncle. Although they may be

People look down on it and even suffer, but I believe that history will make a fair judgment one day.

Get up early the next day, the frost is heavy, and after being robbed by insects, the surviving flowers hang their heads listlessly, and only the stinky chrysanthemums stand proudly as usual, and the bonus is more dazzling. This flower is not afraid of cold!

My second uncle came out and looked as usual. Seeing me staring at him, he smiled foolishly: "The same job is everywhere." He left, facing the rising sun, his back was so tall in my eyes for the first time:

When the sun rises, the frost will always recede;

I looked at the stinking chrysanthemums, and they were still neither charming, flattering nor arrogant. The frost lost its strength in front of it. What a tenacious chrysanthemum!

After the summer vacation, I specially asked my second aunt for a lot of flower seeds. I hope stinky chrysanthemums can bloom all over the world.

I love stinky chrysanthemum, and I love people with stinky chrysanthemum personality more.

2. Contrast and contrast

come into bud

When enjoying the cool in the yard, I always see the little boy next door burying the grape core in a flowerpot filled with soil while eating grapes. At first, I didn't care. After reading it for a long time, I asked, "Why do you always bury grape stones in flowerpots?"

"I want to grow grapes." He didn't even look up.

"But grapes are planted with vines. You can't grow them like this. "

"I know."

"Then why are you still like this?" I am curious.

"Grapes must use vines? I want to create a miracle. " The child looked up with hope in his eyes.

Later, I always saw the boy carefully watering his grapes, and then he squatted in front of the flowerpot in a daze, his eyes full of hope, so that other children in the yard told him to play, and he ignored it. Obviously, he is immersed in his own hopes.

It was several days before the boy's parents discovered his eccentricity. On this day, as soon as the soy sauce at home was used up, the boy squatted outside the door. His father asked him to buy soy sauce and even called several times. No one answered. When he went out and saw the boy squatting in front of the flowerpot, his father said, "What are you doing squatting here?" I can't hear you. Where's your heart? Buy soy sauce! "Say that finish, he handed the money to the child.

After a long time, the boy didn't buy soy sauce back, and the child's father panicked and ran out in a hurry. As soon as I went out, I saw the child crouching in front of the flowerpot at the door, holding the money he gave me.

The child's father was angry. He grabbed the child's hand and shouted, "What's the matter with you? I told you to buy soy sauce, and you still die here? "

The child's mind is still in the flowerpot. The grape core was buried for a long time and did not germinate. The child is a little disappointed. He said, "I wonder, why doesn't this grape sprout?"

Hearing this, the child's father became even more angry and said loudly, "I told you before that it was useless for you to do so." You are so stubborn. " He slapped the child in the face, then lifted the flowerpot and broke it.

The child looked at the dirt and debris on the ground and cried.

After all, the boy is still young. After a few days of silence, he regained his former liveliness and began to play with the children in the yard.

A week later, while enjoying the cool air, I saw a girl in the yard eating grapes and burying grape stones in a flowerpot. I wanted to tell her that grapes can't grow from grape pits, but before I could say it, the boy saw it. The boy went up to the girl and said, "Why do you always bury the grape stones in the flowerpot?"

"I want to grow grapes."

"Grapes should be planted with vines. You can't grow them like this. "

"I know."

"Then why are you still like this?"

"Grapes must use vines? I want to create a miracle. " The girl looked up with hope in her eyes.

"Really. It's no use doing so. I've done it before. It's useless. "

"Water it every day when you plant it, you know?"

The boy nodded and opened his mouth, trying to say something, but ran back to the house without saying anything.

A few days later, tender vines actually grew in the girl's flowerpot, and the girl was very happy. I saw her calling all the children in the yard and the boy, but the boy didn't go. When a group of children gathered around the flowerpot, the boy hid and cried.

I saw the boy crying, so I went over. I said, "Why are you crying here?"

The boy said, "This vine was planted by the girl's father. I saw it. "

The boy added, "It's very kind of her father." The boy sobbed as he spoke.

3. Title metaphor, a string of words

Example: Motherly love is a thread.

You Tianchen

When the mother tidied up her son's clothes, she found that the buttons on his shirt sleeves were loose.

She decided to catch her son.

My son is very young, but he is already a writer with a growing reputation. Talent and hard work made him what he is today. Mother is proud of it-she is the writer's mother!

The room was quiet, except for the ticking of my son's keyboard and his flowing voice. The mother can see from her son's behavior that he is full of ideas. When she was looking for a needle and thread in the drawer, she didn't dare to make any noise for fear of disturbing her son. Fortunately, my mother found a tube and the needle was inserted in it. She took them out and gently pushed the drawer.

But she was in trouble, and the embroidered mother couldn't even wear a needle. A month ago, she was sewing a quilt with a needle, but now she can't get through it when she clearly sees a pinhole there.

She can't believe that her eyesight has dropped so much. Wet the thread in your mouth again, twist the thread with your left index finger and thumb again, raise your arm again to keep the distance between your eyes and the needle closest, and then try again.

-Still failed.

Try again.

The thread hasn't passed through the eye of the needle yet.

My son was later typesetting an article and was shocked to see his mother's figure on the display screen. He suddenly felt like a sewing needle. Although he lives with his mother day and night, his heart is blocked by endless articles. Mother's silk thread can't find a hole in and out here, but she still won't give up.

My son's eyes are hot. He remembered that he hadn't communicated with his mother for a long time and didn't care about her food, clothing, housing and transportation.

Mom, let me help you. The son left the computer, and in an instant, the silk thread passed through the needle. Mother smiled like a flower and sewed buttons for her son with her heart, as if sewing a beautiful dream.

My son knows what to do in the future. Because, mom is easy to satisfy, for example, just helping her thread, realizing her wish to nail a button for you, and making her love unimpeded. So simple