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As time goes by, the old traces are washed away, leaving only the dreariness and sadness of the desert. On the edge of the water, you drift away, leaving only Chu's gaze and sigh.

Or like sweet taste, or love is bitter and sweet stimulation, who is like you-Zhuangzi, indifferent to everything, integrated with the Tao, only paranoid about that faint innocence.

When a kind of beauty makes people feel overwhelmed, they have to dance for it with their hands and feet; When a kind of insipid, light makes people unable to taste, we have to sigh and cherish it and praise it. You are willing to be indifferent, content with being plain, complacent in being plain, only willing to have fun in become a butterfly in your dreams, only willing to wander around the world with hovering Peng, unwilling to be tired of state affairs and unwilling to set foot in the world. You are like the sweet and fragrant mineral water, giving people a desperate life, a quiet and far-reaching life, and something detached. I tried to touch your skirt, but I touched it at my fingertips.

But I can't get rid of the sweet temptation, and I can't forget the bitter or sweet fragrance. When there is no way out, I have to look at your calm eyes, which are unusually clear and long, and I can't see the end of the world.

I thought you were lonely, but you told me that a friend of a gentleman is as light as water. Keiko's departure didn't bring you anything like that. It turns out that you have already seen through life and death and the world of mortals. Why praise your plainness? I have nothing to say.

Miss the past and compete in prosperity. You are still wandering freely in the outside world, understanding the infinity of nature. The world is only your subjective product. Even you know the happiness of river fish, the joy of butterfly dance and the guilt of mantis, swaying away and shuttling through the mire. Why care about the power struggle? Who said you have to bear the unbearable weight of life?

There is a bright moon in the distance. You watch the bright moon alone on a breezy night, so that the bright moon will not be lost when people sit back and relax-just because your dull hearts are chasing each other. The world laughs at your madness, but your cold eyes are speechless. You suddenly realize that your faint spring-like philosophy is so profound, but you are already floating.

I only caught a glimpse of you, but I caught a glimpse of a dull and far-reaching attitude towards life. I will never be dominated by everything. I am alone in the turbid waves, and I only want to die holding the bright moon. There is a withered tobacco and a white mustard on the river.

Teach me how to follow in your footsteps, beauty is the essence of being at a loss; Teach me how to touch your skirt, that kind of indifferent attitude.

This is you, as light as spring, your paranoid pursuit, a Bai Mudan fluttering beside spring, an ethereal song for you.

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This composition makes us sit up and take notice of students' life perception ability and writing ability. In fact, the realm of Zhuangzi is beyond the reach of ordinary people, but the author has a deep understanding. Otherwise, explaining an indifferent philosophy through a person's life realm is easy to fall into a stereotype, or become an introduction to the deeds of people, and it is difficult to see new ideas. The author borrows a large number of Zhuangzi fables and refined language, extracts the essence, synthesizes the text, is full of literary talent and breath, and shows a high school student's Chinese accomplishment well. Some sentences in the article, such as "I want to touch your skirt, but I feel a clear, clear, cool and soft spring at my fingertips" and "A piece of white mourning element fluttering by the spring is an ethereal song for you", are flexible and elastic, and are the creative use of the author. (Yang Jisheng)

In 2008, Fujian college entrance examination scored a perfect composition "The Canal is so clear"

Life is like running water, clear and faint. Don't be magnificent, ups and downs, it will make people tired; Don't use colorful colors, it just gives people a mirage illusion.

The trajectory of life doesn't always go in the right direction as planned. You need a calm heart to face the unknown calmly.

During the Cultural Revolution, painter Huang Yongyu and writer's uncle Shen Congwen passed each other on the way down the mountain. Shen Congwen told Huang Yongyu lightly: "Be calm." Ten years of turmoil in the past, Huang Yongyu said those three words will always come to mind inadvertently.

Indeed, what a calm and open-minded attitude towards life! As clear as water, but as firm as water, it never stops. That is to show others a "piece of ice in a jade pot" calm!

As the old saying goes, a friend of a gentleman is as light as water. It can be seen that water is also a measure and a very high standard in dealing with interpersonal relationships.

A friend of a gentleman is not in fame and fortune. Zhuangzi said: "Don't be ambitious for the crown, and don't be vulgar for the sake of difference." Confucius said: "A gentleman is harmonious but different; A gentleman is not as good as a week. " As friends of water, we don't need the smell of copper to pollute it, let alone confuse it because we disagree. The sages set an example for us in dealing with people and things. In Boya period, mountains and rivers met bosom friends, and the poet Du Li and his poetry friends paid tribute to each other, and so on. Communication with people is as clear as water, as harmonious as water and as warm as water. Harmony is proud of * * *.

Clear water has always been the representative symbol of the whole national spirit. In the face of the people in Jiangshan, Lao Tzu said that "goodness is like water"; Du Fu said: "Moisturize things silently".

The earthquake in May, the Sichuan earthquake zone touched the hearts of people all over the country. People silently prayed for the people in the disaster area and silently contributed their meager strength. We can't remember the names of every rescuer, every donor and every medical worker ... but we know that they have love, respect for life and sincerity to the country! Great love is traceless, great love is like water, and it moistens things silently.

This is a person's attitude towards life, the criterion of communication with others, and the highest level of dedication to the country and the nation!

No waves, no colors, only silence like water, which is the highest respect for life!

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The biggest feature of this paper is that it can be put away freely, natural and unrestrained, and it is close to the center. From the introduction of "life is like running water, clear and faint", from Shen Congwen's "calmness" to the alternative interpretation of "friendship between gentlemen is as light as water" and "mountains and rivers meet bosom friends", it is finally concluded that "clear water" has become a symbol of national spirit. The article runs through the whole article with the lightness of water and endows it with rich cultural connotation. With novel materials, the stories of Huang Yongyu and Shen Congwen seem casual, but they are sincere. The material of the Sichuan earthquake has also been skillfully included in the category of "water", which shows that the author has a high ability to control the material. (Tang Shengsheng)

Full-Score Composition and Comments on Guangxi College Entrance Examination in 2008 —— Castle Peak with Wind and Rain

"Hold your hand gently and dry your tears for you. This heart will always belong to you, tell me that I am no longer alone. "

On May 19, China, who had been running wildly, paused for three minutes in the sharp air defense alarm. Seven days ago, at the same time, a devastating earthquake shook most of China, which was a national disaster.

However, the national mourning is a tragedy, and the national mourning is an unprecedented happy reunion.

A long time ago, the poet Wang Changling wrote in his poem: "The green hills are always stormy, and the bright moon is never two townships". Castle Peak cannot prevent us from sharing weal and woe, and the region will not disappear into the same moon above the United Nations.

A person, a glimmer of hope, a firm heart. When the rescue team rescued Le Liuhui who was trapped under the ruins of Wenchuan earthquake 100 hours, all the people present cried excitedly, but she didn't cry. "I believe someone will come to save me, I will, I believe you!" The weak woman cried, followed by the rescuer's hand, and one hand shook hands with more than a dozen hands. This is the simplest and most sincere reunion of a victim and her savior.

How high is the altitude of 5 thousand meters? Ask the PLA soldiers who took part in the rescue, and they will tell you that 5 kilometers is the distance we can jump here quickly, holding hands with the affected people, regardless of the dark clouds. This is the most touching reunion between the villagers and the country.

The ocean once divided the world into opposing regions, but today's ocean no longer prevents the love of the world from coming together. This love comes from the donation box in front of every convenience store in Oriental Japan, from the charitable organizations all over the States in the United States on the other side of the ocean, and from the friendship donations from those Asian and African countries on both sides of the mainland that are not rich. The ideological difference between China and the world vanished in the face of disaster, and with the continuous arrival of planes and ships from the East to China, this is the biggest reunion of the hearts of people all over the world and all countries.

Sadness has existed since ancient times. However, since ancient times, who has seen such inspiring and earth-shattering unity? "Historical Records" has a cloud: the people are in harmony with the people, then the family is safe, and the monarch is in harmony with the people, then the country is prosperous. Today, this is the joint efforts of people and people, people and countries, and countries and the world. Why are you worried about family unrest and national prosperity?

Castle peak together, we go through the storm together and get together. And the bond that connects people all over the world may be this expectation:

Stand for the world, stand for the people, study for the holy school, and be peaceful for the world!

Comments: The article conforms to the meaning of the question, selects typical cases and demonstrates them in depth at different levels. The materials are fresh and rich, the ideas are ingenious, the viewpoints are novel, and the language is fluent. Set modern lyrics, ancient poems and realistic scenes in one furnace, rich in literary talent and profound in literary background. Beautiful writing, broad vision, lofty artistic conception and profound thoughts. Score 60 points.

Shanghai 08 is the only composition with full marks in the college entrance examination-they.

At the end of the city, there is no bustling market, no shining neon lights; At the end of the city, there are only weather-beaten dilapidated shanty towns; At the end of the city, there are a group of people like them.

What should I call them? Children of migrant workers? Farmers' children? Or the second generation of migrant workers? No, I don't want to call them by these cold names. I want to call them by their simple birth names, hold their hands and approach their lives. ...

They grew up in the green mountains and green waters of their hometown, and their pure souls started jointing in the fields. In the wind of Shan Ye, they are running and dreaming. The wind blew into the city from the fields. For their livelihood and future, they followed their parents to the city and took root at the end of the city. So I got used to the eyes of green mountains and green waters, and came into contact with tall buildings and traffic for the first time. They don't know how to cross the six-lane road, and their little hands can't tell the floors of the office building. Prosperous modern civilization has never brought them any happiness, but this time, it has left a deep imprint on their hearts.

They took up their schoolbags and carefully integrated into city life. But in the strange eyes of "city people", I understood the difference between hukou and temporary residence permit for the first time. Are the treasures in parents' hearts! But prematurely assumed the burden that does not belong to this era.

When they come home from school, they cook a simple dinner, and their parents are still working at the construction site or the food market; Wake up in the middle of the night, the starry sky in the city is not as bright as my tearful hometown; Make a wish quietly, hoping that their primary school for children of migrant workers will not close down tomorrow because they can't pay the electricity bill. ...

However, I saw their growth in their growing bodies. I remember a reporter asked a child in a school for migrant children if he would go back to his hometown after graduation. The little girl said without hesitation: Of course, he must go back! At that moment, I almost cried for their growth.

I remember their childish declaration on the Spring Festival Evening that year: "Our school is small, but its grades are not bad", "We don't compare with children in the city" and "Beijing's 2008 is also our 2008!" They gradually matured, bid farewell to yesterday's shyness and began to welcome a new day.

Although, they are still worried about small tuition fees; Although, the school still can't afford to pay the utilities; Although, there are still many imperfect systems ... although there are many "although", only one "but" is enough. Many eyes have turned to them, and they are thriving.

The sun rises from the horizon, illuminating the end of the city and their lives.

They will eventually become us.

Correct the teacher's comments:

Full-mark composition has five advantages. First, the composition truly depicts the living conditions of migrant workers' children, from the unnatural and unsuitable experience from rural to urban to the gradual maturity of their mentality, which makes people feel like a real group; Secondly, the composition is written smoothly, which shows that the candidates have accumulated a certain amount of reading, but they have not shown off, properly expressed their emotions and horizons, and the words and themes are well coordinated; Third, on the whole, the composition expresses the author's sympathy, concern and expectation for his peers, and also reflects the requirements of the composition topic. Fourth, the description of this article is very delicate. "Little finger can't count how many floors there are in an office building"; Finally, the article focuses on the changes of migrant workers' children. "They will eventually become us." Candidates did not complain blindly, but wrote changes and hopes.

Fujian college entrance examination perfect score composition: "Pin Jiangnan"

Taste is everyone's unique mark. Obsessed with the sweetness of fruit juice is the pursuit of youthful taste; Indulging in the bitterness of coffee is an awakening to adversity; Clinging to the tranquility of spring water, it is difficult to let go of Jiangnan. But I am trapped in the misty rain in the south of the Yangtze River.

Take a sip of light mineral water, and the taste of Jiangnan will ripple on the tip of your tongue. ? Misty rain awakens the thoughts of passers-by at this moment, and the dense water vapor permeates the elegance and gentleness of women in Jiangnan. The bright moonlight poured down, and A Bing's "Two Springs Reflecting the Moon" cut through the quiet water. The three handles of the erhu echoed the quiet atmosphere in the middle of the night in the south of the Yangtze River. Spirituality is like the lines on your palm, which make up one action after another on the lake. At this moment, the noise of the city and the peddling of businessmen cannot be related to it. The tranquility of the water town is sublimated under the rendering of moonlight. This is the taste of Jiangnan, a faint, refreshing and stable force.

The beautiful feeling of being as close as lips and teeth, a mouthful of mineral water will not destroy the sweetness of Jiangnan. Speaking of Jiangnan, the soil beside Sanshengshi is fragrant and fresh, but the enthusiasm of Jiangnan people is even more unforgettable. It is as simple and sweet as spring water, which washes away the dust in the world and is so pure that there is no trace of pollution. Boating in the water town, the woman who propped up the bamboo pole skillfully crossed the oblique wind and sunset, and in one song after another, she also appreciated the charm of Jiangnan. Enthusiastic water people hold cups of pure spring water and arrange delicious meals on the table. I haven't seen this defenseless conversation for a long time. Just relax。 The simplicity and sincerity of Jiangnan will break the mask of the city and show a sincere smile. This is the flavor of Jiangnan in Gan Chun's works, stretching nervous nerves.

With the attachment to the spring water, drinking the water in the cup in one gulp, that kind of free and easy breath, is the historical taste of Jiangnan pride. The drums are ringing and the battle horn is blowing. "Forty-three years, I still remember in hope, and I was on fire in Yangzhou Road." I used to be magnificent, I used to be an iron horse. On the long scroll of Jiangnan history, the fearless breath is still faint. The grass trees in the sunset are ordinary and strange, and there are also clank iron bones that Jiangnan will never give up. This is the taste of Jiangnan, as straightforward and refreshing as spring water.

I walked through the south of the Yangtze River and looked like a lotus in the season. While enjoying the spring water and the south of the Yangtze River, the brilliance of human feelings also draws a blue picture on the blueprint of the soul.

As the flavor of the water town continues, the dirty dust in that city seems unable to invade the heart washed away by the misty rain in the south of the Yangtze River.

In the temple of the soul, I pray devoutly, just to be a person who keeps the taste of Jiangnan in the mud of troubled times.

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Without poetry, there would be no Jiangnan; Without poetic language, it is not enough to express poetic Jiangnan; Without poetic comments, it is not enough to describe the charm of Jiangnan.

The soul of this poem is picturesque. A huqin, a moonlight and a knowing smile can weave the beautiful latitude and longitude of the south of the Yangtze River, and weave a silky gentle texture. The figure of the pole, the slanting wind and the leisurely singing voice can also be described as a meaningful and pleasing landscape axis, and the life situation here is leisurely to see Nanshan. And the golden drum, the long bonfire road, was also embraced poetically and gently, ironed into a pot of wine, comforting the soul on a snowy night in the south of the Yangtze River. Jiangnan, painting, water is more mellow than wine, meaning is deeper than painting. The blooming lotus is as beautiful as the four seasons, falling in the stream of life, pointing out the poetic leisure and pursuit of life in the south of the Yangtze River.

Literary talent is better than flowers, and talent is like water. Only in this way can you keep pace with Jiangnan and seek the same spirit. How can a writer check his heart from time to time and sign an agreement with a beautiful life to gain immortality and spirituality?