Examples of driven thinking

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These are the writing materials for the 2019 Provincial Joint Entrance Examination:

Li Ming wants to apply for medical school and is determined to be an excellent doctor and save lives. But his parents did not support his idea, saying that studying medicine was hard and tiring and the income was not high, and provided Li Ming with a piece of newspaper text:

Recently, there has been a trend of "If you don't switch to finance, there will be no way out." A wave of anxiety swept through Peking University's Weiming BBS: major projects with a million-yuan bonus, six- or seven-figure salary bonuses, five-star hotels and luxury cars and BMWs...the living conditions of these financial practitioners are all making people ready to move. Some senior students even wrote long articles describing their painful lessons in choosing the former between "emotions" and finance. Similar anxieties and discussions are not limited to Peking University, and the "financial fever" permeating universities across the country is not just a day or two. But these did not dissuade Li Ming from studying medicine. Please write a letter to help Li Ming persuade his parents to allow him to study medicine. Requirements: Choose a good angle, determine the intention, do not copy, plagiarize, or disclose personal information (the article is not signed by Li Ming); no less than 800 words.

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This is a typical mission-driven material.

The students were confused about the sentence "Please write a letter to help Li Ming persuade his parents to allow him to study medicine." In fact, they still did not read it thoroughly, and the extraction of material information was incomplete. The letter writer is "you", and "you" will write a letter to "Li Ming"'s parents on Li Ming's behalf, with the last signature being "Li Ming". Although the expression of these materials is a bit convoluted, there is no problem at all. However, it interferes with the students' driving task of interpreting the materials and creates confusion about the "objects" of letter writing. Some people write "Mom and Dad" and others write "Uncle and Aunt." Since letter writing is not common and many students make misjudgments, the "parents" or "uncles and aunts" can be ignored, as long as the facts, reasoning and explanations are clear.

My reasons for characterizing the material as "driving material" are as follows: The conflict between the concepts of "study medicine" and "finance" is also a reflection of real life. It is a very down-to-earth composition material and has a trendy feel. nature; as the most important applied style, the combination of letter writing and current affairs materials has the height and difficulty of propositions and is pertinent; how to understand the relationship between "feelings" and "finance" and highlight the value orientation of "cultivating people with moral integrity" requires Students think rationally and dialectically, and are speculative; they learn to reason, learn to analyze parents' psychology, and have the language literacy that senior high school students should possess, which has originality and educational functions. After clarifying the characteristics of this driving material and combining it with the candidates' own experience, it is easier to sort out the ideas for writing.

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Key points in writing essay review.

The composition review team reviewed the materials and achieved four key points of composition review:

The first is the format, which examines the letter’s title, congratulations and title (such as “To Mom and Dad”) "A letter" can only count as an appendix) must be correct, otherwise 3 points will be deducted.

The second purpose is to persuade parents to agree to Li Ming's study of medicine and to refute the wave of money worship, taking into account the various temptations mentioned in the material and the dialectical relationship between self-realization and self-worth. This closely adheres to the outline requirements of cultivating morality and cultivating people and dialectical thinking.

The third is to assign points. According to the grade evaluation standards, the three items of the second grade (content, expression, development) will be evaluated with an average score of 15 points, focusing on the development grade of profound, rich, literary and innovative , add or subtract points as appropriate. Grading should reflect the gradient. Good essays (above 50 points) should dare to give high marks, and poor essays (below 39 points) should not be merciful.

The fourth is to remind you that if you have a good composition and a good title, try to mark or capture it and collect it, and communicate online in the group at any time.

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Problems and solutions in marking feedback.

- should have a title. The letter writing test questions are different from personal letters in that they are not one-on-one. The examination essays are open letters and can be read by a wide range of readers. Drafting a title can better express the candidate's views and ideas. Couplet, seven-character.

——Pay attention to the letter format. When calling "Mom and Dad" at the beginning, write in the upper case. Use "you" instead of "you", which means you are compound fingers. The signature at the end should be concise, and the attributive should not be too long, such as "unfilial son", which appears rigorous and solemn; time comes after the signature, which is the case for all practical articles. This is common sense. Pay attention to the format of the greetings "Best regards" and "Wish you good health".

——To highlight values.

The core value of "Three Views" is 24 words, which is very important. The composition is the weather vane of the college entrance examination. It not only affects the candidates, but also affects the value orientation of the entire society. It is not just for a while, but may be for many years, so the driving force of the composition proposition is " Positive energy" is the "main theme". Student Ru Yi, the article is well written, but the last sentence is "By the way, it is easy to find a partner if you study medicine!" Sorry, this is not the understanding of high school students, so more points will be deducted!

——Learn to be reasonable. Pay attention to the writing objects, which are your parents. You need to exchange your views on "study medicine", pay attention to the way of dialogue, analyze the psychology of your parents, be calm, follow the instructions, and be moved with emotion and reason. Your parents' opinions have their own reasons and starting points. You are a quasi-college student with knowledge and cultivation. You don't have to adopt them, but you can't be unreasonable. "Go your own way and let others have their say!" "I have the final say on my territory." This statement is unreasonable and unreasonable. This is "willful". This is the trouble caused by reading fast food culture and blindly pursuing individual liberation!

——Close to the topic of "learning medicine". Since the target is your parents, your parents probably don't know about your examples of "Sun Simiao", "Li Shizhen", "Tu Youyou", and "Hua Tuo". Don’t talk empty words. Use famous quotes, aphorisms, and ancient poems sparingly. Just talk about things your parents can understand. Start talking about “interests,” “specialties,” and “ideals,” and just state facts and make sense. A classmate said, "When he had a fever in junior high school, the doctor treated him promptly. He was deeply impressed. Studying medicine can save lives and repay the society." This kind of reasoning is very down-to-earth and humane. Parents can easily accept it. This is the quality of language communication.

——Be good at summarizing and improving. You need to have special to general thinking and broaden your writing ideas. You can talk about society's views on studying medicine, your views on the financial industry, the risks of financial investment, and the market economic situation. All of these should reflect your knowledge. If you look at the problem from a high level, have your vision and ambition, and make your reasoning clear and thorough, your parents will naturally believe you.

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Collect good titles and ideas.

Born as bright as a doctor/Show yourself in the wind and rain/Persistence in the torrent/Pursue the dream of studying medicine to the end/Chasing dreams with an innocent heart/Use dreams as horses, live up to your time/Dreams bloom, life Mi Xiang/Feelings are better than money/Aim high and don’t care about things/Where your heart belongs, what you want/What suits you is the best/Don’t let yourself follow the crowd/Only when your personality blooms can your life shine/The benevolence of a healer The heart is not for profit/Don’t let hope become a burden/I listen to my voice, freedom is in the heart/Live life for yourself/Stick to the original intention, and you will always succeed/The dream sky is exceptionally blue/My choice is my responsibility/The original intention is youth Praise/Born to dream, just for feelings/Financial integrity is valuable, medical education is more expensive/On the road to dreams, the fragrance of flowers is fragrant/But do good deeds and don’t ask about the future.