Need to modify a lot of sick sentences!

1. improper collocation; 2. Sentence repetition; 3. The sentence order is reversed; 4. Misuse of related words; 5. Lack of sentence elements. 1. Inconsistent 6. The word order is wrong. misnomer

1. Decorate with modifiers (used for inconsistency, sentence repetition, wrong word order, wrong word use, reversed sentence order, incorrect application of related words, improper word use)

1. Ill sentences refer to sentences with incomplete structure, unclear meaning and errors. The purpose of training and modifying sick sentences is to recognize the mistakes that are easy to make when writing sentences, so that you can write less sick sentences and express your meaning clearly and smoothly.

The common sentences in this grade are as follows:

(1) Incomplete components: This sentence lacks necessary components and its meaning is incomplete. For example, "Sing loudly." As you all know, a sentence can be divided into two parts. The former part says "who" or "what", and the latter part says "what", "what to do" or "how to do it". These two parts are the basic components of a sentence and are indispensable.

(2) Repetition of meaning: This kind of sentence means saying a meaning in front and repeating it later, and the meaning is repeated. For example, "I corrected the incorrect typo." Here "incorrect" and "typo" have the same meaning, so it is redundant to use them together.

(3) Improper use of words: This kind of sentence is due to the unclear understanding of the meaning and the misuse of synonyms, which leads to the words failing to express the meaning and violates the structural rules of the sentence. For example, "the students warmly welcome the new teacher." The word "enthusiastic" means: enthusiastic, interested and willing to do my best. It is obviously inappropriate to use it in front of "welcome".

(4) Word order inversion: Word order is the order of words in a sentence, reflecting the position of words in the sentence structure. Every word has its specific position in the language structure. If you leave your position, you will make mistakes in improper word order. For example, "this year's wheat harvest is in sight and the growth is gratifying." Only when the wheat grows well can the harvest be in sight, and the word order is reversed, which does not conform to the objective law.

2. Steps to modify sick sentences.

(1) Read the original sentence and find out the original meaning. First of all, we should read the sick sentences carefully and understand their main meaning.

(2) Find the cause and determine the symptoms. Find out the reason of the sick sentence around the main meaning of the sentence and find out what kind of sick sentence it belongs to.

(3) suit the remedy to the case and modify the ill sentences. After finding out the reason, we should think about what to delete, what to add and what to replace according to the problems in the sentence, and then start to modify the sick sentence.

(4) Check carefully and complete the exercise. Read the revised sentence to see if it is correct and whether it retains the original meaning of the sentence.

3. Methods of modifying ill sentences.

(1) When modifying a sentence with incomplete components, the most important thing is to know which part is missing. For example, "Sing loudly." This sentence lacks the basic component "who", so the meaning of the sentence is not clear. The method of revision is to make up this part and change it to: "Students sing loudly."

(2) To modify a sentence with repetitive meaning, the most important thing is to understand which part of the meaning is redundant. For example, "I corrected the incorrect typo." Obviously, "incorrect" repeats the meaning of "typo". The way to correct it is to remove one of "incorrect" or "typo" and keep one as: "I corrected the incorrect word." Or: "I corrected the typo."

(3) The most important thing to modify a sentence with improper words is to find out which words are improper and the nature of the errors (wrong synonyms, improper scope, improper collocation of words). For example, "Xiaogang cherishes time." "Cherish" is to cherish and protect. It is not appropriate to use it in front of "time", but it can be changed to "cherish" (meaning to value but not spoil) and become: "Xiaogang cherishes time very much."

(4) The most important thing is to find out which word is in the wrong position, such as: "We discussed and listened to the headmaster's report." After reading the sentence, you can find that the order of discussing the report before listening to it is wrong. You have to listen to the report first, and then discuss it. It becomes: "We listened and discussed the headmaster's report."

Teach primary school students to modify sick sentences

Modifying sick sentences is an important part of sentence practice, and it is also a common problem in Chinese examination papers. Through the modification of sick sentences, we can know what is the right sentence and what is the wrong sentence. In this way, we can not only improve our ability of analysis and judgment, but also lay a good foundation for us to revise our composition.

The key to modifying ill sentences is to find out the reasons and the causes, so as to "suit the remedy to the case". There are several common sentence mistakes of primary school students: ① Incomplete sentences; ② Improper collocation; (3) word order disorder; 4 inconsistent; (5) Repeatability; 6 unreasonable and so on.

We should master a principle in modifying ill sentences: we should correct them and try not to change the original intention. Generally speaking, modifying a sick sentence can be divided into four steps: ① understanding the original sentence; ② Etiological analysis; (3) Write modification, and (4) Check after modification. There are roughly six ways to modify sick sentences.

1 supplementary composition method

Supplementary component method refers to the method of supplementing necessary components to incomplete sentences to make sentences complete. Incomplete sick sentences mainly lack main components, namely subject, predicate and object. What is missing needs careful analysis. Usually the subject comes first, the predicate is in the middle and the object is at the end (if there is no object, the predicate is at the end). Because sentences are not only composed of main components, but also have some additional components, we should find out the main components first, and then make up the missing parts.

We are preparing for the National Day this year.

According to the requirements of supplementary component method, to correct incomplete sentences, we must first find out the main components, then see what components are missing and make up the appropriate ones. Through analysis, this example sentence has a subject and a predicate, and "prepare" is a verb as a predicate component. What is "preparation"? If there is no description of the object component, you can supplement the "wonderful program".

2 Adjustment and collocation methods

The method of adjusting collocation refers to the method of adjusting words in ill-matched sentences to make the sentences write smoothly. Some words can't match in meaning or don't conform to language habits. If matched, it will cause sick sentences. Common sick sentences are: improper collocation of subject and predicate, improper collocation of verb and object. When revising, it is generally enough to adjust one word. The specific adjustment depends on the content.

Lily sang a beautiful song at the party.

In this example, "singing" and "singing" cannot match. Singing is just a song. Singing refers to the sound of a song, just like the sound of birds and machines. This is a sick sentence with improper collocation of verbs and objects. Just change the word "Song" to something like "Song" when revising.

3 straighten out the word order method

Straightening word order method refers to the method of straightening out the word order of sick sentences with disordered word order and making sentences smooth. In most cases, the word order of sentences is fixed. When the word order changes, the meaning of the sentence changes, even causing language barriers. Therefore, the word order must conform to the usual language habits and cannot be reversed at will.

The beautiful songs of birds were intoxicated by him.

After reading this sentence, we feel very confused. If the topic is "singing", it obviously doesn't make sense to say that singing is intoxicated by him. So, who should be intoxicated? From the analysis of the meaning of the clause, it should be "he" What intoxicated him? Beautiful Song of Birds, of course. Therefore, the whole sentence is changed to: he is intoxicated by the wonderful songs of birds.

4 methods to solve contradictions

Contradiction resolution refers to the use of contradiction resolution in a sick sentence with contradictory meanings expressed before and after a sentence to unify the meanings before and after. The preface of a sentence should be consistent with the facts. Otherwise, there will be inconsistencies, language confusion and inconsistency with the facts. According to the analysis, this language barrier is mainly the result of not carefully observing things and thinking about problems.

The whole class went to the movies, but only Zhang Jun stayed in the classroom to do his homework.

The first half of this sentence says "the whole class" will go, and the second half says "Zhang Jun" will stay in the classroom. In tandem, there are obvious contradictions. Perhaps, the person who wrote this sentence consciously emphasized that "Zhang Jun" didn't leave, but in any case, the contradiction of the sentence is objective. If it is really to emphasize, we might as well correct it like this: all the other students in the class went to the movies, and only Zhang Jun stayed in the classroom to do his homework.

5. Simplify by deleting the complex.

Simplify the complex, that is, reduce the bloated sentences with repeated meanings or redundant components, and make the sentences concise and clear. Repetition is often caused by deliberate repetition of words. The repetition of words in the sentence gives people a long-winded feeling, just like painting a snake to add feet. When modifying, just select one of the duplicate parts.

I couldn't help laughing.

In the example, "can't help" means "can't help", so it means repetition with "can't help" in one sentence. This sentence can be changed to: I can't help laughing.

6 according to the law of things

Reasonable method refers to the method of reinterpreting unreasonable ill sentences to make them reasonable. Unreasonable, also known as logical confusion, is caused by insufficient understanding of things themselves. When modifying this kind of ill sentences, we should first fully understand things, grasp their essence, that is, re-understand in our methods, and then describe the sentences clearly.

There are tomatoes, watermelons, cucumbers, lentils, eggplant, apples and other vegetables in the garden.

The sentence emphasizes all kinds of vegetables. What is a vegetable? Watermelon and apple? These two things actually belong to fruits, so it is unreasonable to put them in vegetables. When modifying, you can remove two things or keep them (as needed). The sentence that adopts the latter modification method is: tomatoes, lentils, cucumbers, eggplants and other vegetables are planted in the field, and watermelons and apples are also planted.

Practice of modifying sick sentences by primary school students

1. The hall was crowded with people watching the performance.

The campus is full of colorful flowers such as white, red and yellow.

I stood on the playground and looked at the students who were exercising carefully.

Our class won the first place in the competition, and everyone's heart showed the joy of victory.

At the panel discussion, everyone spoke fiercely.

6. Say with one voice, "Yes!"

7. Under the teacher's education, he made clear his learning attitude.

8. I like reading extracurricular books such as Little Bee, Xiaoxi and Pupils' Learning Newspaper.

9. After the reform and opening up, people's lives have become more and more affluent.

10 I think the scenery in spring is beautiful.

1 1. The teacher asked the students to be clear about their learning goals and attitudes.

12, you must be responsible.

Miss Li is very strict with us in class.

14, after the implementation of quality education, the quantity and quality of our extracurricular reading have been obviously improved.

15, when handing the teacup, my mother's face showed a happy mood.

16, Xiao Ming's sister was rated as "three good students" for three consecutive years.

We came to the park and watched the beautiful scenery.

19, his Chinese homework is basically completed.

I remembered what happened two years ago.

I'm sure it may snow tomorrow.

Everyone must pay attention to the good habit of hygiene.

25. The river is reflected in the clouds, making it whiter.

26. Autumn in Xiangshan is a desirable place.

27. The museum exhibited newly unearthed cultural relics 3,000 years ago.

28. This semester is the last year of my primary school study and life.

Grandpa often tells us interesting stories.

30. My brother likes playing basketball and football best.

3 1. The Spring Festival I have been looking forward to day and night has finally arrived.

32. After the reform and opening up, China's economic construction has developed rapidly.

We should develop a good way of thinking while reading.

We should give play to the glorious tradition of the older generation of revolutionaries.

It is my turn to be on duty today. I made the classroom clean and tidy.

I took my pen, ruler, eraser and stationery to the teaching competition.

He has finished all the exercises assigned by the teacher.

Every time the teacher asks a question, he is always the first to speak.

39. We should cultivate a love of cleanliness from an early age.

40. Our school requires PLA uncles to make regular reports.

We must accomplish the great task of building the four modernizations.

42. When the blind girl saw someone coming in, she quickly stood up and offered her seat.

43. People who don't do what they say is a bad style.

44. Wang Leyan's self-sacrificing behavior touched people around him.

In spite of the bad weather, we always get to school on time.

46. The crosstalk performance began, and smiling faces stared at the performance on the stage.

47. I am determined to work hard to overcome the bad habits in my study.

48. Teacher Liu was awarded the honorary title of "Super Teacher".

She looks great in a white scarf and a red skirt.

People who spit everywhere are an uncivilized habit.

The exercises and answers to correct ill sentences.

1, this is a happy, happy and joyful class meeting. Revision: delete "happiness, joy"

The teacher suddenly slowed down the progress. Modification: Delete "gradually" or "suddenly"

After this trip, I gave you great inspiration. Revision: Delete "After"

4. Copernicus dares to criticize and doubt the authoritative theory that is unrealistic but has always been considered inviolable. Revision: "Dare to criticize" and "Dare to doubt";

In order to avoid similar accidents in the future, we must improve the safety system as soon as possible.

Modify: delete "avoid" or "no longer"

6. His kind words+and kind face always come to my eyes.

Revision: Add "ringing in my ear" after "words";

7. Improving the quality is the urgent task of Chinese teaching reform.

Revision: change "increase" to "improve"

8. Winning or losing this game is not only related to the reputation of the team, but also to the honor of the school.

Revision: Change "but" to "and"

9. Seeing this exhibition made me feel a lot. Revision: Delete "make"

10, only socialism can save China. Revision: Change "Jiu" to "Cai"

1 1. After the incident, the class teacher and the class committee studied and decided to conduct an education on this issue.

Revision: "This question" was changed to "classmate"

the second part

1, PLA uncle shot down 5 enemy planes and 3 warships.

2. Pride and complacency are obstacles to learning.

These are the cultural relics unearthed in Tang Dynasty.

After watching this TV series, everyone was deeply impressed.

The park has set up two new recreational projects aided by Britain.

I guess he must have done this problem wrong.

He rushed into the classroom and happily announced that he would go for a spring outing tomorrow.

After listening to this report, we learned a lot.

9. In winter, the cold wind whistling in your face makes people tremble.

10 Even if you are a genius, you can't do without the training and education of teachers.

1 1. The author of Grassland is Lao She.

12, keep a diary, and your writing ability will be improved and expanded rapidly.

13. It is shameful not to cherish the fruits of labor and waste them at will.

14, we should strengthen our confidence and methods to overcome difficulties.

15, the rooster at dawn is a signal to get up.

16, we should seriously correct our shortcomings and mistakes.

Reading more good books can enrich and improve our knowledge.

18, Chinese learning for primary school students, China Youth Daily is my favorite newspaper.

19, Young Pioneers should love their motherland and take good care of public property.

20. No difficulty can frighten the strong-willed young pioneers. labour union

2 1. After listening to the report, I got an education.

22. The early rice is ripe and the field looks like a green carpet.

I can't help laughing.

24. I often see Xiaoming sometimes exercise in the morning.

Young pioneers should give play to the revolutionary tradition.

26. Because Lao She loves to grow flowers, and she has a lot of flowers.

27. Xiaoxing 'anling is a beautiful place in summer.

28. I saw the movie The Sparkling Red Star yesterday.

Answer:

1, PLA uncle shot down five enemy planes.

2. Pride and complacency are obstacles to learning.

These are the cultural relics of Tang Dynasty.

This TV play left a deep impression on me.

There are two new entertainments in the park.

I guess he made a mistake on this issue.

He ran into the classroom and happily announced that he would go for a spring outing tomorrow.

This report has taught us a lot.

9. In winter, the cold wind blows on the face, which makes people tremble.

10 Even if you are a genius, you can't do without the training and education of teachers.

1 1. The author of Grassland is Lao She.

12, keep a diary, and your writing ability will improve rapidly.

13, this behavior of not cherishing the fruits of labor and wasting it at will is shameful.

We should strengthen our confidence in overcoming difficulties.

15, the cock crows as a signal to get up.

16, we should seriously correct our shortcomings and mistakes.

17, reading more good books can enrich our knowledge.

18. My favorite newspapers are Chinese Learning for Primary School Students and China Youth Daily.

19, Young Pioneers should love their motherland and take good care of public property.

20. No difficulty can frighten the strong-willed young pioneers.

2 1. After listening to the report, I got an education.

22. The early rice is ripe, and the fields look like golden carpets.

23. I can't help laughing.

24. I often see Xiaoming exercising in the morning.

Young pioneers should give play to the revolutionary tradition.

26. Because Lao She loves flowers, she keeps many flowers.

27. Xiaoxing 'anling is a beautiful place in summer.

28. I saw the movie The Sparkling Red Star yesterday.

Example:

1. Incomplete composition: Incomplete sentences.

After reading two poems by revolutionary martyrs, I received a profound education. (Missing "Who")

After reading two poems by revolutionary martyrs, we received a profound education.

Second, improper collocation:

Suzhou in spring is the most beautiful season of the year. (You can't say "Suzhou is the season")

Spring in Suzhou is the most beautiful season of the year. (It should be said that "spring is the season")

Third, inconsistency:

I have basically finished all my homework. (The contradiction between "basically" and "all", choose one from two)

I basically finished my homework.

I have finished all my homework.

Fourth, semantic repetition:

Exodus I must correct my shortcomings. ("Bad" and "Shortcomings" are repeated)

I must correct my shortcomings.

Five, illogical:

: Exodus The shelves of shops are full of grapes, apples, pears and fruits.

("Fruit" includes "grapes, apples, pears" and so on. )

The shelves of the shop are full of grapes, apples and pears.

Or: the shelves in the shop are full of fruits.

Sixth, the word order is reversed:

In Exodus, he accomplished arduous tasks again and again. ("Time and again" should be changed to "finished")

He accomplished arduous tasks again and again.

Seven, improper description:

: exodus When Teacher Wang finished this story, the classroom burst into an avalanche of applause.

There can't be an avalanche of applause in the classroom

After Mr. Wang finished the story, there was warm applause in the classroom.

Eight, refers to the unknown:

Example: The teacher criticized Xiaoming and Xiaodong and asked him to write a review.

Xiao Ming and Xiao Dong are in front, followed by "Call him". who is it? )

The teacher criticized Xiaoming and Xiaodong and asked them to write a review.

First of all, classification exercises.

Missing part:

1. After half a year's efforts, I finally caught up.

2. Gloriously became the producer of China * * *.

Everyone is doing happily on the playground.

We are shouldering the task of building a socialist motherland.

5. Completed the homework assigned by the teacher.

6. High-rise buildings have been built one after another.

7. Lei Feng who serves the people wholeheartedly will always inspire us to move forward.

Both the teacher and we want to catch chickens on the playground.

(B) improper collocation of words

1. Thanks to everyone's efforts, our academic performance has been greatly improved.

This bridge is not only hard but also beautiful.

We warmly celebrate Xiaohong being awarded the "Three Good" team book? /font & gt；

The small weatherman insists on checking the weather changes every day.

We must adhere to the glorious revolutionary tradition.

6. Correct learning objectives and clear learning attitude.

7. In class, xu teacher told many interesting examples and stories.

We have formed the habit of washing our hands before and after meals.

If you make a mistake, you should make up your mind to improve it.

10. The teacher's kind face and kind teaching always reverberate in my ears.

1 1. My sister likes dancing and music best.

12. This saw was discovered by Lu Ban.

repeat

About 50 people attended the meeting.

There are 1000 students in our school.

My brother is holding a bunch of beautiful flowers.

I'm not afraid of these bad guys.

Colorful flags are flying in the air.

He is the most labor-loving activist in our class.

7. I have other plans.

The square is crowded with workers and farmers from all over the country.

Word order error

1. He took out a thick stack of RMB from his satchel.

2. Huang Jiguang devoted his glorious life.

2. Mom only reads under the desk lamp.

Grandpa lived a simple life all his life.

The rural areas in the south of the Yangtze River in summer are the busiest farming season in a year.

We should carry forward and inherit the glorious tradition of hard struggle.

unreasonably troublesome

1. I have finished all my math exercise books, but I haven't worked out one problem yet.

I can conclude that this good thing may be done by Chen Honggan of our class.

There are few students who failed in the final exam in our class.

Workers, peasants, PLA, students, primary school students and government officials attended the party.

The teacher praised me and my face turned red at once. I am like a big apple.

6. The soldiers braved the heavy rain and muddy road.

7. Most of the students' homework has been handed in.

8. Dark clouds and heavy rain poured down from mid-air.

Second, comprehensive exercise: modify the original sentence

1, the students' mood is higher than before in this activity.

Yang Yang said that he had mastered the skill of jigsaw puzzle.

3. I recorded and watched the psychological knowledge lecture of educational TV station.

I have done five of the six homework, and I have almost finished the last one.

My mother bought vegetables, fruits, cucumbers and beans from the market this morning.

If everyone obeys the traffic rules, our safety and accidents will be guaranteed.

7. We should protect natural scenic spots such as Lijiang River, Taihu Lake, Forbidden City and Beidaihe.

8. There are many strange animals in the underwater world.

Lily sang a beautiful song at the party.

10, this semester, our school launched an upsurge of "striving to be a small guardian of the environment".

1 1. Cadres, teachers, retired workers and white-haired old people attended the rally.

Students, young pioneers, workers, farmers, teachers and the People's Liberation Army participated in the theatrical performances.

13. After participating in extracurricular interest group activities, our knowledge has improved a lot.

14, our teacher Yang was awarded the honorary title of "excellent teacher across the century".

15, the first and second place finals were held today.

16, his writing has improved significantly.

17, Mid-Autumn Festival night, bright moonlight.

18, he is tenacious and never accepts other people's opinions easily.

19, teacher Xiao's questions were answered like a stream.

20. The author of Bird's Paradise is Ba Jin.

2 1. If we pay attention to food hygiene, intestinal diseases and health can be avoided.

22. Music and sports are very interested in us.

23. Qin Xiao has developed a love of labor since he was a child.

24. Those who are open-minded learn ten, and those who are proud learn ten.

25. It's a bad performance to harm others and benefit themselves.

26. The teacher is as cunning as a fox.

27. Tonight, the sky is like a mirror and there are many stars. What a beautiful night scene!

28. The rice to be harvested is full and green. How cute!

We should fight against natural phenomena such as drought, floods and earthquakes.

30. The students all responded positively to "Let everyone do it and green the motherland".

3 1. My sister likes dancing and music best.

About fifty people attended today's meeting.

The weatherman insists on observing the weather changes every day.

34. Inspired by the spirit of Lei Feng. Xiaoming improved his shortcomings and kept doing good deeds, which was praised by the teacher.

On the morning of Children's Day, we sat proudly in the classroom and held a celebration party. The counselor wishes us a happy holiday first, and encourages us to continue our efforts and strive to be qualified graduates. Then, the program is performed, and the most wonderful performance is a textbook drama adapted from Van Card by Russian writer Gorky.

He was deeply moved by the beautiful scenery of Guilin.

37. This evening, there was much thunder and little rain, and there was a thunderstorm.

38. He made clear his learning attitude and corrected his learning purpose.

39. The style of hard work and plain living has been maintained for a long time.

40. Swallows, woodpeckers, frogs and other beneficial birds all specialize in eating pests. They are all good friends of mankind.

4 1, our school held a small invention.

42. After watching Only One Earth, I got a profound education.

43. This spring, we visited the landscape of Guilin.

44. The Earth is one of the planets in the solar system.

People visit the Forbidden City, the Great Wall and the Olympic Village in an endless stream.

46. He saw a tall, burly, red-faced man in military uniform coming.

47. I went to the store and bought fish, shrimp, salt, kelp and other aquatic products.

48. The sixth grade students are the largest class in our school.

49. The Yangtze River has cultivated Chinese children with sweet milk.

The bell rang and the students rushed to the playground for activities.

5 1, the 50-meter sprint final started, and Dong Li was the first to reach the finish line and won the first place in the championship.

I came to the beautiful campus with a happy mood and a brisk pace.

53. This last day's work is the most meaningful day.

Through the squadron meeting, we improved our understanding of distinguishing right from wrong.

55. It is a long-standing custom in China to stick couplets on the Spring Festival.

56. The story "Cowherd and Weaver Girl" is very popular among the people.

57. Rain, as thin as fallen leaves and as light as the tip of a needle, flies to the earth.

When I walked into the campus, I saw lovely faces and beautiful songs.

59. On Sunday, we held a sports meeting at school.

Grandpa's illness was carefully treated by the doctor and he soon recovered.

6 1, the police uncle's action of sacrificing himself to save people touched people around him.

62. The Yellow River is the four major rivers in China and the cradle of the Chinese nation.

We can increase our knowledge and writing level by reading more good books at ordinary times.

64. Can't you get good grades without studying hard?

65. The climate today is colder than yesterday. He came to school in a sweater and towel.

66. The beginning of a day is as big as a hood, and the middle of a day is like a plate. Isn't this for the sake of distance?

67. It's cool at the beginning of the day, and it's like exploring soup at noon. Isn't it hot when people are far away and cold when people are near?